90°celsius Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 My first card, hope you enjoy. [spoiler=Original Version of Card] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Neo-MasterX Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
90°celsius Posted August 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 5/10... I guess that's acceptable. Thank you for the criticism and the rate. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ruy Blackbird Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 Great card, love the picture. Maybe add an extra effect? It is a little bland and a little UP'ed at the moment. (I am not a pro) I am not an OCG pro, but shouldn't it be: Graveyard, ATK, DEF? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
90°celsius Posted August 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 BLAND! BLAND!... Yeah I know. Thanks for the criticism and advice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vailan Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 OCG is pretty bad, pic looks OK. 6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
90°celsius Posted August 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 What exactly is so bad with the OCG if I may ask? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ruy Blackbird Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 It's not bad. It just has a few flaws and some people find that truly horrible. I don't have a problem, because it is easy to understand. I can only recognise the before-mentioned, there might be some more. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RubberDuckZilla Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 As everyone else has said, the pic is good but the OCG needs work, however they haven't told you what's actually wrong; -graveyard=Graveyard-attack and defense=ATK and DEF-spell cards=Spell Cards (basically capitalisation)-Warrior type=Warrior-Type I think that's all :) Good card other wise, 7/10 ~D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
90°celsius Posted August 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 Updated version of card added. Hope that one is better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RubberDuckZilla Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 Updated version of card added. Hope that one is better. It is better, I'll raise my rating to 8.5/10. I think all that is left to improve on is the actual effect, maybe add another aspect to it, probably a drawback :) Still, good work ~D Check out my cards too, http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-150896.html Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Coreander Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 In the future,write out the Lore (effect) for the card so your OCG may be fixed faster. [spoiler=OCG fix]This card is treated as a Warrior-Type monster while in your Graveyard. If your opponent controls 2 or more face-up Spell Cards, this card gains 300 ATK and DEF. [spoiler=new OCG fix]This card is treated as a Warrior-Type monster while in your Graveyard.This card gains 300 ATK for every 2 Spell or Trap Cards on your opponent's side of the field. If this card's ATK is higher than 2000, treat it as a Level 4 Warrior-Type monster. Artwork is okay.OCG is corrected.Effect (original) is bland and not that useful.Maybe put a higher ATK increase.Effect (new) is better.But add for each Spell or Trap Card and lower the increase (This card gains 200 ATK for each Spell or Trap Cards on your opponent's side of the field.) and maybe increase the Level from 4 to 5. 7/108/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wanderley Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 it is really cool for your first card you have potential Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
90°celsius Posted August 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 BUT I DON"T LIKE TRAP CARDS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! BWAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA! Jk thank you for the OCG fix and I like the effect the way it is. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~RoBoTiClOvEr~ Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 OCG is fixedpic is goodeffect is alrightoverall 8.3/10good job Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
90°celsius Posted August 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 Thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
jaster_rogue Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 nice card, Good effect8.5/10:D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 effect is reasonable, OCG looks good (still might want to check the OCG thread though) 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
awesomeuser Posted August 28, 2009 Report Share Posted August 28, 2009 The OCG Thread: http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/thread-118387.html Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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