Phœnīcius Infīnius VII Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 [align=center][spoiler=Effect]Once per turn this monster can change its type to Pyro or Warrior. Depending on this card's type activate one of the following effects:* Pyro: Once per turn send one card from your hand to the Graveyard to inflict 300 damage.* Warrior: Once per turn send one card from your hand to the Graveyard to increase the ATK of one monster on the Field by 300 Points. Itsa new card I made. I was bored and honestly I have not made a card in about 2 months. Help me out with my OCG errors, I know I have some but I dont know how to fix em, and what I mean by that is i dont know what words to chose, anyone who helps me gets 1+ Rep and 10 Points.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vailan Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 I really like this pic, you know!OCG:"Once per turn, during your Main Phase, you can treat this monster as a Pyro-Type or a Warrior-Type monster. Depending on this card's type, you can select and activate one of the following effects:- Pyro-Type: Once per turn, during your Main Phase, you can send one card from your hand to the Graveyard to inflict 300 points of Direct Damage to your opponent's Life Points.- Warrior-Type: Once per turn, during your Main Phase, you can send one card from your hand to the Graveyard to increase the ATK of one monster on your side of the field by .... points. (you must mention how many ;)).Main Phase is optional, you can also choose to mention Standby Phase, Battle phase... ;) 7,8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phœnīcius Infīnius VII Posted September 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 I see, thanks friend!Remind me to donate points. Its not lettin me. It has an sql error I think Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vailan Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 You're welcome ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
blademac Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 I like the thought, I like the pic, but the execution is a little off. The monster is too weak for it's Level. Drop the level, or raise the stats/effect and it will be better. 3/5 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phœnīcius Infīnius VII Posted September 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 Oh, Thanks. I actually Updated the card. I just havent posted it yet. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zauls Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 OCG needs work but Valian has fixed that. Effect is very useful and pretty original. Pic is really good.9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phœnīcius Infīnius VII Posted September 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 Thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
AbbatonStrikes Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 just one little pointer all numbers are done in number form like this: 1,2,3,4,5 etc and not like this: one, two, three, four, five just so you know from now on!! Good card interesting effect and a cool pic like it alot 9/10 good work bossman Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 the effect is balanced out and reasonably well, but it's not strong enough for a mere 2450 lv8 monster, I'd drop this down to lv6 or 7 instead 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phœnīcius Infīnius VII Posted September 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 Thanks everyone, I will do all suggestions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 OCG Fix:"Once per turn, this monstercard can be treated as a Pyro- or Warrior-Type monster. Depending on this card's type activate one of the following effects:* Pyro: Once per turnYou can send one card from your hand to the Graveyard to inflict 300 damage to your opponent.* Warrior: Once per turnYou can send one card from your hand to the Graveyard to increase the ATK of one monster on the Field by 300 Pointshave 1 card you control gain 300 ATK." Bold : Correct Slash : Improper or unnecessary Its an interesting and (to my knowledge) unique effect. I like it =3. Its effects are simple yet effective. 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phœnīcius Infīnius VII Posted September 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 Hm. Thanks, but im not sure about that one... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 which one O.o theres like 7 "that one"s Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phœnīcius Infīnius VII Posted September 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 The One above my post, that one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 Thats what I ment. What in that comment that Makes you unsure? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alexis Rhodes Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 very good picture and i cannot see any COG errors :) 8/10 :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phœnīcius Infīnius VII Posted September 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 * Pyro: Once per turnYou can send one card from your hand to the Graveyard to inflict 300 damage to your opponent.* Warrior: Once per turnYou can send one card from your hand to the Graveyard to increase the ATK of one monster on the Field by 300 Pointshave 1 card you control gain 300 ATK."If it isnt once per turn, then you could keep doin it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 Perhaps an explaination on my fixes will help OCG Fix:"Once per turn(1), this (2)monstercard can (3)be treated as a Pyro- or Warrior-Type monster. Depending on this card's type activate one of the following effects:* Pyro: (4)Once per turnYou can send one card from your hand to the Graveyard to inflict 300 damage (5)to your opponent.* Warrior: (6)Once per turnYou can send one card from your hand to the Graveyard to (7)increase the ATK of one monster on the Field by 300 Pointshave 1 card you control gain 300 ATK." Bold : Correct Slash : Improper or unnecessary 1)Its just plain proper. Whenever a real card has "Once per turn" its always followed by a comma. 2)IDK it just sounds alot better >> like not your original sounding like crap but i mean it sounds better sentence sturcture-wise. 3)This because it will be just treated since its already a Warrior type you dont just want to just CHANGE it but have it treated as one since it can be both. 4)Thats just repetative. If it switches types once per turn its totally obvious it only activates once per turn which makes that Unnecessary. 5)You totally spaced out that you need to specify who's taking the damage because in you original that could mean you take it or your opponent takes it (I know it should be obvious but in a real card game it could be interpreted either way for each player.) 6)Same as 4 7)It doesnt matter if you change it or not I just brought it up to current OCG.* Pyro: Once per turnYou can send one card from your hand to the Graveyard to inflict 300 damage to your opponent.* Warrior: Once per turnYou can send one card from your hand to the Graveyard to increase the ATK of one monster on the Field by 300 Pointshave 1 card you control gain 300 ATK."If it isnt once per turn' date=' then you could keep doin it.[/quote'] Wrongo Buckaroo Check out my #4 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phœnīcius Infīnius VII Posted September 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 Alright, I might go with it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 Sorry if I sounded rude ; . ; I dont wanna force you into changing it I just tried to point out some factors. I still like it either way ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Phœnīcius Infīnius VII Posted September 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 Oh no its fine. Thanks again for the suggestions. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
主なルーカス Posted September 21, 2009 Report Share Posted September 21, 2009 Good 8.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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