GHawk Posted September 9, 2009 Report Share Posted September 9, 2009 [align=center]This is my first card in a while and I know the OCG if off so please fix it if you want your doing. Also, if you fell its unblanced, fix that to. *Image Credit goes to the EPIN Father WolfFrozen Demon of the Underworld Lore:1 Tuner monster + 1 or more "Frozen Demon" monstersWhen this card is Summoned, select 1 monster your opponent controls and switch its Battle Position. When this card attacks, add 1 Frozen Counter to this card (max. 3). You can remove 3 Frozen Counters to destroy 2 Spell or Trap cards on the field your opponent controls. If this card is targeted by a monster, you can remove 2 Frozen Counter to negate the attack.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 9, 2009 Report Share Posted September 9, 2009 except for some grammatical errors on the text and 1st edition isn't a real type, everything else looks good 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wanderley Posted September 9, 2009 Report Share Posted September 9, 2009 why is it's type 1st edition??^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GHawk Posted September 9, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 9, 2009 My bad. I put that in the wron spot. Changing now. Thx ragnarok. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 9, 2009 Report Share Posted September 9, 2009 once you correct this, I'll be sure to re-rate it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GHawk Posted September 9, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 9, 2009 Fixed that problem. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 9, 2009 Report Share Posted September 9, 2009 that's more like it, now I'll be raising the rate to 9.7/10 (you still need to correct the grammatical problems) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GHawk Posted September 9, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 9, 2009 Thz, I un-caped negate. How would I write the last line; "you take damage equal to this card original ATK."? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 9, 2009 Report Share Posted September 9, 2009 actually I was referring to something else, for example your last sentence: When this card is destroy, you take damage equal to this card original ATK change destroy to destroyed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GHawk Posted September 9, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 9, 2009 Ok, I think I fixed it all. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 10, 2009 Report Share Posted September 10, 2009 that's good enough, I'll raise the rate to 9.9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GHawk Posted September 10, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 10, 2009 Yay! Thx ragnarok. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Archived
This topic is now archived and is closed to further replies.