Careless Whisper Posted May 26, 2009 Report Share Posted May 26, 2009 [align=center]Hardened and Punished I lay in chains as if slaved by a merciless hand. Nothing, not even God may understand. This pain within me grows stronger still, until the agony inside my heart rises far above the burning hill. Silent, my mind will stay between arrows and lass,Justly volleyed through shattered glass.The bleeding love given to meHas no worth to a man of suchDisgusting and informoral inferiority. Angered, the lass casts me down furtherDown a Hell unknownst to me nor Gievur.Plunging through the podsof Angels whose dissappointmentis a little scale compared to God's. Hardened, I was, against the glory of Him.He, who had given me strength and wim.Repaid, he was, with nothing of priceTo His liking nor of anyone's.Down, sent through a world of Ice. [/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
B3lly N3rd Posted May 26, 2009 Report Share Posted May 26, 2009 oh look..now people write poems..looks like my poem..yep..really got pplz intrested lols..i didnt read past the title.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted May 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 26, 2009 oh look..now people write poems..looks like my poem..yep..really got pplz intrested lols..i didnt read past the title.. I've been writing poems. Mine are just a lot more unique than "Roses are Red, Violets are blue." Anyone can make a rhyme off of that line. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Juuzou Posted May 26, 2009 Report Share Posted May 26, 2009 oh look..now people write poems..looks like my poem..yep..really got pplz intrested lols..i didnt read past the title.. I've been writing poems. Mine are just a lot more unique than "Roses are Red' date=' Violets are blue." Anyone can make a rhyme off of that line.[/quote'] roses are red violets are bluewhoever uses itis stupid and rude cool poem Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
B3lly N3rd Posted May 26, 2009 Report Share Posted May 26, 2009 lol..its not cool its rude... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prada Posted May 26, 2009 Report Share Posted May 26, 2009 lol..its not cool its rude... Don't be jealous of his mad skillz. Nice poem, just a bit depressing. =[ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted May 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 26, 2009 lol..its not cool its rude... Your misinterpretation of my work is a result of your inability to understand the exact kind of work poetry really is. Poetry is not something simple and easy to read and write, but rather abstract and ambiant. That mere fact that you cannot understand this poem is because you lack the talent of even creating poetry yourself. This poem is not rude, it is descriptive. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
B3lly N3rd Posted May 26, 2009 Report Share Posted May 26, 2009 i thought it was just words that rhym Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted May 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 26, 2009 i thought it was just words that rhym Have you never heard of free verse? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prada Posted May 26, 2009 Report Share Posted May 26, 2009 Lol. No, he probably hasn't. He probably doesn't know anything else about poems, either. You should have a go at a tanka. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted May 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 26, 2009 Lol. No' date=' he probably hasn't. He probably doesn't know anything else about poems, either. You should have a go at a tanka.[/quote'] Tanka? Point me in that direction, I'm interested now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Prada Posted May 26, 2009 Report Share Posted May 26, 2009 A Japanese poem, 5 lines with 5,7,5,7,7 syllables. =] [spoiler=Example]The skin of this worldShows nothing but appearanceThe heart underneathReveals the world's true nature.Nature motivates the heart. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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