Soul Legacy Posted June 11, 2009 Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 If he does, i would enjoy the fic more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 11, 2009 Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 I think he will, though I personally like MARIA better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soul Legacy Posted June 11, 2009 Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 So does Kryton ;) The thing is that Cyborgs/Robots don't really have emotions =[ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 11, 2009 Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 please, Soul Legacy. If you had seen the Terminator films, you'd say differently. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soul Legacy Posted June 11, 2009 Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 I have, what i ment is that MARIA isn't really a Terminator is she, unless i read the bio wrong. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 11, 2009 Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 of course not. To me, she's more of a bioengineered experiment. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted June 11, 2009 Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 You mean her personality. Yes, ragnarok, Soul is right; I made M.A.R.I.A to only be able to simulate human feelings. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 11, 2009 Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 yeah well that's still easy to tell fake from real then Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soul Legacy Posted June 11, 2009 Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 Whatever you say. anyway, im still waiting for chapter 2 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted June 11, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 All character suggestions are accepted. Chapter 2 is still in progress. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 11, 2009 Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 I'll try and come up with something for a character then Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted June 11, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 11, 2009 [spoiler=Chapter 2; Finding Families][align=center]Completion…50%These words flashed on a robot’s eyes, halfway done through its completion. A blue bar showed how much its completion was through, and it greatly increased every second. “Completion…100% finished. Activating reboot.” The robot said, in a cold metallic voice. The robot body moved, the human part following it, in perfect synch, the mix of two walked out of its tube. She stretched herself, and looked at her body. “I’m…part human. Do…I feel emotions?”*A man hid inside an alley, he sat down, laying on the wall by his head. He was comfortable because he wore bundles of coats and jackets. He coughed, and watched as several bystanders passed by. “H-help please…” He said, or at least tried to, in his raspy voice. The bystanders seemed to not notice and continued their regular daily activities.*Kurokawa laid on his bed, and looked around his room. He noticed his bag, which he had found when he awoke on that day…when he killed several of the law enforcers. He grabbed it, and sat up. He opened it, and looked inside, grabbing several things out, he emptied it. He searched around the pile, and found only pictures, all of people he did not know. He looked at a picture of an old man, in his 60s and a woman in her 50s. He looked at it closely, and flipped it to its back. Mom and Dad it stated. Kurokawa couldn’t help, but he put the pictures of his parents to a desk close to his bed. He looked at another picture, a park, but different than from the world he awoke to. In the picture, there was the usual bench, and people passing by, all with red eyes, same as he and his parents. He looked at the trees, which seemed to move as he looked at them. He put the picture away and continued to look through the pile.*The man walked at the sidewalk, he kept close to buildings, sure he was going to die anytime. He walked through, and stopped, reaching a church, inside, he walked to the front, and sat down. He watched a young man, who sat to his knees and prayed. After a few minutes, the young man walked next to the man, and sat down. “Hello.” The young man said, and the man nodded. “Hi…” He rasped. “I am Derek.” Replied the young man. “And I am…Padon.” Derek got up, “Well, it’s time for me to go, goodbye…” He said, and walked out. Padon nodded, and looked back to the statue of god.*Kryton walked to an old lab, he barged in and walked to a counter in the front. “Excuse me, where is lab 12?” He asked the woman behind the counter. “Oh, that’s guarded by security, but there will be a tour soon, if you want to see it.” Kryton nodded. “Yes, I would like to join that tour group.”*Kurokawa found a picture of a young woman, about the same age as he was. She had bright silver hair, and her face looked like a beauty to Kurokawa. He flipped it to the back. Matsuo Tsubaki ~ Love He put this photo next to his parents, and walked to the door. He turned off the light, and walked outside. He had to search for those people.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 not much has happened in this chap, but that's fine. I wonder what kind of people Kurokawa is looking for........ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 Great chapter! Although you messed up Derek's and M.A.R.I.A's appearance in the fic =/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soul Legacy Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 ^lol^ Anyway, nice chapter ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 Great chapter! Although you messed up Derek's and M.A.R.I.A's appearance in the fic =/ I am expecting that to be corrected in a later chapter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Soul Legacy Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 Great chapter! Although you messed up Derek's and M.A.R.I.A's appearance in the fic =/ I am expecting that to be corrected in a later chapter Or he could edit the mistake now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 oh I don't really care which course of action he takes, the fic will turn out great either way Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted June 12, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 Thanks for that ragnarok. Kuja, I messed up? Which mistakes did I make? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 Can we expect the next chapter to go up before the weekend is out or do we have to wait longer? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted June 12, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 You can expect it before the weekend, I'm working on it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 Thanks for that ragnarok. Kuja' date=' I messed up? Which mistakes did I make?[/quote'] Well: Derek was supposed to be in his Berserk Mode, slaughtering scientists in M.A.R.I.A's factory, and then, he is about to destroy M.A.R.I.A in her tube while she's in her incomplete form, but he ignores her and leaves. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted June 12, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 Thanks for that ragnarok. Kuja' date=' I messed up? Which mistakes did I make?[/quote'] Well: Derek was supposed to be in his Berserk Mode, slaughtering scientists in M.A.R.I.A's factory, and then, he is about to destroy M.A.R.I.A in her tube while she's in her incomplete form, but he ignores her and leaves. Uhh, you know I have skipped that part? And have gone over to the part of Maria completing. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Abarai Renji:. Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 Oh, sorry then. I was kinda excpecting you to start off with Derek slaughtering! >=) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Omega Posted June 13, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 13, 2009 Heh, maybe there will be a slaughter in the 3rd chapter. Big Update; Chapter 3 will come out tomorrow, due to my schedule being reduced by my F***ing mother. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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