Please Review these Cards New to This

[Krogun]

This is a "Dwarven" set of Cards I have made so far. May continue to work towards more. Would appreciate tips and your input, thanks.

 

This Monster may be redirected as an Attack Target if your opponent declares an Attack. Regardless of the Battle Results, this card is sent to the Graveyard. Battle Damage is applied.

 

This Monster can attack your Opponent's Life Points Directly. This Monster gains 500 ATK everytime it Successfuly attacks Directly. This card loses it's ATK Bonus and cannot Attack Directly if there are no other "Dwarven" Monsters on the Field.

 

This Monster gains 500 ATK for every Monster on the Field.

 

When this Monster is summoned, you must pay 500 Life Points per Turn (Including the Turn summoned) in order to keep this Monster on the Field. If you choose not to, send this Monster to the Graveyard.

 

When this monster defeats a monster, inflict Damage to your Opponent's Life Points by 100 for every "Dwarven" Monster you have on your side of the field. This damage is in addition to the initial Battle Damage this Monster inflicts.

 

When this Monster Attacks a Monster in Defense Position, Double it's ATK, and inflict the difference as Battle Damage. When this Monster is Defeated, Double the Battle Damage taken if any.

 

When this Monster is Summoned you may Special Summon up to 2 "Dwarven" Monsters from your Hand to the Field. This Monster gains 500 ATK for every "Dwarven" Monster on the Field. When this Monster is Defeated by one of your Opponent's Monsters, Double the Battle Damage taken.

 

This card can only be Special Summoned. This Monster can only be Special Summoned by Sacrificing 5 "Dwarven" Monsters from your Hand or the Field.

 

Equip this card to a "Dwarven" Monster. Flip a Coin. If "Heads" the selected Monster cannot be killed by Spell, Trap, or Monster Effects. If Tails the selected Monster's Defense is increased by 1000.

 

All Face-Up "Dwarven" Monsters, Regardless of Position, are considered in Defensive Position when Attacked. Accordingly, all Face-Up "Dwarven" Monsters still recieve Battle Damage.

 

When a "Dwarven" Monster is selected as an Attack Target, remove it from the Field and add it to your Hand.

[karatula3]

Dwarf archetypes made by someone is not a new thing... but hey at least we get to see new creative cards around! :)

 

Now, now... where do I start... I think the pictures are average due to the lack of OCG-like looks but they are good if you don't consider that a problem. The spell and trap cards have decent effect, particularly that last Trap Card which bounces a Dwarf card to your hand.

 

I think that your OCG typing can be better. DO not put in "killed" by put in "destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard", "removed from the field", etc., In "Attack Directly", 'A' and 'D' shouldn't be in capitals and pretty much most words which you put capitals on which you don't need to (Turn, Field, Attack, blah blah...).

 

Nonetheless, I like the effort you made to make these cards.

 

3/5

[Krogun]

Dwarf archetypes made by someone is not a new thing... but hey at least we get to see new creative cards around! :)

 

Now' date=' now... where do I start... I think the pictures are average due to the lack of OCG-like looks but they are good if you don't consider that a problem. The spell and trap cards have decent effect, particularly that last Trap Card which bounces a Dwarf card to your hand.

 

I think that your OCG typing can be better. DO not put in "killed" by put in "destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard", "removed from the field", etc., In "Attack Directly", 'A' and 'D' shouldn't be in capitals and pretty much most words which you put capitals on which you don't need to (Turn, Field, Attack, blah blah...).

 

Nonetheless, I like the effort you made to make these cards.

 

3/5

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Thanks appreciate the review, and constructive criticisms. I plan on using your tips to edit these cards up. By the way I'm a bit confused on the "OCG-like looks". What can I do to change that.

[karatula3]

Thanks appreciate the review' date=' going to fix that up soon. By the way I'm a bit confused on the "OCG-like looks". What can I do to change that.

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No prob. Oh and just a minor thing I don't like in cards (even cards I make, lol) people make when the picture looks like it's an oil painting or on canvas, etc. which completely makes it look different from OCG card pictures... Well meh it's just me.

 

Good luck on you fixing those things up.

 

:o

[Denegoth]

Dwarf archetypes made by someone is not a new thing... but hey at least we get to see new creative cards around! :)

 

Now' date=' now... where do I start... I think the pictures are average due to the lack of OCG-like looks but they are good if you don't consider that a problem. The spell and trap cards have decent effect, particularly that last Trap Card which bounces a Dwarf card to your hand.

 

I think that your OCG typing can be better. DO not put in "killed" by put in "destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard", "removed from the field", etc., In "Attack Directly", 'A' and 'D' shouldn't be in capitals and pretty much most words which you put capitals on which you don't need to (Turn, Field, Attack, blah blah...).

 

Nonetheless, I like the effort you made to make these cards.

 

3/5

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Thanks appreciate the review, and constructive criticisms. I plan on using your tips to edit these cards up. By the way I'm a bit confused on the "OCG-like looks". What can I do to change that.

 

I think he means the pictures don't fit in with YGO. Try some more cartoony-looking pictures.

[Krogun]

Oh okay, I will keep that in consideration for future cards I post. Just tend to use images which may tend to fit the card frame.

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Can I get any Review regarding whether these cards are Balance, Underpowered, or Overpowered.