Felix Culpa Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 As the title says, this thread is poetry by OneWord. [spoiler=6/7/09][spoiler=Tomorrow]In a world of sorrowOf raging warYou look for tomorrowWithout living todayLiving is more than seeingMore than beingInside I'm dyingInside you're crying Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cypress Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 *snaps* woo, good job Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Felix Culpa Posted June 7, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 Thank you. It didn't take too long to write, just a few minutes. Not long I know. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cypress Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 if you read the poem i posted 2 days ago, i wrote it in like only 5 min. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Felix Culpa Posted June 7, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 The one under Poetry by ME? Ya, I read and posted on it I think. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aniri Wulf Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 nice poetry~thumbs up~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Cypress Posted June 7, 2009 Report Share Posted June 7, 2009 oh, you did, well, it took me like no time to make it. well then i guess ull have to wait for another guy to post and coment then Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted June 8, 2009 Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 Short, sweet, and to the point. The alluguays are nice and well used.Some of the lines seem a bit cliche.6th lines should be one word longer. Try "More than just being." It adds more flow. That's just my $0.02 on your first poem. Can't wait to see more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Felix Culpa Posted June 8, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 8, 2009 Thanks. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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