An old Classic

[Phoenix Helix]

Looking through all the cards people have made like Mario and Pokemon: remind me so much of when i was a kid :P and thinking about those times i remembered my all time childhood obession lol

 

This has probably been made before XD but hey why not make another ;P depending on how well this card's reviewed i might make more

 

(Newer Version)

 

(Equip Spell that supports it)

[RedRecker]

Try and give it an effect. Normal monsters are just too plain and don't show much creativity. Try to think of something related to what it does in... what ever element of Pop Culture it comes from. What is that thing actually? Hehe, I don't actually know. Anyways, have a go at giving it an effect and I'll take another look.

[Phoenix Helix]

Hmmm alright i'll do just that :) cheers dude

[Yoshymitsu]

A vanilla! Hehe nice card.

[RedRecker]

Just saw your updated card with the effect. Not bad for a first go, just a couple of things to fix here and there. There are perhaps a number of ways one could phrase the effect but basically what you are wanting to say is that the effect is only active when you have that spell card on the field right? In which case, it would be better to put that bit last and say something along the lines of:

 

Once per turn, during your Main Phase 1, you can flip a coin. If the result is heads, this card can attack all monsters on your opponent's side of the field this Battle Phase. If the result is tails, you must skip your next Battle Phase. This effect can only be activated if "Dragon Dagger" is face-up on the field.

 

That description should be good enough. there were a couple of minor issues with grammar and spelling and I also reckon you should change the activation timing to Main Phase 1 instead of during the Battle Phase. This is because the effect is activated by choice, meaning one could activate it at any time during the Battle Phase. For example, with it staying the same as it is now, one could attack with all of their monsters and then activate the effect of this card. Therefore, if the result was tails on the coin toss, you would only skip the end of your Battle Phase (I saw this as a bit of a loophole). There is also no real need to say "Dragon Dagger" is a continuous spell card as there are normally not multiple cards with the same name and its name alone should be sufficient (at least, I think that should be enough) You still can if you want to but I don't think it needs it.

Another mistake was in use of OCG (official card grammar, i believe). For example:

this monster - cards do generally not refer to themselves as 'this monster' but instead 'this card'.

lands on - with coin tosses we talk about the result of the coin toss. See the rewritten effect for how one should write it.

Flip - unless at beginning of a sentence, this word is not one of those that is always capitalised.

Monster - this is a slightly odd one. If on it's own, do not capitalise it (unless at the beginning of a sentence of course, but it won't be). You only capitalise it when you talk about a specific type of card such as:

Monster Card

Spirit Monster

Toon Monster

etc, when it is just 'monster', no capital.

may - don't use it. Use 'can'. Don't know why, that's just how it goes.

 

Ok, that is all I have to say. Hope what I have said helps - I am trying to help after all. Hehe, if you are stuck on anything else I would be happy to help as best I can. Good luck with card making.

[Phoenix Helix]

Just saw your updated card with the effect. Not bad for a first go' date=' just a couple of things to fix here and there. There are perhaps a number of ways one could phrase the effect but basically what you are wanting to say is that the effect is only active when you have that spell card on the field right? In which case, it would be better to put that bit last and say something along the lines of:

 

Once per turn, during your Main Phase 1, you can flip a coin. If the result is heads, this card can attack all monsters on your opponent's side of the field this Battle Phase. If the result is tails, you must skip your next Battle Phase. This effect can only be activated if "Dragon Dagger" is face-up on the field.

 

That description should be good enough. there were a couple of minor issues with grammar and spelling and I also reckon you should change the activation timing to Main Phase 1 instead of during the Battle Phase. This is because the effect is activated by choice, meaning one could activate it at any time during the Battle Phase. For example, with it staying the same as it is now, one could attack with all of their monsters and then activate the effect of this card. Therefore, if the result was tails on the coin toss, you would only skip the end of your Battle Phase (I saw this as a bit of a loophole). There is also no real need to say "Dragon Dagger" is a continuous spell card as there are normally not multiple cards with the same name and its name alone should be sufficient (at least, I think that should be enough) You still can if you want to but I don't think it needs it.

Another mistake was in use of OCG (official card grammar, i believe). For example:

this monster - cards do generally not refer to themselves as 'this monster' but instead 'this card'.

lands on - with coin tosses we talk about the result of the coin toss. See the rewritten effect for how one should write it.

Flip - unless at beginning of a sentence, this word is not one of those that is always capitalised.

Monster - this is a slightly odd one. If on it's own, do not capitalise it (unless at the beginning of a sentence of course, but it won't be). You only capitalise it when you talk about a specific type of card such as:

Monster Card

Spirit Monster

Toon Monster

etc, when it is just 'monster', no capital.

may - don't use it. Use 'can'. Don't know why, that's just how it goes.

 

Ok, that is all I have to say. Hope what I have said helps - I am trying to help after all. Hehe, if you are stuck on anything else I would be happy to help as best I can. Good luck with card making.

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Goodness i never thought there was so much to making cards lol XD ah well guess ive got alot to work on :P cheers for the offer of help