"Krogun: The Furious Crusader"(1st Synchro of Dwarf Archetype) Comment & Rate Please

[Krogun]

This is my first Synchro Monster addition to the Dwarf Deck I am currently working on. I will be adding Tuner monsters to the Deck as well. Would appreciate comments and ratings of this card and the rest of the current deck which can be found through the following link.

http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-127356.html

 

When this monster is Summoned discard 3 cards off the top of your deck. If you discarded a "Dwarven" monster you may special summon it on the field. The owner of this card gains 500 Life Points for every "Dwarven" monster discarded from this card's effect. The owner of this card does not gain 500 Life Points from a "Dwarven" monster which was special summoned by this card's effect.

 

I feel that this effect's OCG can be greatly improved and would appreciate any edits from an experience member.

[Jake Harper]

Very little mistakes but you're learning quickly 9.2/10

 

For a more correct OCG:

 

When this monster is Summoned you can discard 3 cards from the top of your Deck. If you discarded a "Dwarven" monster by this card's effect, you may Special Summon it to your side of the field. The owner of this card gains 500 Life Points for every "Dwarven" monster discarded by this card's effect. The owner of this card does not gain 500 Life Points from a "Dwarven" monster which was Special Summoned by this card's effect.