D. Gray Man Posted September 11, 2009 Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 My first card Rate and do the other stuff. New one Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
regalsword65 Posted September 11, 2009 Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 Undead isn't a real type. Make it a Fiend or zombie. And most people on this site hate vanillas (normal monsters) so you may wanna give it an effect. And its a weak card too with 100 ATK and 300 DEF. -.-. Its your first card though. You'll get the hang of it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D. Gray Man Posted September 11, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 It aposta be weak its a soilder its not meant to be strong. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
regalsword65 Posted September 11, 2009 Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 Well, boost the ATK to 1000 or higher at least. 100 ATK cant beat anything except thousand-eyes idol. lol. The DEF is ok where it is though I guess. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kriskirla Posted September 11, 2009 Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 Then make it 1 star ^.^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
BoltDragon Posted September 11, 2009 Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 Is it really your first card? Why are you Lv5 and never made a card??? anywyas the undead warrior is very underpowered.6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rook Bishop Posted September 11, 2009 Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 Don't forget Zombies typically have low ATK or DEF but are support by a lot of spells, traps and effects. I don't mind vanilla as I got a few myself. Power to the Normal! I give you a 7/10 there are so ocg grammer error but up it by a 1 because of the creativing and the fact that I can't find no zombie card like that. 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D. Gray Man Posted September 11, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 ^_^ Thanx people. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bighope Posted September 11, 2009 Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 you just need to make it zomby, not undead and then i might just give you a raiting Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D. Gray Man Posted September 11, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 Lol you have bad spelling. Zomby wouldn't make sense it'll just make it badder. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kriskirla Posted September 11, 2009 Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 I think zombie is better thought.... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D. Gray Man Posted September 11, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 Oh i made my first trap Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
sonrics9601 Posted September 11, 2009 Report Share Posted September 11, 2009 nice pics 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D. Gray Man Posted September 12, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 12, 2009 Thankies ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bengal Posted September 12, 2009 Report Share Posted September 12, 2009 OCG fix on the second card: "This card can only be Special Summoned after the Battle Phase when you destroyed 3 or more DARK monsters by battle. While you control this face-up card, your opponent cannot attack directly." I would have to agree, either Zombie-Type or Fiend-Type. Otherwise it isn't realistic. The second card seems kind of underpowered, mostly because of the situational summoning conditions. The images are alright, the second one has a border around it. Not bad. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest xbon Posted September 12, 2009 Report Share Posted September 12, 2009 Vanilla, 1/10, Don't like them. Especially when they are weak, maybe if it had support cards, but it doesn't.Ocg errors in Effect monster, and way too high of a level, underpowered to say the least. so, 5/10Force, doesn't really make sense, lots of ocg errors in it, 5/10, and don't use words like can't don't etc, use can not, do not, etc. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D. Gray Man Posted September 12, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 12, 2009 Force means it forces to person to not put spell cards for 2 turns Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shocked Posted September 12, 2009 Report Share Posted September 12, 2009 Seems okay to me ^.^ But the pic is not goodSome OCg errors 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 12, 2009 Report Share Posted September 12, 2009 not undead, change it to zombie type, and the first one needs an effect anyway 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D. Gray Man Posted September 12, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 12, 2009 Ok and thanx Ragnorak. Edit: Sorry cant thank of a effect Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bubblin Posted September 12, 2009 Report Share Posted September 12, 2009 OCG errorsgood pic on first one but not so great on the secondand try adding an effect like 'When this card is destroyed as a result of battle you may special summon one zombie type monster from your graveyard with an atk of 1000 or less.' but then increase level and points or summit5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 12, 2009 Report Share Posted September 12, 2009 for undead warrior just give it some flip effect of card discarding or something Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
D. Gray Man Posted September 12, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 12, 2009 Ok ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Artix_Von_Kreiger Posted September 13, 2009 Report Share Posted September 13, 2009 What they said. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rook Bishop Posted September 13, 2009 Report Share Posted September 13, 2009 Oh i made my first trap For you trap, the ocg is: "Activate this card only when your opponent activate a Spell card that target a Zombie-type monster. For 2 turns only, your opponent cannot activate any Spell Card during his/her turn." Since you had zombie cards I figure I would add zombie but you don't have too. 7/10 for the trap card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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