Oxigen King

[Verlocity]

This is the first card from my new set.

Could you please tell me the errors so i can change them.

Once every turn you can destroy one of your opponents monster. When this creature is destroyed you can Summon 2 "Oxygen Tokens"(Spellcaster-Type/Wind/Level1/Atk 500/Def 0)on your side of the field.

[SpartanGio]

Ocg errors, pic is meh, 6/10

[Cypress]

yes, if you are going to make a set, put them in the set thread. you r in other cards thread.

[Verlocity]

i know but this is only a card.and tell me the errors

[Felix]

Post the effect as text so that it's easier for me to edit.

 

EDIT: Never mind you already did it.

[Cypress]

and another thing, even just this card, belongs in realistic cards, not other cards

 

and for the card itself:

King's Edition is not a circulation

effect: little OP, make it so there is a cost to destroy a monster

 

Effect may read:

Once per turn, you can pay 700 lifepoints[just an example] to destroy 1 face-up monster on the field. When this card is destroyed, Special Summon 2 "Oxygen Tokens"(Spellcaster-type/WIND/Level 1/ATK 500/DEF 0) onto your side of the field.

 

comments from origional:

- you had to have a cost, i put lifepoint pay for example. you can swich lifepoint amount, monster tribute, discard, etc.

- to make less OP, put face-up

- use monster, or card. creature is not OCG (which means official card grammer if you didnt know)

- you needed a comma after destroyed

- put a space between level and 1

- all letters in ATK and DEF need to be capitalized

 

tada

 

8/10

which is good for a 2star

[Felix]

Once per turn' date=' you can pay 700 [b']L[/b]ife Points [just an example] to destroy 1 face-up monster on the field. When this card is destroyed, Special Summon 2 "Oxygen Tokens"(Spellcaster-type/WIND/Level 1/ATK 500/DEF 0).

 

Don't need the last bit.