Pmac Posted September 3, 2009 Report Share Posted September 3, 2009 I dont know if i can post this because it isnt really a fan fic.I made a deck called "Modern Destruction" and i thought about creating a story for it.Check the deck here: Modern Destruction deck Resume:This story is going to be about Peaceful and Calm, two guys warped in the middle of a war that destroyed everything.Humans and robots united to destroy other human and robots.Its seems that the members of the band "The voice of Reason" are the only ones that know how to stop this war but they broke up one year before the story begins and Peaceful and Calm are trying to find them all and reunite them.We are also going to follow the story of Runaway, one robot that run from the war.Lider and the Prince, the bosses of both sides of the war continually destroying the worldThe evolution of Adams from the beta to V2.5And some other stories involving all of the characters from the deck.Starting soon... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
CeDeFiA Posted September 3, 2009 Report Share Posted September 3, 2009 A band knows how to stop a war? Interesting o.O Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pmac Posted September 3, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 3, 2009 Did you check the deck?[spoiler=Effect of "Power of Reason"]You can only activate the effect of this card when you have in the field"Modern Warrior - The voice of reason","Modern Warrior - The voice of reason #2", "Modern Warrior - The voice of reason #3","Modern Warrior - The voice of reason #4" and "Modern Warrior - The voice of reason #5"At each of your stand by phases add one counter to this card as long as the 5 cards are face up position in your side of the field. When this card has 3 counters you automatically win the duel.If one of the cards mentioned is destroyed remove all counters from this card That makes me faithful to the deck and actually have a plot. Every thing is going to work fine Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kendo Fish Posted September 4, 2009 Report Share Posted September 4, 2009 Watch out for grammar. One robot that RUN from the war should be RAN. Past tense is mandatory for that. Watch out for capitalization. It should be "The Voice of Reason". Watch out for paragraphing. You apparently pressed ENTER at random points in the plot. And one last thing...that makes YOU faithful to the deck and it makes YOU actually have a plot? Be careful. If your fan fiction has that type of wording you might need to revise things. Then again, maybe your typing is awesome in story format. Just...keep these in mind. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pmac Posted September 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 4, 2009 Ok, some errors may appear because im portuguese, english is not my main language Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted September 4, 2009 Report Share Posted September 4, 2009 Yeah, well I'm Korean. That excuse has been used so mnay times, yet it doesn't make a difference. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pmac Posted September 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 4, 2009 I guess youre right, but i do a couple of mistakes Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted September 4, 2009 Report Share Posted September 4, 2009 I guess you're right' date=' but [b']I[/b] do a couple of mistakes. I see. Fixed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pmac Posted September 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 4, 2009 I never understood that one.I know it is that way but something in a middle of a phrase cant be in capitals!Why do they make it that way just for one word. We dont say You, we say you... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaisu Posted September 4, 2009 Report Share Posted September 4, 2009 I dunno. You're right about that though, if 'I' is treated like a name, why isn't 'my' or 'you' treated the same way? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pmac Posted September 4, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 4, 2009 Anyway, lets stop talking about English grammar and start reading "mah" story: Prologue - The creation of Adam As this story starts we find two peoples in a laboratory, the laboratory was full of robot body parts scattered all over the place.In the middle was a black robot, it didnt seem to be completed. -How is the evolution of this thing?-Asked the younger of the two,he didnt seemed like a scientist and he probably had twenty years -This is not a "thing", this is the first of the "Adam" robot series, the ultimate destruction machine!!-Screamed the other one, he was older, he should be at least forty years old.He was wearing a weird robot like blue suit. -It doesn't matter to me...Im the Prince, i only need to know when is it ready to be in the battle field.-Prince was an very arrogant general, but also very skilled. To prove that he was promoted to general very early in is life. -I don't think you should be that ignorant about this-The scientist seemed very angry, but he tried to control himself when facing his boss. -When is this thing finished?!I hope i dont have to repeat myself. -In only three days.The IA is already implemented and the weapons too,the only thing missing is the skin and some tests. -I hope that this is as good as you have being saying this past days -They call me the "Advanced Scientist" for some reason. -Hump...-The Prince left the room and the scientist went it him. Both of them walked over a gray corridor when one of the soldiers arrived near him -Sir,i have important information-He said -What is it?-Prince asked -It seems someone is trying to hack our sistem -Did you trace the signal? -We tried, but it seems to have someway to fool us because the signal came from the room you were in The scientist looked very preoccupied and run to the room.Prince and the soldier followed him, when they arrived they saw the scientist in an empty room -It seems they are hacking us...Theres nothing here-Said the Prince -Thats exactly the problem!-The scientist exclaimed -What? The scientist looked at him with an expression of terror. -Adam beta is not here! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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