-DG- Posted June 28, 2009 Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 I made this for school a while back. If you live in America, and understand the poem topic, you'll understand the poem better. Just a rhyming poem. Just thought of it when I made it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted June 28, 2009 Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 Slant Rhyming (to a degree). Far too direct, more as a haiku (but not).And you assume far too much. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-DG- Posted June 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 This is my view of politics. It is corrupt nowadays. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted June 28, 2009 Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 Your poem does not mean it does not need to be criticized. The key to nearly every poem (note: I'm being suggestive here), is to invoke a feeling and get the feelings others see in it. Are you aiming for that, or just jumbled your words to look like a poem? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-DG- Posted June 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 It expresses my hate for politics. Pretty... obvious. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted June 28, 2009 Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 And to me, it sounds like a child who cannot finish his sentences properly...Work on your form lol. You really need it, and if you need help. Feel free to PM me. While I may not post poems anymore or reply to many. I am great at them the same. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Shore Posted June 28, 2009 Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 Icy's critique is godly. I have one thing to say THANK YOU CAPTAIN OBVIOUS Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-DG- Posted June 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 Thank you captain Assholewhocantbeanormalpersonandnotbeanasshat ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Shore Posted June 28, 2009 Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 What's the maximum character limit for a name change? Cause that's a good candidate. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-DG- Posted June 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 >.> You annoy me >.> Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Shore Posted June 28, 2009 Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 THANK YOU CAPTAIN OBVIOUS Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hero2die Posted June 28, 2009 Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 i like the poemit ´s nice 10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OmegaWave Posted June 28, 2009 Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 Amen on this poem. AMEN. Pollitics is so corrupted now. And neg me if you want...I think Obama is going a little....overboard now with his power. It's slowly become more like a Constitutional monarchy since he's trying to make the government control nearly EVERYTHING. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-DG- Posted June 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 thnx. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Careless Whisper Posted June 28, 2009 Report Share Posted June 28, 2009 Although I agree that politics are corrupt, I will critique this poem. If I sound harsh with my points of view, then get over it. One, all poems have flow. This "poem" does not have flow. In simpler words, this is not a poem, but a message clearly stating how much you hate politics. [/$00.02] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FallenFanel21 Posted June 29, 2009 Report Share Posted June 29, 2009 You must either have been screwed by the gov or had a History teacher who gave u a take on how politics really works. Truth is the majority of things are hypocritical, where if its a jobs, getting a car, school, your own family, relationships and life itself. All there is 2 do is manipulate it 2 your advantage. Once you do you basically die a little and you dont give a **** about it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PrometheusMFD Posted June 29, 2009 Report Share Posted June 29, 2009 It's okayIt really doesn't have enough descriptive words to be anything great, but it is clear and concise Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Willieh Posted June 29, 2009 Report Share Posted June 29, 2009 It doesn't really seem like a poem. More like a blunt statement. =| Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-DG- Posted June 29, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 29, 2009 Ehh, it that's how you see it :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Shore Posted June 29, 2009 Report Share Posted June 29, 2009 oh, and if the mods don't happen to remember that crab and altair got away with their poetry, bye YCM. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-DG- Posted June 30, 2009 Author Report Share Posted June 30, 2009 Let us recap on what you just posted: An idiotic poemA dumb rhyme, if one at all.A reason to report you :) You just make it fun for yourself. This is why I negged you. GTFO, NAO. You just want to cause havoc. It's over. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ezio Posted June 30, 2009 Report Share Posted June 30, 2009 Icy and ZQ own this thread. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Darth Duelist Posted June 30, 2009 Report Share Posted June 30, 2009 You sure hate Politics (and Obama) lol!Idiots too? Oh well.... D. Duelist Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kirsten889 Posted June 30, 2009 Report Share Posted June 30, 2009 doesn't seem like much of a poem Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Shore Posted June 30, 2009 Report Share Posted June 30, 2009 Let us recap on what you just posted: An idiotic poemA dumb rhyme' date=' if one at all.A reason to report you :) You just make it fun for yourself. This is why I negged you. GTFO, NAO. You just want to cause havoc. It's over.[/quote']If you report me can you tell Crab? I'd like to be banned by Crab =D alsolern2senseofhumor seriously, you take yourself so seriously, even when you make a poem that is so basically constructed and obvious you can't realize that you're not that deep. You think you're a god because you can make a yugioh booster, and you QUOTE YOUR OWN SAYINGS in your sig because you think your deep but no one else does. You GTFOand of course I make fun of myself. I'm a huge joke, this site is a huge joke, and unfortunately you don't seem to know that and think you're accomplishing something important. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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