Eury Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 My 5 star celebration card yay! To celebrate this event I created a card based on my favorite card type: Sea Serpents. Well technically he's a Fish support card but oh well...enjoy! =D [align=center][spoiler=Lore]:This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Tributing 3 WATER monsters you control while "Umi" is face-up on the field. Once per turn while "Umi" is face-up on the field activate one of the following effects:-Discard 3 Fish-Type monsters to destroy all non Fish-Type monsters on your opponent's side of the field. This card cannot attack the turn this effect is activated. Skip your next Draw Phase.-Discard your entire hand to send the top 5 cards of your opponent's Deck to the Graveyard.-Send the top 5 cards of your Deck to the Graveyard to destroy all cards on your opponent's side of the field. This card cannot attack the turn this effect is activated.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lyfe. Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 WATER attribute = WATERyour side of the field = your fieldyour opponent's side of the field = your opponent's field ATK and DEF are odd 7/10 Congrats on the 5th Star. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dragoncreator12 Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 Nice card but OCG could be better. The ATK isn't that odd but it could be less odd. 7.5/10Congrates on the 5th star! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 The image is great. OCG Fix:"This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Tributing 3 WATER attribute monsters you control while "A Legendary OceanUmi" is face-up on the field. Once per turn while "Umi" is face-up on the field activate one of the following effects:-Discard 3 Fish-Type monsters to destroy all non Fish-Type monsters on your opponent's side of the field.-Discard your entire hand to send the top 5 cards of your opponent's Deck to the Graveyard.-Send the top 5 cards of your Deck to the Graveyard to destroy all cards on your opponent's side of the field. This card cannot attack the turn this effect is activated. You might as well make it Umi rather then A Legendary Ocean seeing as it IS Umi except for the upgrades =/ First Effect is Overpowering. You need more of a drawback then just discarding cards. Other then that its good. 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eury Posted September 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 Yeah I was confused on the OCG cause I didn't really know any card's to look at for guidance. And I made the ATK and DEF that way to piss of opponent's who don't have a calculator or a sheet of paper...stupid n00bs (talking about the people who don't have calculators). =D Edit: Thanks for the OCG correction LLD. =D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 Give the first effect a bigger drawback than mere card discarding and you'll be fine 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
destron Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 -Discard your entire hand to send the top 5 cards of your opponent's Deck to the Graveyard. make it like: Discard 5 cards from your hand to send . . .otherwise i love it (even the ATK and DEF) 9/10 its been said before but i'll just say it too. CONGRATS!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eury Posted September 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 Fixed OCG. Is the skip Draw Phase part too much? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 no, that would certainly balanced it out more Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 Yeah I was confused on the OCG cause I didn't really know any card's to look at for guidance. And I made the ATK and DEF that way to piss of opponent's who don't have a calculator or a sheet of paper...stupid n00bs (talking about the people who don't have calculators). =D Edit: Thanks for the OCG correction LLD. =D ^^ Np :3 I really like the card though and its fine ;3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Logix Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 ATK and DEF are oddOCG Fix:"This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Tributing 3 WATER attribute monsters you control while "A Legendary OceanUmi" is face-up on the field. Once per turn while "Umi" is face-up on the field activate one of the following effects:-Discard 3 Fish-Type monsters to destroy all non Fish-Type monsters on your opponent's side of the field.-Discard your entire hand to send the top 5 cards of your opponent's Deck to the Graveyard.-Send the top 5 cards of your Deck to the Graveyard to destroy all cards on your opponent's side of the field. This card cannot attack the turn this effect is activated. Yeah, kinda OPed. I like the pic though. :) 7.5/10Congratz. :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 Hmm...Your current Card with the changes is perfect :3 10/10 which is my highest and rarest grade ;P yaaaay!!! lolz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 so this is why I rarely ever see you give 10/10s either LLD......... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eury Posted September 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 Watch some n00bs are going to see this and find out cards like this get 10/10s from LLD and they're going to completely rip me off... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nighthawk14 Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 OCG actually is missing some commas. LLD corrected most of the mistakes though. How could it be a 10/10? Its ATK and DEF are also very odd. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 lol yup Rag ;3 but i think this is the wrong place ; . ; i'm on 3 different sites sorry I was posting my new score here and on one of the other sites ; . ; this is 9/10 and as to Nighthawk - I dont much count the commas but I do realize i missed some and there arent many. Also the odd attack isnt really odd o.o there are loads of cards with attacks of --50 :3. But yes its not a 10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeckShuffler711 Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 Congradulations!One step closer to being a Mod sir?o: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eury Posted September 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 @LLD: Aww man...so close. :( @DeckShuffler711: Yes. Yes it is. Rate? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 @ David: ^^' sorry ; . ; @Deckshuffler: I'm not sure that just because your a 6 star member you become a Mod =/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eury Posted September 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 @ David: ^^' sorry ; . ; @Deckshuffler: I'm not sure that just because your a 6 star member you become a Mod =/ There are other requirements but being 5 stars is one of them. So...it's a step in the right direction. =D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nighthawk14 Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 No, you have to prove your worthiness. Asking and striving to become one lowers your chances I believe. Anyway congrats on 5-stars, I had my 5 stars for awhile. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 Lol thought so. Well I dont really mind whether Im a mod or not ^^ as long as I can make cards im fine :3. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Eury Posted September 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 ...Then I guess I should change my whatever it's called where it says I hope to be a mod... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DeckShuffler711 Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 I'd say a 10/10. o_o Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nighthawk14 Posted September 6, 2009 Report Share Posted September 6, 2009 Lol thought so. Well I dont really mind whether Im a mod or not ^^ as long as I can make cards im fine :3.I thought so to I read it and heard it, once or twice awhile back..... Anyway the card could use a bit more commas and it's effect doesn't really suite the WATER originality. Sea Serpents aren't as common these days....other than it its a very effect card though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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