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TheRexion

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Spire Newbie

Spire

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1st Card - "Increase the ATK of all Attack Position monsters by 500" would sound better for the first sentence. =]

 

2nd Card- Seems underpowered. It's stats are fine for a level 4, so why just add a drawback?

 

3rd Card- Instead of ???, a name would be nice. =P

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AbbatonStrikes Newbie

AbbatonStrikes

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Over Pulse: Every face-up monster on the field gains 500 ATK points during the turn this card is activated. you take damage equal to the number of monster on the field x300. (To be honnest mate not sure what your aiming for, this increases every monster so your back to square 1 but taking Effect dmamge too!!)

Pyro Drake: When this card is destroyed by battle you take 400 points of Direct Damage.

???: "Pyro Drake" + 1 or more non-Tuner Monsters

This card gains 100 ATK points every time it attacks an opponent's monster. (Lower the ATK and DEF, this cards Level and give it a kick ass name mate, be creative thats what your here to be!!! Id like to see your next attempt/ remake of these

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Max Darkness Newbie

Max Darkness

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Awful, awful, awful OCG and execution:

 

Over-Pulse

i) Do you mean "Over-Drive"?

ii) Should be a Continuous Spell Card

iii) "As long as this card remains face-up on the field, all monsters on your side of the field gain 500 ATK. During each of your End Phases, pay an amount of Life Points equal to the number of monsters on your side of the field x 300.

 

Pyro Drake

i) Better picture needed

ii) Surely it's a Dragon-Type?

iii) It's stats are normal for a Lv.4, so why is there a cost? Keep the cost and increase ATK to 1600, or lose the cost and keep the ATK at 1200.

iv) "When this card is destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard, you lose 400 Life Points."

 

???

i) A name would be nice

ii) Overused pic

iii) Again, this is a Dragon

iv) OCG:

"Pyro Drake" + 1 or more non-Tuner monsters

If this monster destroys an opponent's monster by battle, this card gains 100 ATK.

v) More imaginative effect needed.

 

PM me if you need help

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Max Darkness Newbie

Max Darkness

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They're getting better!

 

Pyro Drake:

i) Should be a Dragon-Type

ii) OCG:

When this card is destroyed by battle. Select 1 card from your Graveyard and add it to your hand.

 

Light Stairway

i) Could change name to "(Synonym of Light) Stairway" since "Light" and "Dark" are very overdone.

ii) A Quick-Play Trap Card?! This is a Counter Trap Card.

iii) OCG:

Activate only when your opponent attacks your Life Points directly. Negate the attack and inflict an amount of Direct Damage to your opponent's Life Points equal to the ATK of the attacking monster.

 

Crystal Formean

i) Slightly overused picture

ii) Don't make Normal Monsters. You could try a Ritual or Fusion monster

iii) This is either a Dragon or a Sea Serpent; not a Beast-Type

 

Tree of Tyon

i) This is a very powerful effect, so it needs a balancing effect or a cost.

ii) You could;

a) Say that this card stops ALL direct attacks for 3 turns or

b) Have a Life Point cost during your End Phases.

 

Activate only when your opponent attacks your Life Points directly. Negate the attack. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, neither player can declare Direct Attacks. This card is destroyed in your third End Phase after it is activated.

 

or

 

Activate only when your opponent attacks your Life Points directly. Negate the attack. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, your opponent cannot declare Direct Attacks. During each of your End Phases, pay 800 Life Points. If you do not, this card is destroyed.

 

Tyrain Lake

i) Don't make Normal Monsters!

ii) You say it yourself! This is a Dragon-Type monster!! Not a Beast-Type!!!

 

Keep it up!

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AbbatonStrikes Newbie

AbbatonStrikes

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No boss dont give in to it. Just read cards that are already published see how they are worded. Everyone on here started out badly. Simple things to start all numbers are done in number form 1,2,3,4,5,6,7,8,9 etc. certain things are in capitals like Tuner, Fusion, Spellcaster, Warrior, Standby Phase, End Phase etc. Attributes are done in Capitals like this DARK, LIGHT etc. also types are done like this Warrior-Type, Fiend-Type. Also Sacrifice is either Tribute or Release. Hope this helps you to start off.

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Max Darkness Newbie

Max Darkness

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Like they said, work on one card at a time. If you want me to help, please PM me.

 

Reverse Eternity Dragon

i) A Dark Counterpart, nice idea

ii) However, overused pic

iii) I'd change the Summoning conditions. As in I'd make a "Reverse Pyro Drake" as well and use that as the Tuner monster.

iv) You'll need to add a cost to effect because otherwise it just becomes stronger and stronger.

 

Itsunami

i) Do you mean 'Tsunami' (There's no 'i')

ii) Trap Cards don't have a description, just an effect. In this case:

"Inflict 1000 points of Direct Damage to both you and your opponent's Life Points."

 

Lycerian Stairway

i) Change to a Counter Trap Card.

ii) I've fixed the OCG

 

Visera

i) Change to Spellcaster-Type (Human-Type doesn't exist)

ii) OCG:

Once per turn, during your Standby Phase, you can discard 2 cards from your hand. If you do, Special Summon 1 monster from your Graveyard.

 

iii) I personally would choose this \/ effect as it's more complex:

Once per turn, during your Standby Phase, you can discard 2 cards from your hand and Tribute this card. If you do, Special Summon 1 Level 5 or higher Dragon-Type monster from your Graveyard. The summoned monster is destroyed in the second End Phase after you activate this effect.

 

Crystal Formean

i) Give it an effect

ii) DON'T MAKE DIVINE MONSTERS!!!!

 

I suggest fixing these up before making any more cards.

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TheRexion Newbie

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Will do, I'm gonna go back and fix the rest of my cards, after I'm done with this bunch

 

No I Meant Itsunami, It's supposed to look Japanese

but it's obviously not working

 

Lycerian Stairway

Done

 

Visera

i) Change to Spellcaster-Type (Human-Type doesn't exist)

 

I totally forgot that, thanks

 

iii) I personally would choose this \/ effect as it's more complex:

Once per turn, during your Standby Phase, you can discard 2 cards from your hand and Tribute this card. If you do, Special Summon 1 Level 5 or higher Dragon-Type monster from your Graveyard. The summoned monster is destroyed in the second End Phase after you activate this effect.

I did just that, It is waaaaay more complex

This was by accident

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Max Darkness Newbie

Max Darkness

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Let me review the new monsters:

 

Last Dragon

i) The most overused picture on YCMaker (35 times I've seen it and counting.

ii) Since it's a fusion of Eternity Dragon and Reverse Eternity Dragon, you could call it "Paradox Dragon".

iii) DON'T MAKE DIVINE MONSTERS (They're not Realistic)

iv) This could be a LIGHT monster

v) The effect is incredibly basic for a Lv.10. Go to the YGO Wikia and browse the Lv.10s to get ideas.

 

Crystal Formean

i) OCG:

This monster cannot be summoned in Defense Position. This card can only be switched into Defense Position if you have more than 2500 Life Points.

ii) This is a Sea Serpent-Type monster

 

Reverse Pyro Drake

i) The second most over-used image on YCMaker

ii) OCG: When this card is destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard, discard 1 card from your hand.

iii) /\ Clever...clever

 

Keep working on them, you're doing well for a New Member.

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