My first card

[Paladin91]

i'm new here and this is my first card. I was unsure of the def though. I wanted it a level 7 monster. Maybe I should lower the DEF to 2700?

 

[Captain Murphy ☆]

not very good for a first card but you tried some OCG errors OCG (official card grammar) and bad pic

not very realistic

3/10

[Dark Mousy]

This monster can attack while in Defense position. Once per turn, you can remove 1 LIGHT Monster from play, then increase your Life Points by 300 x the removed Monster's Level.

 

Here is your OCG errors fixed. Go find a better picture.

 

I won't rate it until you do.

[The Dark Megacyber]

Horrible OCG, bad pic and it's like "Total Defense Shogun". 3.5/10

[Red_Eyes Black Drag]

Yes, there are some OCG mistakes, but you can tell what the intended effect is. The def should probly be lowered to 2600-2700. 2700 is quite good.

Personally, i think the healing effect is a little too strong. I could be wrong, but its just my opinion. Maybe it should be x 200 per level?

You did use a custom pic though.

6.5/10 for originality.

[Kotaro]

OCG needs work and the effect is a bit OP.

 

You need to find a better pic, that picture is too blurry

 

5/10

[Ghost Ryder]

This monster can attack while in Defense position. Once per turn' date='[/b'] you can remove 1 LIGHT Monster from play, then increase your Life Points by 300 x the removed Monster's Level.

 

Here is your OCG errors fixed. Go find a better picture.

 

I won't rate it until you do.

 

Here's the proper fixed OCG:

 

This monster can attack while in Defense Position. Once per turn, you can remove 1 LIGHT monster from play to gain Life Points equal to the removed monster's Level x 300.

 

Don't fix OCG until you're good enough at it -_-

 

Overpowered for a Level 7 monster, 3/10

[Dark Mousy]

hmm... you didn't need to cross everything out. All you needed to cross out was "then increase", and yes... I did make a mistake.

[Ghost Ryder]

I had to, because I had coding problems.

And you need to capitalize P in Defense Position. But then again, OCG is not the most important thing in cards.

[ragnarok1945]

reminds me of Total Defense Shogun's effect a little bit

 

the picture is really blurry and OCG is off too

 

3000 def is too high for lv7 anyway

 

4/10

[740kt]

What everyone else said. Also, it's really easy to get good dragonfable pics...

[Paladin91]

...wow... don't you think that you guys are a little harsh. I said that I was new here. Well, I made some changes. Here it is. Sorry about the first picture, dang. Alright. If anyone has anymore suggestions, please make them, and try to be a little nicer? lol,

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[Red_Eyes Black Drag]

The new card is much better. Nice pic, good OCG.

I'd say 7/10.