Dark Posted August 18, 2009 Report Share Posted August 18, 2009 [align=center]Yes, it is another poem. The elapsed time for writing this is about five minutes. This isn't your normal poem. Enjoy. This time, I want no criticism, I want discussion. ContradictionsBy: Dªrĸ There once was a man,so short, but so tall.He lived in a house,which was devoid of a wall. He sat and he slept,and he was awake all the time.He was spotless and clean,yet still covered in grime. One day he awoke,from his endless slumber.He called '911',but forgot the number. Two men on his shoulder,both skinny and fat,told him what to do,both good and the bad. He then went to court,as thick as this rhyme,he pleaded both innocent,and guilty in his prime. They hung him and bashed him,cut out his heart,but the man was still alive,as happy as a tart. He went to the doctor,and asked him what's wrong.The doctor was baffled,But knew all along. The man was broken,due to contradictions.Never again would he deal,with lifes jurisdictions.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zimiri of the Muse Posted August 18, 2009 Report Share Posted August 18, 2009 good i like it very much Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted August 18, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 18, 2009 Really? o_O Not what I was hoping for. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Catman25 Posted August 18, 2009 Report Share Posted August 18, 2009 I fail to find the deeper meaning behind these contradictions. Maybe I'm slow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted August 18, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 18, 2009 TBH, I don't think there are any deeper meanings. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted August 18, 2009 Report Share Posted August 18, 2009 I liked it. Dude's psycho, but whatever. lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Exyst Posted August 18, 2009 Report Share Posted August 18, 2009 I came here expecting something Phoenix-related. I was saddened. The poem feels, rather nice, to repeat. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted August 18, 2009 Report Share Posted August 18, 2009 That's cute. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kitty Posted August 18, 2009 Report Share Posted August 18, 2009 Psycho works for me.. i wish i could cut my heart out... -sigh- no feelings no depression no suicidal thoughs.. that'd be perfect..=D Great Poem Dark Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted August 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 I liked it. Dude's psycho' date=' but whatever. lol[/quote'] Is he? Or is he normal? Thanks. ^_^ I came here expecting something Phoenix-related. I was saddened. The poem feels' date=' rather nice, to repeat.[/quote'] Meh. I didn't make it to be "nice". I wanted discussion! That's cute. So is your avatar. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yugiohrulez! Posted August 19, 2009 Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 Holy CRAP that was good. What is with Poems on YCM?!?!?!And why are they so much better than a normal poem you hear?!?!?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dweller of Parables Posted August 19, 2009 Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 I think I heard this somewhere else before... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted August 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 Nah, this is my poem. I don't know if some lines are similar to other poems, but it wasn't intended plagarism. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted August 19, 2009 Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 Holy CRAP that was good. What is with Poems on YCM?!?!?!And why are they so much better than a normal poem you hear?!?!?! Where the hell have you been reading poetry? on deviantart? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted August 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 dA has poetry? I thought it was just another place to steal pictures from. :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted August 19, 2009 Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 dA has poetry? I thought it was just another place to steal pictures from. :/ http://blackbudderfly.deviantart.com/art/eMOTIONAL-95510610 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted August 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 But that sucks. :/ At least some images are good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Azmodius Posted August 19, 2009 Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 Holy CRAP that was good. What is with Poems on YCM?!?!?!And why are they so much better than a normal poem you hear?!?!?! I think i'm having a LOLYCM moment here. But dark nice poem man. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Poseidon© Posted August 19, 2009 Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 Objection! This poem rocks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Juuzou Posted August 19, 2009 Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 i lol'd, but this poem feels as if it were a lymric, yet perfectly serious at the same time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
alcaldias_27 Posted August 19, 2009 Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 weird poem, but great. Full of paradoxes... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zimiri of the Muse Posted August 19, 2009 Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 Really? o_O Not what I was hoping for.fine then it sucks like hell Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Posted August 19, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 19, 2009 I didn't make this poem to receive rates. I wanted discussion. :/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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