Guest Blud Posted February 24, 2009 Report Share Posted February 24, 2009 Nobody knows why the world was createdWhat it was made of, or its creation was datedWhen the light was bright, when the darkness corruptedWhen the calm ocean water was interrupted. Nobody knows why the harsh wind blowsWhy the heavy rain falls, why the river flowsWhy the fire inside makes volcanoes eruptWhy the lava burns and burns nature abrupt. Nobody knows why the trees stand so tallWhy the birds fly so high, why the land mammals crawlWhy the fish in the sea swim with such graceWhy the worms eat the soil that dirties the face. Nobody knows what tomorrow will beFor no one can know exactly what there is To see... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~ P O L A R I S ~ Posted February 24, 2009 Report Share Posted February 24, 2009 Cool story bra. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yasu Posted February 24, 2009 Report Share Posted February 24, 2009 They don't ;).lol... cool Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dweller of Parables Posted February 24, 2009 Report Share Posted February 24, 2009 It was an alright story bra. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Blud Posted February 25, 2009 Report Share Posted February 25, 2009 Thanks, guys. There's more to it, I just have writer's block. :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Requiem Posted February 25, 2009 Report Share Posted February 25, 2009 Were you bored or something? It is alright. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Blud Posted February 25, 2009 Report Share Posted February 25, 2009 Were you bored or something? It is alright. Yes and no. No because I was working on homework and yes because I keep dozing off. XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CrabHelmet Posted February 25, 2009 Report Share Posted February 25, 2009 Inconsistent metre, horribly forced rhymes, shallow message, and blatant falsehoods within the poem that completely undermine the point you were struggling to convey. So yeah. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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