Cypress Posted June 6, 2009 Report Share Posted June 6, 2009 i rote this for reasons ou may only guess, not ask.i would enjoy your commentsnote: this poem is a way for me to express my life as of now, the raven being a medaphorThe Raven [spoiler=6-6-09][align=center]The Raven Magestic bird of the nightThe most inteligent and beautiful of all the birdsDon't fly away, he says to the magestic ravenStay close to himBe safe, but be free But the magestic Raven has reasons to fly away from him To stay alone To stay awayTo leaveBut he will be waitingUntil the magestic bird comes back to himSo that the Raven is not aloneBut he is still waitingAnd still waiting.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Felix Culpa Posted June 6, 2009 Report Share Posted June 6, 2009 Nice poem Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shonen Jump™ Posted June 6, 2009 Report Share Posted June 6, 2009 its alright =P i prefer a few word poems like in my sig or very intricite ones but seriously 7.5/10 on the poem =) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cypress Posted June 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2009 thnx, and you are entitled to your oppinions Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mors Secundis Posted June 6, 2009 Report Share Posted June 6, 2009 wow nice poem remember to tell everyone its free verse Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cypress Posted June 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 6, 2009 i dont care about thatas long as the pem is ream and the meaning is sent out by reading the poem, i dont need explinations Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 i dont care about thatas long as the pem is ream and the meaning is sent out by reading the poem' date=' i dont need explinations[/quote'] Not explanations to you...to other members becuase they might not know that Poems don't have to rhyme. Anyway, it's a nice poem, but it seems a bit cliche. I know you got the idea from Edgar Allen Poe's famous work "The Raven" simply by the title and the "Majestic Raven" alluquay (just think of poetic phrase and you won't be confused.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cypress Posted June 7, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 actually, to tell you the truth, ive never heard of edgar allens or any of his poems and the definition of alluquay is? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 Alluquay is my word for Poetic Phrase.. hense the text within parenthesis. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Azmodius Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 it's nice. I like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cypress Posted June 7, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 thnx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aniri Wulf Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 i like your poem^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Felix Culpa Posted June 8, 2009 Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 It is good. Nice to have an intellectual, creative person on the forum. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frunk Posted June 8, 2009 Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 Ravens, while smart, are not particularly visually appealing, and certainly not "the most ... beautiful of all birds". I also seem to have missed the metaphor. I "guess", however, that it simply must be something to do with you, presumably the protagonist, trying to get something or someone close to you, but you are doing it passively, and therefore you cannot. I suspect I'm wrong. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cypress Posted June 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 yes, u suspect corectly, and i do think ravens are visualy apealing Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HORUS Posted June 8, 2009 Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 Both the poetry and spelling are far from par. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cypress Posted June 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 just because my poem is not politicaly correct in the field of grammer, spelling, etc., you say it is far from par. and yet, your opinion is your own, and you have the right to express that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darth Duelist Posted June 8, 2009 Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 Gr8 poem. I couldn't have made one better. You should consider making a book with your poetry! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frunk Posted June 9, 2009 Report Share Posted June 9, 2009 yes' date=' u suspect corectly, and i do think ravens are visualy apealing[/quote'] Each to their own, I suppose. just because my poem is not politicaly correct in the field of grammer' date=' spelling, etc., you say it is far from par. and yet, your opinion is your own, and you have the right to express that.[/quote'] What has grammar and spelling got to do, specifically, with political correctness? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted June 9, 2009 Report Share Posted June 9, 2009 yes' date=' u suspect corectly, and i do think ravens are visualy apealing[/quote'] Each to their own, I suppose. just because my poem is not politicaly correct in the field of grammer' date=' spelling, etc., you say it is far from par. and yet, your opinion is your own, and you have the right to express that.[/quote'] What has grammar and spelling got to do, specifically, with political correctness? There are no politics in grammer. :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HORUS Posted June 9, 2009 Report Share Posted June 9, 2009 just because my poem is not politicaly correct in the field of grammer' date=' spelling, etc., you say it is far from par. and yet, your opinion is your own, and you have the right to express that.[/quote'] Anyone wishing to impress anyone else with a literary piece should be intent on ensuring that their opus contains proper grammar and spelling. Otherwise, the reader of the piece just thinks the writer is retarded. There are better ways (poetically) to make this metaphor you're trying to get across. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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