One of my only first monster cards. -----Mega Unstoppible Murder Lvl 9------ (Changed From Ritual To Monster) Please Com

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[spoiler=Lore]This card has to be special summoned or set. This card gain 100 DEF points for every dragon monster on the field. This card cannot be destroyed in battle. If this card is destroyed you may special summon "Mega Dragon Unstoppible Murder lvl10" . You may negate the effect of a spell or trap card by giving up 300 LP. This card can ATK twice if discard half of your LP. Every time your opponent draws a card this card gains 500 DEF points. If this card is destroyed it gains 900 ATK points. By discarding 900 LP this card can gain 200 ATK points. If this card is attack on the first turn it gets decreased by 900 ATK. If the card "Mega Dragon Unstoppable Murder Lvl 8 is on the field this card gets decreased by 700 DEF and "Mega Dragon Unstoppable murder Lvl 8" gains 700 DEF points. If this card gets destroyed your opponent loses the LP as well. If there is 4 cards on your side of the field this card gets destroyed. If this card gets destroyed you can special summon Mega Dragon Unstoppable murder Lvl 4" If this card is not ritual summoned this card gets decreased by 700 DEF points. If Discard all your LP except for 1 you may put the LP number in this cards ATK. If the card "Thunder Roars" is on the field this card gets decreased by 70 DEF. Once this card ATK this card is directly to in DEF position.

 

[MKJ]

its not "discarding" lp its paying and raise the cost of the negation part to like 800 lp and if there is no ritual card just make it an effect card other wise the pic is nice but add a back ground 6/10

[Neo-MasterX]

if its a ritual monster then it don't needs something like LV

Very much OCG errors:

spacial = Special

summon = Summon

set = Set

destroyed in battle = destroyed by battle

twice the LP = your half Life Points

discarding 300 LP = paying 300 Life Points

if discard half of your Life Points = by paying your half Life Points

this card may gain = this card gain

dragon monster on the field = Dragon-type monster on both players field

4/10

[ragnarok1945]

where's the ritual spell card for this? and the way it's summoned does not follow the proper ritual way anyway

 

4/10

[colonialwill]

To be truthful does not make much sense ,and a bad pic but deseving a 5.6/10

[Docter Mudkipz]

dont take this personally, but 3/10

[MKJ]

if u crop the pic it should be better

[Blazer]

there u can see now

[MKJ]

u didn't re post it

[Blazer]

really?

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changed effect

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Comments?

[Rook Bishop]

it good but it need a ritual spell card and it got ocg error. 7/10

[MKJ]

Ya either make it an effect monster or make a ritual card and take out the lv part

[herbie]

i'm sorry but this a horrible card

have you even seen a yugioh card before?

before you make cards at least see what they look like and read them to get an idea on proper OCG

[MKJ]

Ocg errors are still there and make a ritual card it's not that hard just fix ur card

[Shocked]

This is Effect monster, this isn't ritual. And don't use "LP" use "Life Points"

 

3/10

[MKJ]

Just fix ur card already!!

[Blazer]

There consider the OCG done.

[Rook Bishop]

You also need to make the ritual card. 8/10

[Blazer]

Thanks

[MKJ]

Why don't you make a ritual card yet??

[Blazer]

Changed from ritual to monster

[BlackHaloRose]

You only fixed one small problem by changing it to an Effect Monster. Also this card is has 11 Stars but is apparently Level 9, might want to fix that. Probably cut like... 5 of those effects? Maybe just give it 1 or 2 simple effects. It has like 3 effects that happen when it gets destroyed, including gaining 900 ATK... which doesn't make much sense...

[Blazer]

More?

[Maliki]

I almost wet myself 7/10