FINISHED SET! Ausault of the Moon Warriors!

[WTF]

Here is the new ausalt of the moon warriors set! the booster pack pic isnt showing so ya.......

 

 

PLZ RATE AND COMMENT! i need to know!!!!

[Max Darkness]

Quite good.

 

Unicorn of The Moon

i) I think the effect is too powerful. Tone it down to half the ATK or add a cost of some sort.

ii) Some OCG errors: 'ATK points' = 'ATK'

 

The Moon

i) "Stone Soldier! Attack The Moon!"...sorry, couldn't resist!

ii) There's already a card called The Moon I think. So you could change this to "Luna: Noctural Guardian" ...or something like that.

iii) You can only summon it when every Moon monster is in the Graveyard?! So, 1 D.D. monster can destroy your strategy! Plus the ATK and DEF are broken. Change it to:

"This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by removing from play at least 6 "Moon" monsters from your Graveyard. This card's ATK and DEF are equal to the number of removed from play "Moon" monsters x 500.

 

Super Moon Dragon

i) 'ritual summoned...ritual spell card' = 'Ritual Summoned...Ritual Spell Card'

ii) You don't need to put the effect on a new line.

iii) The effect's FAR too powerful. Reduce it to 150/200 ATK and DEF like "Amulet Dragon"

 

Mutated Moon Dragon

i) OCG:

This card can only be Fusion Summoned by removing from play the above Fusion Material Monsters (you do not use "Polymerisation").

ii) If you use this /\, you don't need the last part of the effect.

 

Moon Wizard

i) '...monsters destroyed are removed from play...' = '...monsters destroyed by battle are removed from play instead of going to the Graveyard.'

ii) '...every monster that was removed from play is moved...' = 'every removed from play monster is added to its controller's Graveyard.'

 

Moon Witch, Moon Warrior, Moon Swordswoman, Moon Pet Werewolf, Moon Hero, Moon Chancellor, Moon Assassin

i) All Normal Monsters, give them effects

ii) Nice pics though

 

Moon Reaper

i) '...if a face-up...' = 'if "Moon Dragon" or "Super Moon Dragon" is face-up on the field...'

ii) Some OCG errors

 

Moon Mistress

i) Change name to "Moon Mistress #1"

ii) 'special summon' = 'Special Summon'

iii) PM me a link for the picture

 

Moon Mistress #2

i) 'Increase the ATK of this card by 300 points...' = 'This card gains 300 ATK...'

 

Moon Goddess

i) 'normal summoned...set...summoned' = 'Normal Summoned...Set...Summoned'

ii) 'four...two' = '4...2'

 

Moon God

i) '...ritual summoned by the ritual spell card...' = '...Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card...'

ii) You don't need the 'successfully'

iii) 'spell counter' = 'Spell Counter'

iv) Last sentance: 'This card gains 300 ATK for every Spell Counter on this card.'

 

Moon Dragon

i) Come up with a more useful effect.

 

Elemental Hero...

i) v.hard to summon.

ii) Card names are in speech marks ie. "Gaia The Fierce Knight"...

iii) OCG errors.

 

Conflict

i) 'one' = '1'

ii) The last part is wrong, but I'm not sure how to fix it.

 

Full Moon

i) Capitalisation errors.

ii) Go to the Yugioh Wikia to see how to properly word Ritual Spell Cards

 

Melody

i) Add 'As long as this card remains face-up on the field' at the beginning

ii) You should tone down the boost or add a cost

 

Moon Castle

i) 'lose 700 Life Points' = 'Pay 700 Life Points.' and it should be at the beginning.

 

Overgrowth

i) See "Full Moon"

 

Sword of Destiny

i) OCG:

You can only activate this card when you have 1000 Life Points or less. Equip only to a monster with less than 1000 ATK. The equipped monster gains 2000 ATK.

ii) Add a cost of some sort.

 

Cosmic Legacy

i) Awful OCG and an awful idea. If you raise the levels of a monster, you have to tribute more to summon them, low-level monsters become affected by "Gravity Bind", and it screws your game plan.

ii) Switch it to lowering their levels and check out "Umi" to see how to properly word the effect.

 

50% Percent Chance

i) Why have you called it 50 Percent Percent Chance? Surely "50% Chance" will suffice?

ii) See "Time Wizard" to see how to correctly word coin-toss cards.

 

Capture!

i) Should be a Counter Trap Card.

ii) Too powerful without a cost.

 

Cure

i) I'd change the name.

ii) See "Red-Eyes Spirit" to see how to correctly word this card.

 

Guerilla Warfare

The OCG is off, but I'm not sure how to fix it.

 

Planetary Alignment

i) This should be a Counter Trap Card with 'Activate only when...' at the beginning

 

ii) 'EARTH type' = 'EARTH'

iii) 'destroy this card' = 'destroy the targeted monster'

 

Summoning Spell

i) COUNTER TRAP CARD!!! (If a Trap activates when something happens, it is a counter trap card.)

ii) Since it should be a Counter Trap Card, the Continuous rule at the end isn't needed.

iii) OCG errors.

 

Super Mutation

i) Should be a Spell Card

ii) '...until the end of this turn.' = '...until your End Phase.'

 

The Angel's Gift

i) Should be a Continuous Spell Card.

ii) 'spell and trap card' = 'Spell and Trap Card'

iii) 'standby-phase' = 'Standby Phase'

 

The End

OCG:

Discard 3 cards from your hand. Destroy all cards on the field.

 

The Moon Swordswoman'...

i) Too powerful at the moment.

ii) Turn it into this:

(Continuous Trap Card)

Activate only when there is a face-up "Moon Swordswoman" on your side of the field. Once per turn, during your Draw Phase, choose 1 card in your opponent's hand and look at it. When "Moon Swordswoman" is destroyed, so is this card.

 

The Thief In The Night

i) Curious, an Equip Trap Card! ...They don't exist...

ii) Change to an Equip Spell Card and sort out your OCG.

 

Umbra

i) Fine

 

 

Work on your OCG and my suggestions......7/10

[WTF]

i accidentally changed the thief to a trap! danget