ThecrowcardMaster Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 This just might be the best ive made yet XD PLZ RATE AND COMMENT Pentagonal Warriors Effect [align=center]This card can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card. "Pentagram Tribute". You must also offer cards whose Level Star equals 8. Destroy all Fiend-Type monsters on your opponents side of the field. Equip 1 of the cards destroyed by this cards effect, when this card is attacked destroy the equipped monster card. you may use this effect for all cards destroyed by this cards effect. [/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 I'd remove the atk boosting ability. 3100 atk is enough as it is. Give it a different effect 7.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThecrowcardMaster Posted August 15, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 yes MASTER X3 <(im serius not joking)I'd remove the atk boosting ability. 3100 atk is enough as it is. Give it a different effect 7.5/10 the deed is done Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eury Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 Yeah what ragnarok said. Love the spell cards pic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThecrowcardMaster Posted August 15, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 thanx X3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Merciful Idiot Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 Just some sort of fix. Anyway, it's kind of OP'd because you can destroy all Fiend-Type monsters just like that. Or am I missing something? I don't get the last sentence of the effect. This card can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card "Pentagram Tribute". Destroy all Fiend-Type monsters on your opponents side of the field. Equip 1 of the cards destroyed by this cards effect to this card, when this card is selected as an attack, you can destroy the equipped monster to negate the attack. you may use this effect for all cards destroyed (?). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThecrowcardMaster Posted August 15, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 it also says by its effect and it should say wat to offer Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antist0opid Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 I hate it JK . It's alright but give a different effect other that the attack boost because it's attack is enough. 7.3/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
stunnero101 Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 yea ragnarok said it all(seem like always kno wat to say lol)7.6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThecrowcardMaster Posted August 15, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 i just read the card the real effect is under it ill change it asap!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.King Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 Your best? .......... Well, it's OK. It could use some work on the effects and pics though. But it's good Overall. ^^ 7.5/10. Nice. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antist0opid Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 The fix made the effect unnessacery because, the equipped monster makes no sense. All it does is get destroyed. Does it negate the attack or prevent the card from being destroye. The effect is more unclear now. Also you wrote you can only use it on 1 monster then you wrote you can use it on all monsers. The effect is terrible, makes no sense, and the card got worse. 3/10 now. Fix the effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThecrowcardMaster Posted August 15, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 prevents the card from destruction Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antist0opid Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 You should write in the card "If this card were to be destroyed by battle you can destroy one equipped monster to this card instead." That will make it more clear. If you fix it to have that effect it will be better. And also write "Desroy and equip as many fiend type monsters on your opponents side of the field to this card. So then the effect is: "This card can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell Card "Pentagram Tribute". You must also offer cards whose Level Star equals 8. Desroy and equip as many fiend type monsters on your opponents side of the field to this card. If this card were to be destroyed by battle you can destroy one equipped monster to this card instead." Then I'll say 8.3/10 be cause that would be more clear and it would make the card better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThecrowcardMaster Posted August 15, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 ohhhhhhh ok ill do that some time X3 and real quick can someone tell me how to turn cards into something u can just click on instead of posting it and taking up so much space. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 Hm. Alright, let me start with the name: Frankly, it could be better. 2800 Ritual Monster? Something like that should have a cooler sounding name. Or at least something a little less generic than "Warrior". The pic:Its plain. It also has nothing to do with pentagons. Which makes it....bad. I would suggest finding a different pic, preferably one that relates to pentagons in some way (for example: Alucard from Helsing has pentagons on his gloves...) The effect:A minor OCG tweak that you might want to know:Old OCG uses "offer", new OCG uses "Tribute", also, I don't think you need "Stars", "Level" is fine by itself. " Equip 1 of the cards destroyed by this cards effect, when this card is attacked destroy the equipped monster card. you may use this effect for all cards destroyed by this cards effect. " This part needs major revision. Right now, what this effect means is that you equip one of the destroyed Fiend monsters, and when Pentagonal Warrior is attacked, the Fiend is destroyed, regardless of anything else. I think what you wanted was: Select 1 of the monsters destroyed by this effect, and equip it to this card as an Equip Spell Card. When this card would be destroyed by battle, destroy the Equip Spell Card instead. You can just cut out the last line of that effect, as it is already implied by "Select 1 of the monsters destroyed by this effect" Well, this effect doesn't have anything to do with Pentagons either, what's going on?Pentagons are most commonly known for summoning demons and such, right? So why would it A)destroy fiends, and B)give mild protection to this card? I would think a "Pentagonal Warrior" would in turn summon more fiends to the field, to do combat alongside him. Right now, I think what needs the most work is the flow of the card...none of it matches up. The name, effect, and pic all look like they were chosen randomly. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Archelaus Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 The Pic or Pentagonal warrior is from Bloody Roar 2. Well, they're good. 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThecrowcardMaster Posted August 15, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 .........holy crap ur like a god O.o im dieing rght now Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 Actually, re-looking at the title, it makes even less sense :q "Pentagonal" is more of...the shapes (you know...pentagons)Although "Pentagramal" sounds incredibly stupid. I would probably change the name to something like "[enter cool sounding name], the Pentagram Warrior" If you want to keep the whole "pentagram" theme going on. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThecrowcardMaster Posted August 15, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 i think im going to let the card sink into all the threadyness XDDD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted August 15, 2009 Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 yes MASTER X3 <(im serius not joking)I'd remove the atk boosting ability. 3100 atk is enough as it is. Give it a different effect 7.5/10 the deed is done fine, then I will raise the rate to 7.9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThecrowcardMaster Posted August 15, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 15, 2009 lol thanxs X3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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