-Azure- Posted August 24, 2009 Report Share Posted August 24, 2009 plz cut me some slack it's my first card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Max Darkness Posted August 24, 2009 Report Share Posted August 24, 2009 This is pretty good for a first card. 'normal summoned or set...special summoned...tributing' = 'Normal Summoned or Set...Special Summoned...Tributing''defense position' = 'Defense Position'Last sentence: This card gains 100 ATK for each DARK monster in your Graveyard. 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kriskirla Posted August 24, 2009 Report Share Posted August 24, 2009 Can you type out the lore because i want to fix all the OCG error. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted August 24, 2009 Report Share Posted August 24, 2009 this is actually very good due to barely any OCG errors, effect is plain, but still good 8.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shadow Ninja Posted August 25, 2009 Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 You have some OCG errors, like special summoned is supposed to be Special Summoned.The effect is ok. 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eury Posted August 25, 2009 Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 Good for a newbie. Few ocg errors, effect is a bit bland but effective. 8.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Azure- Posted August 25, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 thanks guys!how about the pic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
iSTIX Posted August 25, 2009 Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 Minor OCG errors, but not bad for your first card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Azure- Posted August 25, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 thanks ^-^ think i should make more cards or quit o_0 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
herbie Posted August 25, 2009 Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 pretty balanceda couple minor OCG errors (forgetting capital letters, wording a tiny bit off) but all in all a good cardi dunno what to say reallymaybe just chuck a background into the picture and you'll be set8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Azure- Posted August 25, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 tyvm:4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
matthew251 Posted August 25, 2009 Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 brilliant for your first card but as the other dudes said some minor ocg errors but brilliant for a first card Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Azure- Posted August 25, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 thanks!any other replies? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Leo Posted August 25, 2009 Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 that is really good for a first card. erase (sux but still) in your title. that is a lie. minor OCG errors ~8/10~ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ultimas Posted August 25, 2009 Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 Good 4 first card newbie:-) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bro bro and sissy Posted August 25, 2009 Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 this is my best but not first card i sort of copied it of a real card its really popular but can you guess the difference? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vailan Posted August 25, 2009 Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 This card needs background ;), that would make it much better. OCG needs some changes:"This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by tributing 3 face-up DARK Monsters on your side of the field".Between 'card' and 'inflict', you must add a , -> card, inflict ;)this = This.graveyard = Graveyard. The card's effect is nice ;) 7,5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lexadin Posted August 25, 2009 Report Share Posted August 25, 2009 nice card for a new member.A 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-Azure- Posted December 14, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 14, 2009 BUMP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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