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Uhh...err...

 

I'm sorry, but these card effects.....they're just not written well. These couldn't be official card effects at all. And I can't see every image. That's even worse.

 

"A strong human Like love spaghetti!" is so Engrish, unfortunately. Maybe say something like this: "A strong man that loves spaghetti." And Mario is an even WORSE card than his rivals Donkey Kong and Boo! What's up with that? Two tributes and worse than a Summoned Skull?

 

People usually think fake types are bad, so he shouldn't be a spaghetti lover, nor should Boo be a spirit without the usual spirit special ability. If it were a TRUE spirit, its effect would state that it returns to your hand at the end of the turn. And re-word the effect so it looks like a REAL card. Something like this: "On the End Phase of the turn which this card is destroyed, you may Special Summon it. Except on the first turn, this card is unaffected by Spell and Trap cards."

 

Buy a banana to get Donkey Kong back? That's...weird, and saying that isn't really Yu-Gi-Oh card-like. Try saying "When control of this card shifts to your opponent, you can pay 300 Life Points to switch control of it to its original owner." Not very useful, either.

 

I give these a 2/10. Not very creative or useful, I must say.

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Now now people, lets be a little bit more encouriging. He is new after all.

 

Now then, The images are decent enough, but some of the card types aren't real, like Mario's, so next time use real types.

 

The OCG is quite bad I must say, but Kendo Fish has stated most of these anyway, but I'd suggest that you use a real YuGiOh card to look back at to see how the Grammer is done here.

 

The effects are a little bit too simple, so I suggest that you make them more interesting, as well as matching the characters more (Even though you've done the second part quite well allready).

 

Theres not much else for me too say, so I'll give u a 2.5/10. Don't gove up though, keep trying ur best and use other peoples feedback, and u'll be ok.

 

:mrgreen: Laterz :mrgreen:

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