Shonen Jump™ Posted July 27, 2009 Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 [align=center]I just want some help in general this is the first time I ever wrote a song =) Intro trackNot on your own not by yourself I can be it I can be your Superman I can take you places higher than the stars I can make you happy even if it sends me to heaven I can be it I can be your SupermanRepeat intro trackWhen the world is against you I can take your hand I can do you right I can be your knight in shining armour. I can take your hand look into your eyes of blue and save you from the endless night I can be it I can be your Superman.Repeat some of intro trackNot on your own not by yourself I can be it I can be your Superman. I can do you right I can be your knight I can be it I can be your Superman. =) constructive criticizm liek[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bumblebee ® Posted July 27, 2009 Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 It's good it just needs some more rythme is all especially in the beggining. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shonen Jump™ Posted July 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 thanks bUmP cOmMeNt PlEaSe! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Azmodius Posted July 27, 2009 Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 I lol'd when I saw that this thread was by "Shonen Jump". And all those "Superman" lines are a total no. In fact, the whole thing sounded pretty cliche. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shonen Jump™ Posted July 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 27, 2009 :( <3 Supermansorry to hear that bud Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Captain Lawless Posted July 28, 2009 Report Share Posted July 28, 2009 Kryptonite by 3 Doors Down would like to have a word wi- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shonen Jump™ Posted July 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted July 28, 2009 I would like to have a word with them NAO! ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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