The Fallen Tortle 1 Posted February 22 Report Share Posted February 22 (edited) The Planet Mercury Level 1 Earth Rock ATK/1100 DEF/100 When this card is Summoned, you can add 1 "The Planet Venus" from your deck to your hand. When this card leaves the field, you can Special Summon 1 "The Planet Venus" from your hand. You can only use this effect of "The Planet Mercury" once per turn. The Planet Venus Level 2 Earth Rock ATK/1400 DEF/400 When this card is Summoned, you can add 1 "The Planet Earth" from your deck to your hand. When this card leaves the field, you can Special Summon 1 "The Planet Earth" from your hand. You can only use this effect of "The Planet Venus" once per turn. The Planet Earth Level 3 Earth Rock ATK/1700 DEF/700 When this card is Summoned, you can add 1 "The Planet Mars" from your deck to your hand. Once per turn, you can add 1 "The Moon Luna" from your deck to your hand. When this card leaves the field, you can Special Summon 1 "The Planet Mars" From your hand. You can only use this effect of "The Planet Earth" once per turn. The Planet Mars Level 4 Earth Rock ATK/2000 DEF/1000 When this card is Summoned, you can add 1 "The Planet Jupiter" from your deck to your hand. Once per turn, you can add either 1 "The Moon Phobos", or "The Moon Deimos" from your deck to your hand. When this card leaves the field, you can Special Summon 1 "The Planet Jupiter" from your hand. You can only use this effect of "The Planet Mars" once per turn. The Planet Jupiter Level 5 Wind Wyrm ATK/2300 DEF/1300 When this card is Summoned, you can add 1 "The Planet Saturn" from your deck to your hand. Once per turn, you can add either 1 "The Moon Io", "The Moon Europa", "The Moon Ganymede", or "The Moon Callisto" from your deck to your hand. When this card leaves the field except when it is used as material for a Summon, you can Special Summon 1 "The Planet Saturn" from your hand. You can only use this effect of "The Planet Jupiter" once per turn. The Planet Saturn Level 6 Wind Wyrm ATK/2600 DEF/1600 When this card is Summoned, you can add 1 "The Planet Uranus" from your deck to your hand. Once per turn, you can add either 1 "The Moon Titan", or "The Moon Enceladus", from your deck to your hand. When this card leaves the field except when it is used as material for a Summon,, you can Special Summon 1 "The Planet Uranus" from your hand. You can only use this effect of "The Planet Saturn", once per turn. The Planet Uranus Level 7 Wind Wyrm ATK/2900 DEF/1900 When this card is Summoned, you can add 1 "The Planet Neptune" from your deck to your hand. Once per turn, you can add either 1 "The Moon Titania", or "The Moon Miranda" from your deck to your hand. When this card leaves the field except when it is used as material for a Summon, you can Special Summon 1 "The Planet Neptune" from your hand. You can only use this effect of "The Planet Uranus" once per turn. The Planet Neptune Level 8 Wind Wyrm ATK/3200 DEF/2200 Cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. Must first be Special Summoned by the effect of "The Planet Uranus", and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways. When this card is Special Summoned, you can add 1 "The Celestial Sun" from your deck to your hand. Once per turn, you can add 1 "The Moon Triton" from your deck to your hand. When this card leaves the field except when it is used as material for a Summon, you can Special Summon 1 "The Celestial Sun" from your hand. You can only use this effect of "The Planet Neptune" once per turn. The Celestial Sun Level 12 Fire Pyro ATK/3800 DEF/2800 Cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. Must first be Special Summoned by the effect of "The Planet Neptune", and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways. When this card is Special Summoned, send all cards your opponent controls to the GY, then your opponent takes 1000 damage for each card sent to the GY by this effect. when this card leaves the field, you can Special Summon 1 "The Galaxy" Xyz Monster from the extra deck and if you do, attach this card to that monster. You can only use this effect of "The Celestial Sun" once per turn. The Galaxy Milky Way Rank 12 Light Wyrm ATK/4100 DEF/3100 2 Level 12 "The Celestial" Monsters Once per turn, you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card; banish all cards in your opponents extra deck face-down, then inflict 500 damage to your opponent for each card banished by this effect. The Moon Luna Equip Spell You can only Equip this card to "The Planet Earth". The equipped monster gains 800 ATK, and is unaffected by Spell effects. The Moon Phobos Equip Spell You can only Equip this card to "The Planet Mars". The equipped monster gains 800 ATK and can make a second attack during each Battle Phase. The Moon Deimos Equip Spell You can only Equip this card to "The Planet Mars". The equipped monster gains 800 ATK. When the equipped monster battles an opponents monster, destroy it before the Damage Step. The Moon Io Equip Spell You can only Equip this card to "The Planet Jupiter". The equipped monster gains 800 ATK. Once per turn, you can target 1 Monster your opponent controls, destroy it. The Moon Europa Equip Spell You can only Equip this card to "The Planet Jupiter". The equipped monster gains 800 ATK. Once per turn, you can target 1 Spell/Trap card your opponent controls, destroy it. The Moon Ganymede Equip Spell You can only Equip this card to "The Planet Jupiter". The equipped monster gains 800 ATK. Once per turn, you can randomly send 1 card in your opponents hand to the GY. The Moon Callisto Equip Spell You can only Equip this card to "The Planet Jupiter". The equipped monster gains 800 ATK. Once per turn, when an effect is activated in the GY, negate the activation and if you do, banish it. The Moon Titan Equip Spell You can only Equip this card to "The Planet Saturn". The equipped monster gains 800 ATK and is unaffected by Trap effects. The Moon Enceladus Equip Spell You can only Equip this card to "The Planet Saturn". The equipped monster gains 800 ATK and is unaffected by Monster effects. The Moon Titania Equip Spell You can only Equip this card to "The Planet Uranus". The equipped monster gains 800 ATK. Once per turn, you can add 1 "The Planet" card from your GY to your hand. The Moon Miranda Equip Spell You can only Equip this card to "The Planet Uranus". The equipped monster gains 800 ATK. Once per turn, you can add 1 "The Moon" card from your GY to your hand. The Moon Triton Equip Spell You can only Equip this card to "The Planet Neptune". The equipped monster gains 800 ATK. Once per turn, you can target 2 cards your opponent controls, destroy it. The Rocky Planets Quick-Play Spell Card (This card is always treated as a "The Planet" card). Discard 2 cards, then Special Summon 4 Earth attribute "The Planet" Monsters from your deck in defense position. You can only activate 1 "The Rocky Planets" per turn. The Gas Giants Quick-Play Spell Card (This card is always treated as a "The Planet" card). Discard 3 Wyrm "The Planet" Monsters, then Special Summon 2 Wyrm "The Planet" Monsters from the deck in defense position. You can only activate 1 "The Gas Giants" per turn. Edited February 23 by The Fallen Tortle 1 Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Rayfield Lumina 555 Posted February 22 Report Share Posted February 22 Well, damn, this is cute. I remember back in my days at high school I was pretty interested in planets and outer space in general. I'm kinda outraged Pluto is not around xD. Yeah yeah, I know it was demoted from being a planet many years ago and, AFAIK, that hasn't been reversed. Back in my days, it was a planet, so the absence hurts. The archetype is pretty simple, and partly effective, but has some important flaws. The equipments are all over the place, one or two for each planet. That's no good. Reason being, it is rather likely the equipment will be dead in the hand if you don't have quick access to the correspondent planet. Yep, there's a chain of Summoning -> Searching - Leaving the field - Special Summoning, but that's relatively brittle and easy to interrupt by the opponent. If it were me, I'd allow the whole archetype to be equipped by the moons. Evidently, this works against the flavour, having each satellite be equipped only to the planet it belongs IRL. The flavour is nice, in competitive environment, it is not. Now, I have an issue with the big boys of the archetype. You might think their extremely powerful effects are balanced by the difficulty of Summoning, which is not the case. Neptune can be Summoned with great ease, in part due to "The Gas Giants". but on top of that, all of these guys activate their effects when "they leave the field", meaning, you can just use a Planet as material for a Link 1, Special Summon the next, use it along with the Link, Summon a Link 2, etc, until you get the Sun, which has an extremely overpowered effect that can kill the opponent in one shot at a bad moment. On top of that, we got the Milky Way. Even if the opponent survives the Sun's effect, you just make this card leave the field with another Summon, or heck, even a Compulsory or Dark Hole will do), Summon Milky Way, banish all monsters in the opponent's Extra Deck and inflict 7500 (max.) dmg in the process. In short, the big boys need harder clauses. Something like: If this card leaves the field, except if it is used as material for a Summon should help with the balance of the archetype. I see you're new to the site, so welcome and enjoy your stay n.n. Remember that all critique is given with good intention so your cards are the best self possible :) Quote Link to post Share on other sites
The Fallen Tortle 1 Posted February 22 Author Report Share Posted February 22 @Rayfield Lumina Yep thx for the critique. I have always been a huge fan of space in general, so I thought, why not make an whole Archetype about it. Looking back at it, maybe i should of added a harsher restriction to Neptune, since that card is needed to summon the sun, which is the main win condition of this archetype, and the milky way card is more of a win more card than anything else. I like your method of "If this card leaves the field, except if it is used as material for a Summon", That would make the planets not float so easily. For Neptune, it should definitely be "Can only be Special Summoned by the effect of "The Planet Uranus" and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways", just like the Sun. Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Rayfield Lumina 555 Posted February 22 Report Share Posted February 22 9 minutes ago, The Fallen Tortle said: @Rayfield Lumina Yep thx for the critique. I have always been a huge fan of space in general, so I thought, why not make an whole Archetype about it. Looking back at it, maybe i should of added a harsher restriction to Neptune, since that card is needed to summon the sun, which is the main win condition of this archetype, and the milky way card is more of a win more card than anything else. I like your method of "If this card leaves the field, except if it is used as material for a Summon", That would make the planets not float so easily. For Neptune, it should definitely be "Can only be Special Summoned by the effect of "The Planet Uranus" and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways", just like the Sun. You're welcome. And yeah, that should probably help a lot with the floating, making the overall archetype more balanced. Also, as I was saying earlier, making the equipment so they can be given to any planet would be very useful in general. I can understand why you wouldn't change this, as it goes against the reality of the cards, but I'd probably go wilder and make something like "Vagrant Satellite - Insert name for the Satellite here". As if the planet's gravity caught the satellite and that's why it becomes equipped to it. Note that I'm not saying just make all equipment generic, or we'll have Neptune attacking twice with an effect equal to Phobos xD. You can play to avoid this kind of situation, with stuff such as "Can only be equipped to a "Planet" monster. It is unaffected by your opponent's monster effects. If the monster equipped with this card has 2000 or less ATK, it can make a second attack during each Battle Phase." Ah well, just some funny suggestions n.n Quote Link to post Share on other sites
The Fallen Tortle 1 Posted February 23 Author Report Share Posted February 23 "The Planet Jupiter", "The Planet Saturn", "The Planet Uranus", "The Planet Neptune", and "The Gas Giants" cards have been revised to be more balanced. Quote Link to post Share on other sites
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