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Pic is overused. No fake types. Bad OCG (original card grammar). Here's what it should be.

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special summoned when it is removed from play. When this card is removed from play pay 1000 Life Points st Special Summon this card in face-up defense position. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, no monsters can be removed from play.

I'm not sure if that's correct I'm not the best at OCG.

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Pic is overused. No fake types. Bad OCG (original card grammar). Here's what it should be.

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special summoned when it is removed from play. When this card is removed from play pay 1000 Life Points st Special Summon this card in face-up defense position. As long as this card remains face-up on the field' date=' no monsters can be removed from play.

I'm not sure if that's correct I'm not the best at OCG.

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actually, Fairy is Angel in the OCG. I refuse to call the monsters "fairys", "zombies" and "fiends". don;t you know this kind of stuff?

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I quite like this card. I think the OCG should be more like:

 

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special summoned by its own effect. When this card is removed from play pay 1000 Life Points to Special Summon this card in face-up defense position. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, no monsters can be removed from play.

 

It's very similar to the previous correction, but closer to what you originally had. I like calling fairies angels, but what are zombies and fiends called? I've never heard them called anythign else.

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well, you got nice idea, but OCG is a bit off.

Also, the pic (No, the horror.. :d )

Try to find something better. And also, dont make new types - there are Fairy in the game. If you wish to make new types - make it something, that really needs new type. Also, if you want your own types and you make much cards , feel free to make archtypes and sub-types. :)

Also, you can work on the name. And, well... set number is like fgh-001, 002 utt or fgh-en001 or that. :)

Well, i hope i helped you. Overall card rating: 7/10

It is good on remove from Play decks. ;)

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well' date=' you got nice idea, but OCG is a bit off.

Also, the pic (No, the horror.. :d )

Try to find something better. And also, dont make new types - there are Fairy in the game. If you wish to make new types - make it something, that really needs new type. Also, if you want your own types and you make much cards , feel free to make archtypes and sub-types. :)

Also, you can work on the name. And, well... set number is like fgh-001, 002 utt or fgh-en001 or that. :)

Well, i hope i helped you. Overall card rating: 7/10

It is good on remove from Play decks. ;)

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In the japanese version Fairy is Angel, Fiend is Demon and Zombie is Undead. Im a purist, so I call the creature types by what they are in the original version. Also, i should state this card CAN be normal summoned, it just cant be summoned by monster reborn or return from a dark dimension or other junk like that. I just worded it oddly lol.

but thanks for all your comments : ) I'll try to tie up some loose ends.

<3 you guys!

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