[HS] - Light Guardian

[HenriqueSakura]

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This card gains 300 ATK and DEF for each LIGHT monster on the field. When this card battles. you can return 1 LIGHT monster you control, from the field to your hand. If this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you can Special Summon 1 Level 5 or lower LIGHT monster from your Deck or your hand

 

Special Thanks to LiAM and Alcander for help in OCG

 

Plz rate and OCG fix are welcome =D[/align]

[LiAM]

per = for each

back = return

Monster = monster

to the field = X

 

Only OCG errors I saw, you need some grammar fixes like commas.

[Alcander]

Correct OCG:

This card gains 300 ATK and DEF for each LIGHT Monster on your side of the field. When this card battle, you can return 1 LIGHT monster on your Graveyard to your hand (insert a level limit here). If this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you can Special Summon 1 Level 5 or lower LIGHT monster from your Deck or your hand.

[LiAM]

Correct OCG:

This card gains 300 ATK and DEF for each LIGHT Monster on your side of the field. When this card battle' date=' you can return 1 LIGHT monster on your Graveyard to your hand (insert a level limit here). If this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you can Special Summon 1 Level 5 or lower LIGHT monster from your Deck or your hand.

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Dude that's wrong :?

 

I will fix in a minute.

[HenriqueSakura]

okay

thanks guys

I will wait liam

[LiAM]

OCG fix:

This card gains 300 ATK and DEF for each LIGHT monster on the field. When this card battles, you can return 1 LIGHT monster you control, from the field to your hand. If this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you can Special Summon 1 Level 5 or lower LIGHT monster from your hand or Deck to the field.

[HenriqueSakura]

Thanks

I'll fix

[Läufer]

I think this is it.

 

This card gains 300 ATK and DEF per LIGHT monster on the field. When this card battles, you can return 1 LIGHT monster from your side of the field to your hand. If this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you can Special Summon 1 Level 5 or lower LIGHT monster from your Deck or your hand to your side of the field.

[LiAM]

I think this is it.

 

This card gains 300 ATK and DEF per LIGHT monster on the field. When this card battles' date=' you can return 1 LIGHT monster from your side of the field to your hand. If this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you can Special Summon 1 Level 5 or lower LIGHT monster from your Deck or your hand to your side of the field.

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Nope, mine is correct :?

[♥ ЅϯᵲåώӀӞ℮ᴙʀɣ−ɴɨɨ−ƈħåɴ ♥]

Nope' date=' mine is correct :?

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You do know that you still put the periods instead of the commas, right?

[LiAM]

Nope' date=' mine is correct :?

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You do know that you still put the periods instead of the commas, right?

 

Apart from that one comma mistake.

[♥ ЅϯᵲåώӀӞ℮ᴙʀɣ−ɴɨɨ−ƈħåɴ ♥]

And, you can't just put "battles." There is no timing declared. There's Phases, and then there's the different timings for the battles themselves. Use this instead:

 

This card gains 300 ATK and DEF for each LIGHT monster on the field. When this card declares an attack or is selected as an attack target, you can return 1 LIGHT monster you control from the field to your hand [after the Damage Step/after damage calculation/after the Battle Phase]. If this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, you can Special Summon 1 Level 5 or lower LIGHT monster from your hand or Deck.

 

And if your planning to just make it instant when you or your opponent declares an attack, you don't need the brackets. They're just there if you want to set the timing of the effect.

[LiAM]

I've seen on numerous cards 'battles' simply when they enter the battle phase and select a monster as an attack target. Before applying damage calculation.

[♥ ЅϯᵲåώӀӞ℮ᴙʀɣ−ɴɨɨ−ƈħåɴ ♥]

Yeah, battles is extremely unclear. There is no timing declared, so many people get it wrong. It's actually a lot more conventional if you just state the timing.

[LiAM]

Well if 'battles' is used in correct OCG terms, then it's ok.

 

Like this random effect:

This card gains 400 ATK each time it battles a monster.

 

That would be before damage calculation, as it doesn't specify after its battled, but during the fight.

[♥ ЅϯᵲåώӀӞ℮ᴙʀɣ−ɴɨɨ−ƈħåɴ ♥]

It depends on the situation. In most effects, timing really matters, and in real duels, they do also.

 

If it's a simple effect like ATK/DEF increasing, then it wouldn't matter, because it card increase at any point of the battle.

[ragnarok1945]

if it gains 300 atk/def this way, then the current stats are too high for it. Lower it a little

 

8/10

[Ghost Ryder]

OP'. OCG fixed by LiAM. Lower both it's stats near 2000. And then it'll be fine, 8.3/10