DX4Eva Posted August 22, 2009 Report Share Posted August 22, 2009 This is just a preview, so it's short. Don't complain. England, 1993 Tommy, aged 9, lay in bed, listening to the pounding rain on the roof. He couldn't sleep. Tommorow, he would set out on a journey that could change his life forever. Duelists from over the world would join up for one competition -The hunt for a New Champion. "I WILL be the new champion," Says Tommy, determined. "I just know it." So, should I continue? Or not? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ThatPhantomGuy Posted August 22, 2009 Report Share Posted August 22, 2009 Um, I'm not one to complain but... It is a little short to be asking to continue or not, don't you think? You're writing and detail is pretty good, just extend this preview and you're on you're way. I look forward to more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted August 23, 2009 Report Share Posted August 23, 2009 Too short, too vague. This could happen anywhere in the world with a few changes of words, and I don't even know what kind of fanfic this is. Plus, is it Jimmy or Tommy? xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DX4Eva Posted August 23, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 23, 2009 Ahhh, oops :P Sorry, this was done really late, and I'm only 11, I was tired :( I'll edit now. It's Tommy :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted August 23, 2009 Report Share Posted August 23, 2009 Ahhh' date=' oops :P Sorry, this was done really late, and [b']I'm only 11[/b], I was tired :( I'll edit now. It's Tommy :) HORRIBLE EXCUSE. Look at Weather Fish or whatever his/her/it/their name(s) are. He/she/it/they are (supposedly) only 12, and he/she/it/they can produce very good work. Age is no excuse. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DX4Eva Posted August 23, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 23, 2009 Ahhh' date=' oops :P Sorry, this was done really late, and [b']I'm only 11[/b], I was tired :( I'll edit now. It's Tommy :) HORRIBLE EXCUSE. Look at Weather Fish or whatever his/her/it/their name(s) are. He/she/it/they are (supposedly) only 12, and he/she/it/they can produce very good work. Age is no excuse. Yeah, they probably can. It was 12 oclock at night for God's sake, I was tired. I forgot one name, don't get mad -.- Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted August 23, 2009 Report Share Posted August 23, 2009 Ahhh' date=' oops :P Sorry, this was done really late, and [b']I'm only 11[/b], I was tired :( I'll edit now. It's Tommy :) HORRIBLE EXCUSE. Look at Weather Fish or whatever his/her/it/their name(s) are. He/she/it/they are (supposedly) only 12, and he/she/it/they can produce very good work. Age is no excuse. Yeah, they probably can. It was 12 oclock at night for God's sake, I was tired. I forgot one name, don't get mad -.- And your point is? I usually type at 1 AM; that's my best time. You should go to bed earlier if it doesn't work out for you. However, I don't feel that arguing will be productive here, so just read through that guide adn rewrite it. You can do it, it just takes effort. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OMGAKITTY Posted August 23, 2009 Report Share Posted August 23, 2009 lol, sounds like Sword in the Stone, revamped for dueling. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Smiley Posted August 25, 2009 Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 To short even for a previewwrite at least three pages AT LEASTthen publish =P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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