DemonicKirby Posted March 12, 2009 Report Share Posted March 12, 2009 I have more but i don't want to upload them till i know that at least this one is good tell me what you think and if you can give some pointers on how to make it better :) thx Effect:Vampire King+Vampire Lord+ Vampire PrinceFor every monster in your graveyard with Vampire in the name add 500 ATK when attacking and 1000 DEF when defending.This card can not be killed by monster or card effect. Effect:This card gains 500 ATK every time it kills a monster. Effect:Only usable when Vampire Queen is on the field. For sacrificing half your life points you can special summon one monster with Vampire in the name. [Only works once per turn] Info:This massive beast guards the Vampire Queens layer with great defensive power.None have ever broken past this beast. Effect:Sacrifice 3 cards from your hand to Special Summon a monster with Vampire in its name. Info:Though weak and frail never underestimate him for he is the controller of time, space, and death. Effect:After attacking this card is placed in DEF mode. Effect:This monster may attack Life Points directly. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gogeta™ Posted March 12, 2009 Report Share Posted March 12, 2009 Holy is not a monster type. Your OCG is dreadful in every sense of the word, but your new so I'll let it slide. The attribute should be DARK and the card needs a ritual card plus text on how to ritual summon it. Also increase the Level of the card to 6 and added a PG-13 tag on the thread title b/c the pic looks a bit PG-13-ish... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DemonicKirby Posted March 12, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 12, 2009 Ok but one question....how do I put a PG-13 tag? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gogeta™ Posted March 12, 2009 Report Share Posted March 12, 2009 Full Edit your first post and put in "PG-13" next to the thread title. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DemonicKirby Posted March 12, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 12, 2009 Better? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gogeta™ Posted March 12, 2009 Report Share Posted March 12, 2009 Well Vampire Lord is already an existing card... Also your ritual monster and spell card are written as if they were fusion cards. Look at ritual monsters like Black Luster Soldier or Magician of Black Chaos and you can correctly write the text. Next: Undead is not a card type. Card types include: Zombie, Fiend, Dragon, Spellcaster, Warrior, Sea Serpent, Fish, Beast-Warrior, Winged-Beast, Aqua, Divine-Beast, Beast, Thunder, Insect, Dinosaur, Machine, Pyro, Plant, Reptile, Rock, and Psychic. In your cards case it would be a Zombie. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DemonicKirby Posted March 12, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 12, 2009 Ok then I'll pick fiend and turn vampire queen into a fusion.Ok I fixed a lot of things that where wrong but I'm sure there is still a lot left to fix so if you all could help I would be very grateful. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DemonicKirby Posted March 12, 2009 Author Report Share Posted March 12, 2009 Huh, I see there was no real point in making my thread was there? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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