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Max Darkness Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 This is a very good attempt at your first card I must say! A few pointers/thoughts: i) Change the name to something like "The Shadow Creature", or "Heartless Shadow"ii) Alright pictureiii) 'Heartless' is not a class of monster...make it an effectiv) OCG"Once per turn, during your Standby Phase, you can discard 1 Spell or Trap card on your side of the field. If you do this, this card can attack your opponent directly. During the End Phase of a turn when this card was sent to the Graveyard you can pay 500 Life Points to Special Summon 1 "(insert name here)" from your hand or Deck." Rating: 8.5/10 (fantastic for a new member) PM me if you need any help...not that you'll need it! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ShadeZero Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 This is a very good attempt at your first card I must say! A few pointers/thoughts: i) Change the name to something like "The Shadow Creature" The Shadow Creature <-- No. Seriously play KH =/And the Heartless Shadow was an ok suggestion, but the first was no. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Awesome:. Posted June 12, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 The heartless is a custom sub-type, like effect, gemini etc. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Max Darkness Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 The heartless is a custom sub-type' date=' like effect, gemini etc.[/quote'] And what are the special rules regarding 'Heartless' monsters? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Necro Pheonix Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 its really good 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
killertrey40 Posted June 12, 2009 Report Share Posted June 12, 2009 nice! 9/10, only one error and that is the fake type Heartless Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Awesome:. Posted June 14, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 14, 2009 alright I changed the heartless thing and I changed the name a bit Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mizuku Kagirinai Posted June 14, 2009 Report Share Posted June 14, 2009 Not bad actually. Now that it's updated, it seems a lot better. I'll give it a hearty 7/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaidesgen5 Posted June 14, 2009 Report Share Posted June 14, 2009 guess its k Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fish-eye Posted June 14, 2009 Report Share Posted June 14, 2009 excelent first card. i'v never seen that pic before. it kinda shows the lighter side of a heartless. welcome to YCM! 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~ BT Posted June 15, 2009 Report Share Posted June 15, 2009 Good card, I think only 1 OCG error:Spell or Trap card = Spell or Trap Card Capitalize the C in card only when the word Monster, Spell, or Trap is before it 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.:Awesome:. Posted June 15, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 15, 2009 excelent first card. i'v never seen that pic before. Thats cause I made it myself... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Transformerfan2009 Posted June 19, 2009 Report Share Posted June 19, 2009 Hey, welcome to YCM! nice picture of the heartless shadow. 9/10! you problably (sp?) know about the spelling errors so i won't point them out. If you need help, there are some other Heartless threads you can check for info if you want. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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