NEW SYNCHRO+ASSAULT MODE VERSION

[exowolf]

Hope you like my new cards

Effect: 1 tuner+2 or more non-tuner monsters

This card cannot be destroyed by battle. If this card is attacked by a monster with a higher ATK then this card is sent to the graveyard. You can special summon this card from the graveyard by removing from play monsters in the graveyard whose combined level(s) is equal to the level of this card. For each turn this card has spent in the graveyard this card gains 200 ATK.

Effect: This card cannot be normal summoned or set. This card cannot be special summoned except by the effect of "Assault Mode Activate". If this card on the field is sent to the graveyard you may special summon 1 "Crimson Mirage Dragon" if you do this cards effect is not activated. You can special summon this card from the graveyard by removing from play 1 monster in your graveyard. For each turn this card has spent in the graveyard this card gains 400 ATK and DEF.

[Baroque in Paradise]

Hope you like my new cards

Effect: 1 tuner+2 or more non-tuner monsters

This card cannot be destroyed by battle. If this card is attacked by a monster with a higher ATK then this card is sent to the graveyard. You can special summon this card from the graveyard by removing from play monsters in the graveyard whose combined level(s) is equal to the level of this card. For each turn this card has spent in the graveyard this card gains 200 ATK.

Effect: This card cannot be normal summoned or set. This card cannot be special summoned except by the effect of "Assault Mode Activate". If this card on the field is sent to the graveyard you may special summon 1 "Crimson Mirage Dragon" if you do this cards effect is not activated. You can special summon this card from the graveyard by removing from play 1 monster in your graveyard. For each turn this card has spent in the graveyard this card gains 400 ATK and DEF.

 

Interesting concept' date=' but here's a tip: make it so that Crimson Mirage has an effect stating that you can control only one "Crimson Mirage Dragon" or "Crimson Mirage Dragon/Assault Mode", otherwise things might start to get hairy.

 

Also, take a cue from Stardust/Assault with your Assault Mode's effect -- as it stands, your own effect says that it cannot be Special Summoned EXCEPT by Assault Mode Activate, meaning that its own effect can't work. So, here's a little OCG fix to change that (lifted straight from Stardust/AM, I might add):

 

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by the effect of this card and "Assault Mode Activate".

 

Next, let us take a look at your Special Summon effect; I am not sure whether you want to have it be activated when he is destroyed or just sent to the Graveyard, because otherwise I can see someone Summoning a Monarch and bringing back the great brute. So if you want it to work only when destroyed, then let us pillage another piece of text from Stardust/AM:

 

When this card on the field is destroyed, you can Special Summon 1 "Crimson Mirage Dragon" from your Graveyard (if you use this effect, this card's other effect cannot activate).

 

And after that, let us get to the meat of your monster's worth -- a very original piece of work, if I say so myself; I've not seen anything quite like it before. So let's see if I can OCG-fix it right!

 

You can Special Summon this card from the Graveyard by removing 1 monster in your Graveyard from play. This card gains 400 ATK and DEF for each turn this card has spent in the Graveyard.

 

And with that, sew it all together and you have your OCG fix a la Baroque.

 

Now to review . . .

 

Crimson Mirage Dragon: Very interesting that you made it require 2 non-Tuners, much like Field Marshall and a couple other monsters in the OCG. That certainly acts as a very smooth nerf that I can really get behind -- and as for the main effect, that it can Special Summon itself a la Graveyard Synchro is quite refreshing; that is to say, I've literally not seen anything like it. Though, as an aside, you might want to add a 'ruling' to this page -- not an addition to the effect, but a little side note -- as to whether or not its Graveyard Gain (if you will pardon the term) is cumulative over multiple stays or related only to its last sojourn to the Graveyard. (That is, does it gain based on the total turns it's been dead over the course of the duel, or does it gain based on the number of turns it was last in the Graveyard?)

 

Crimson Mirage Dragon/Assault Mode: More unique and interesting flavor to this monster, playing to the same theme but putting a unique spin on things, this is quite something! I look forward to seeing more cards with this kind of ingenuity from you, and coming from yours truly that is praise to keep to heart.

 

And now for the usual disclaimer: I mean no offense by anything I say here, if you should possibly find offense from anything I've said here.

[chizuruotohime]

The third card reminds me of Rainbow Dragon~~!!

 

And I know Assault mode should have armors and protective shields...Just my opinion...

 

8/10

[Baroque in Paradise]

The third card reminds me of Rainbow Dragon~~!!

 

And I know Assault mode should have armors and protective shields...Just my opinion...

 

8/10

 

Uh . . . that 'third card' is in his sig, like you have Kosmos.

 

As for the 'Assault modes and armor' -- it technically DOES, it's just organic. I guess.

[chizuruotohime]

and on top of that, i notice that assault modes added two stars and 500 atk and def.

[exowolf]

i put 200+ ATK and DEF and +2 stars on it already and the "you MAY special summon 1 "Crimson Mirage Dragon" if you do this cards effect is not activated." you can summon the synchro version or you can activate its effect. so it gives you a choice for which effect to choose.