Mr.WHAM Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 I have bad news...due to problems @ home, I wont have access to internet/phone/tv @ home. So im only @ YCM and Yugiohnetwork during the day (9am-7pm) guys. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 aah man, that sucks!anyway, while we are still talking about cards, perhaps you guys could comment on one of my newest ones? i'll post it here, so please make sure that you comment on and rate it, okay? ^^Lore: When this card destroys a monster your opponent controls, inflict damage to your opponent equal to the difference between the ATK of this card and the ATK of the destroyed monster. Once per turn, you can remove from play 1 monster from your Graveyard to inflict damage to your opponents Life Points equal to the removed from play monsters level x 300. for those of you who didn't catch on, this is basically the demonic form of the previous dragoon. XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr.WHAM Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 ummm chaos...that the same thing as inflict battle damage to your opponent or atk damage. I could understand if you said inflict damage equal to the attack of the destroyed monster, but don't they have that already. The only way your effect works out properly is if the monster is in defense mode. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 not necessarily. it still works, its just more like your opponent takes battle damage twice for one attack. XD besides, if i had it changed to something else, then the second part of the effect for rfg to burn would be op'd. and i forgot to modify my card, so i will do that now and modify my previous post. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GenerationX Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 Are these pics Ou? They look good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GenerationX Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 Are these pics Ou? They look good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 well the first card has some ocg errors as does the second card. the synchro monster should say that when it is in defense position, it cannot be targeted by an opponents monster, or something like that. as to the first one, you forgot something in the first sentence. it says all DARK except this one, when it is supposed to say all DARK monsters except this one, so you might want to fix that. anyway, care to comment on my card? i'll quote it here so you don't have to go searching for it in previous posts.Lore: When this card destroys a monster your opponent controls' date=' inflict damage to your opponent equal to the difference between the ATK of this card and the ATK of the destroyed monster. Once per turn, you can remove from play 1 monster from your Graveyard to inflict damage to your opponents Life Points equal to the removed from play monsters level x 300. for those of you who didn't catch on, this is basically the demonic form of the previous dragoon. XD[/quote']this is a card for a contest i am currently in. i did very well with it too. it looks more like a Pyro-Type instead of a Rock-Type, but if you look closer at the pic, you see that the monster is basically composed of rock and magma/lava, which would explain the fire shooting out from its arms and the fiery eyes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 well the first card has some ocg errors as does the second card. the synchro monster should say that when it is in defense position, it cannot be targeted by an opponents monster, or something like that. as to the first one, you forgot something in the first sentence. it says all DARK except this one, when it is supposed to say all DARK monsters except this one, so you might want to fix that. anyway, care to comment on my card? i'll quote it here so you don't have to go searching for it in previous posts.Lore: When this card destroys a monster your opponent controls' date=' inflict damage to your opponent equal to the difference between the ATK of this card and the ATK of the destroyed monster. Once per turn, you can remove from play 1 monster from your Graveyard to inflict damage to your opponents Life Points equal to the removed from play monsters level x 300. for those of you who didn't catch on, this is basically the demonic form of the previous dragoon. XD[/quote']this is a card for a contest i am currently in. i did very well with it too. it looks more like a Pyro-Type instead of a Rock-Type, but if you look closer at the pic, you see that the monster is basically composed of rock and magma/lava, which would explain the fire shooting out from its arms and the fiery eyes. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RAEGING D0GKING Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 Why amint I on the list Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Ursus Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 Are these pics Ou? They look good.I have actually seen neither of them used on a card before' date=' except for the first one. That one is OU. The effects are good, but you should perhaps lengthen them a bit, as to make them stand out. Your OCG is very good. A little edgy on the first one, but very good. O. Why amint I on the listGuess Max doesn't have much time at the moment. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr.WHAM Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 wooowww....iwish i wasnt gone but no worries Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Max Darkness Posted December 9, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 [spoiler=@Chaos Zero]You're right, it would have been better as a Rock-Type also treated as a Pyro-Type. As for the effect: When this card destroys a monster your opponent controls, before applying damage calculation, inflict damage to your opponent equal to the difference between the ATK of this card and the ATK of the destroyed monster. Once per turn, you can remove 1 monster in your Graveyard from play to inflict damage to your opponents Life Points equal to the removed from play monster's Level x 300. It's pretty good, reminds me of "Reflect Bounder" from the older sets. And the remove from play switch is just because I think it flows better if you split the 'remove' and 'from play' parts. 8/10 (Because of the OCG errors). [spoiler=@ Santa's Little Helper]Haven't got to that yet. Will update. [spoiler=@ Generation X]Bloodydoom Warrior This card's pic is overused. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, all DARK monsters gain 300 ATK, except this card. When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, Special Summon 2 "Blood Tokens" (Warrior-Type/DARK/Level 2/ATK 500/DEF 500). These tokens cannot be Tributed, except for the Tribute Summon of a DARK monster. I'd change it to only one Blood Token. After all, if you have two tokens, you can then summon a pair of these cards and get four tokens, enough for two Level 8 DARK monsters, which is a little overpowered. Either that, or add a Life Point cost for the tokens. Razor Jack Seen this image once. A year ago. This card cannot be destroyed by battle. (Damage calculation is applied normally.) Very bland effect. Since it's a undead pirate, how about an effect that revolves around taking cards from your opponent's Graveyard. Since it's Level 4, it can't be too powerful; so keep it balanced. Also, I'd either reduce this card's ATK a little or this card's DEF a lot; or have a self-harming effect when it is removed from the field. (So it is balanced.) Zombie Dwarf Seen this picture once. Not recently. When this card is destroyed by battle and sent to the Graveyard, you can pay 500 Life Points to Special Summon this card in face-down Defense Position. Take advantage of this effect and give it an effect that activates when it is flipped face-up. Dread Spider Never seen the image before. Good work. 1 Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner monstersAs long as this card remains in face-up Defense Position, your opponent's monster cannot target it. When this card is destroyed by battle, you can destroy up to 3 Spell or Trap Cards your opponent controls. Effect slightly changed since 3 monsters is a lot of damage, even from a Level 8. Either change it to 'Level 4 or lower' monsters or keep the change I've made. Also, you might want to also treat this monster as an Insect-Type. (To do so, insert the sentance: "This card is also treated as an Insect-Type monster." after the Summoning conditions.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GenerationX Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 well the first card has some ocg errors as does the second card. the synchro monster should say that when it is in defense position' date=' it cannot be targeted by an opponents monster, or something like that. as to the first one, you forgot something in the first sentence. it says all DARK except this one, when it is supposed to say all DARK [b']monsters[/b] except this one, so you might want to fix that. anyway, care to comment on my card? i'll quote it here so you don't have to go searching for it in previous posts.Lore: When this card destroys a monster your opponent controls' date=' inflict damage to your opponent equal to the difference between the ATK of this card and the ATK of the destroyed monster. Once per turn, you can remove from play 1 monster from your Graveyard to inflict damage to your opponents Life Points equal to the removed from play monsters level x 300. for those of you who didn't catch on, this is basically the demonic form of the previous dragoon. XD[/quote']this is a card for a contest i am currently in. i did very well with it too. it looks more like a Pyro-Type instead of a Rock-Type, but if you look closer at the pic, you see that the monster is basically composed of rock and magma/lava, which would explain the fire shooting out from its arms and the fiery eyes. Thank you for the comments. I am improving my OCG now. The monster you created is very good. It has a good picture, but I cannot understand the last effect. Once per turn, you can remove from play 1 monster from your Graveyard to inflict damage to your opponents Life Points equal to the removed from play monsters level x 300. Which monsters? Monster's? Explain please. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 basically you take a monster from a graveyard and remove it from play. lets say it wads a reflect bounder (just because max mentioned the card). i remove reflect bounder from play, and it is a level 4 monster. so my opponent takes 300 damage x 4 since it is a level 4 monster, meaning that my opponent takes a total of 1200 damage due to that effect.and thanks for the comment max, i appreciate it. however, your comment on X's synchro monster is something that i would change a little bit so that instead it says destroy 3 cards on your opponents side of the field. this way, you can still target one or 2 monsters that your opponent controls while destroying spell/trap cards that he/she has on the field. i would want to make it 4 for that effect, but that would definitely make it overpowered. but yeah, it's a very good effect. and i agree with max where the dwarf is concerned, give it a flip summon effect, probably one where you return monsters to your opponents hand or deal life points of damage. might i suggest a variant of just deserts where your opponent takes 300 damage for each card on their side of the field?and that is definitely the undead version of captain jack sparrow from pirates, so it wouldn't surprise me if the pic was OU. that aside, he definitely could use a better effect then just not being attacked, although that would make him very useful. i would suggest a variant of marauding captain or command knight where you can special summon another monster or give an ATK increase to other monsters of the same type on your side of the field. also, be aware that jack not being able to be targeted means that unless you have at least one other Zombie-Type monster on the field, your opponent is able to attack your life points directly, just like if i would be using 2 command knights or marauding captains to get a field lock. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr.WHAM Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 wooooow giant post too big for my eyes right now. I need a favor guys. Can any body find a picture that would fit with the name "Mirror's Eye - Hallucinodragon". If you can i'd greatly appreciate it. I can't get on deviant art ritgh now seeing as my school blocked it and my proxy isn't working right. It'd be a HUGE help. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 i suppose i could try to help, i give no guarantees as to the results though. oh, and about my last post...this calls for shenanigans of the ancient variety. XDbasically you take a monster from a graveyard and remove it from play. lets say it wads a reflect bounder (just because max mentioned the card). i remove reflect bounder from play' date=' and it is a level 4 monster. so my opponent takes 300 damage x 4 since it is a level 4 monster, meaning that my opponent takes a total of 1200 damage due to that effect.and thanks for the comment max, i appreciate it. however, your comment on X's synchro monster is something that i would change a little bit so that instead it says [b']destroy 3 cards on your opponents side of the field.[/b] this way, you can still target one or 2 monsters that your opponent controls while destroying spell/trap cards that he/she has on the field. i would want to make it 4 for that effect, but that would definitely make it overpowered. but yeah, it's a very good effect. and i agree with max where the dwarf is concerned, give it a flip summon effect, probably one where you return monsters to your opponents hand or deal life points of damage. might i suggest a variant of just deserts where your opponent takes 300 damage for each card on their side of the field?and that is definitely the undead version of captain jack sparrow from pirates, so it wouldn't surprise me if the pic was OU. that aside, he definitely could use a better effect then just not being attacked, although that would make him very useful. i would suggest a variant of marauding captain or command knight where you can special summon another monster or give an ATK increase to other monsters of the same type on your side of the field. also, be aware that jack not being able to be targeted means that unless you have at least one other Zombie-Type monster on the field, your opponent is able to attack your life points directly, just like if i would be using 2 command knights or marauding captains to get a field lock."HOLY WALL OF TEXT BATMAN!!!" -faints from the incrompehensiveness of the giant text wall-"Dammit Robin, what have i told you about swearing?! ......oh great, now you've got me swearing as well.XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GenerationX Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 Here is it (Mirror dragon): Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 wow, that's a pretty good one.and X, your first card doesn't go over all that well, as there are several monsters that have the same effect which do not require a fusion summon, mataza the zapper, for example. also, the same effect could be gained by equipping twin swords of flashing light tryce to any monster. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GenerationX Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 Fun fact: I have registered before Chaos Zero and on the same month as Max Darkness. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr.WHAM Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 yea and X I cant see the pic waaaaah umm would mind pming it to me or just the link and What are the links to you cards i wish ti see them... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Ursus Posted December 9, 2009 Report Share Posted December 9, 2009 I joined 2 years ago, and I'm not even at 2000 posts yet. Guess I'm not as active as some of the members here. I'll be unavailable for perhaps an hour or so, as school work is my main priority right now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mr.WHAM Posted December 10, 2009 Report Share Posted December 10, 2009 About the cards though nice pics and in general ok effects. you need to make them less self damaging though Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Ursus Posted December 10, 2009 Report Share Posted December 10, 2009 When do you reckon you'll have the critiques for the 5th round up, Max? Hope it does better than the previous rounds... But we'll just have to wait and see about that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Max Darkness Posted December 10, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 10, 2009 When do you reckon you'll have the critiques for the 5th round up' date=' Max? Hope it does better than the previous rounds... But we'll just have to wait and see about that.[/quote'] Hopefully by tonight; but work is unending at the moment. And you did do better than in other rounds. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Zero Posted December 10, 2009 Report Share Posted December 10, 2009 that's good. anyway, what's up people? i been busy lately, o i haven't been able to post as often as usual. oh, and starting january, i am likely going to be able to post only late in the evening on thurs. fri. & sat., just so you know. the reason for this is me helping out with cards stuff at the taylor trade center of which i hope to get paid for doing sometime soon within the next few months. XD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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