Haseo Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 [align=center]How is it?SocietyA place where people liveWhere there areDifferent religions, cultures, music, government, laws, many thingsEach person with there own opinionSome racist, some logical, some meaninglessRacism is in SocietyOlder Generations teach younger generationsHitler was taught differently than someone elseEinstein had a logical ideas, but meaningless to other peopleMany great minds/leader Are getting rejected from society because they are different in a wayWe are all different and the same in a waySociety is beautifully blended of different peoplePeople that can not understand one anotherYou cannot understand oneThat has lived a life unlike yours, can you?People try to help, but they cannot understand how to helpWe can not understand many thingsWe cannot understand each otherWe each have think of a different meaningA different meaning for a wordLove, Life, Dreams, Nightmares, RealityThey all mean something else for a personEach person is a storyA story that has many conflicts, friendships, deathsA story that cannot be replayedA one of a kindWe are all one of a kindSociety grows because of this reasonJust like a video gameThe more levels the better, butLife is not a gameThere are moments where you feel confusedIs that the right choice?Am I helping myself in anyway?This leads to regretsI regret, you regret, we all regretThere are many meanings to the word Society, but this is mine[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Azmodius Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 uhh, poetry on ycm? u expecting people to take u as being "smart"? sry nuh uh. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
B3lly N3rd Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 actually it does sound well written and thought out...enh..but i dont put effort into anything so i applaude people who do....i Shall put that in my sig!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skuldur Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 Stating the obvious, much? It's pretty well written. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Haseo Posted May 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 uhh' date=' poetry on ycm? u expecting people to take u as being "smart"? sry nuh uh.[/quote'] Dude don't spam! I am just asking people on YCM if they like it or not. Also, most people here are smart, but because of your post you have just have said that you are an idiot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Azmodius Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 Idiot? nah. And that's not spam, I merely stated my opinion on posting crappy poetry on a forum about a children's card game. You, sir, are the idiot. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
B3lly N3rd Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 its to long to put in mah sig but its still pretty kewl Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Azmodius Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 yeah, it's decent. but... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sid. Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 I liked it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Haseo Posted May 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 Idiot? nah. And that's not spam' date=' I merely stated my opinion on posting crappy poetry on a forum about a children's card game. You, sir, are the idiot.[/quote'] First of all, GTFO of my thread! Second, most people on YCM are about 13-22 years old! Also, do not call poetry or my poem crappy because you can't right a decent sentence of it. So if you post again i will neg you! You have been warned and if you neg me back i will report you Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
B3lly N3rd Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 -its not a childerns card game peoplez 23 years old play this..for fun..and gambling..and also cuz they like it.. -im 14..and yes most of us would appericate this poem -and i doubt you can write a better poem Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Toxic-skull Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 @Hades Eros: no it's just that you don't under stand his mind he can write poetry as good as i can maybe ever better so you have no right to say he can't write poems because probably you can't! @Haseo really good poem it's the longest one i've seen here on ycm and the most inspirational one too keep up the good work ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The_Prince_of_Death Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 @Hades Eros: no it's just that you don't under stand his mind he can write poetry as good as i can maybe ever better so you have no right to say he can't write poems because probably you can't! @Haseo really good poem it's the longest one i've seen here on ycm and the most inspirational one too keep up the good work ^_^ ^what she said^ And truly I mean it nice work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dweller of Parables Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 The first three lines were decent...then the rest turned it all to cr@p. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
B3lly N3rd Posted May 27, 2009 Report Share Posted May 27, 2009 the point is its good..negative or semi negative post dont matter @_@ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Man0waR Posted May 29, 2009 Report Share Posted May 29, 2009 lol does society suck that much? 0.o Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Static Posted May 29, 2009 Report Share Posted May 29, 2009 Eye on the TV'cause tragedy thrills meWhatever flavor it happens to be Like:"Killed by the husband" ..."Drowned by the ocean" ..."Shot by his own son" ..."She used a poison in his tea,Then (she) kissed him goodbye"That's my kind of storyIt's no fun til someone dies. Don't look me at like I am a monsterFrown out your one face, but with the other (you)Stare like a junkie into the TVStare like a zombie while the mother holds her child,Watches him die,Hands to the sky cryin "why, oh why?" Cause I need to watch things die from a distanceVicariously, I live while the whole world diesYou all need it too - don't lie. Why can't we just admit it?Why can't we just admit it?We won't give pause until the blood is flowin'Neither the brave nor boldNor brightest of stories toldWe won't give pause until the blood is flowin' I need to watch things die from a good safe distanceVicariously, I live while the whole world diesYou all feel the same so why can't we just admit it? Blood like rain fallin' downDrum on grave and ground Part vampire, part warrior,Carnivore and voyeurStare at the transmittal.Sing to the death rattle. Credulous at bestYour desire to believe inAngels in the hearts of men.But pull your head on out your hippie hazeAnd give a listenShouldn't have to say it all again The universe is hostileSo impersonalDevour to surviveSo it is, so it's always been We all feed on tragedy.It's like blood to a vampire. Vicariously, I live while the whole world diesMuch better you than I. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frunk Posted May 29, 2009 Report Share Posted May 29, 2009 I don't agree with the premise of the poem, as I have a rather cynical view of society, but I do agree it is quite well done. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pikachu Posted May 29, 2009 Report Share Posted May 29, 2009 1. No paragraphs. (Make at least 3)2. The order of your points are mixed up. (Sort that out yourself)3. Very messy and a very wide point of view. (Be more specific and support only one particular topic) Sort that out and I'll comment again. ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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