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Ookami Moriyama

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[spoiler=[b]Warrior Girl of the Ruins[/b]]

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[spoiler=Effect]Warrior Girl of the Ruins: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned, if you control no monsters on your field. While you control this face-up card on your field, you cannot Normal Summon or Set cards on your field. This card cannot be destroyed by battle and is unaffected by the effects of your opponent's Spell and Trap Cards. If your opponent controls 3 or more monsters on his/her field, this card can attack twice during the same Battle Phase. Battle Damage inflicted to your Life Points, involving this card is reduced to 0. This card inflicts Piercing Damage.

 

 

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Ok, I won't hold back, so prepare.

1. "If you control no monsters ON YOUR FIELD". The "on your field" is unnecessary, because the words "you control" say pretty much the same thing.

2. "you cannot Normal Summon or Set cards on your field." Set any card or just monster? Also, again "on your field". It's unnecessary, because if you Summon or Set a monster, it's always gonna be on your side of the field, with 2 or 3 exceptions - and I believe you didn't think of Lava Golem when you were making this effect.

3. "If your opponent controls 3 or more monsters on his/her field, this card can attack twice during the same Battle Phase." What happens if the opponent has exactly 3 monsters, and Lady kill sone of them? The opponent has 2 monsters, and Lady doesn't get her second attack.

4. A few OCG mistakes, if you want me to point them out, say so.

 

As for the positive sides, the effects are quite original, aside their unclear state. The art is fantastic.

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that special summoning condition is a little too easy to get it out to the field

 

I'd also remove the trample effect along with its ability to attack twice per turn (despite the conditions needed for it)' date=' it's getting too powerful

 

7.8/10

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well, I guess you're right

 

I'm a little off with the effect creation

 

long time away from the site :(:(:(

 

but I have to say that this card is just a prototype for somethin' else

 

that even I don't know yet (I know it sounds stupid,but that's the truth)

 

I'll figure it out 'bout this card

 

Thanks for the comment ^_^

 

I like it. pic is ok. Effect is meh. OCG is good.

 

~7/10~

 

I was afraid of that :(

 

I need a lot of work on this effect

 

Thanks

 

Ok' date=' I won't hold back, so prepare.

1. "If you control no monsters ON YOUR FIELD". The "on your field" is unnecessary, because the words "you control" say pretty much the same thing.

2. "you cannot Normal Summon or Set cards on your field." Set any card or just monster? Also, again "on your field". It's unnecessary, because if you Summon or Set a monster, it's always gonna be on your side of the field, with 2 or 3 exceptions - and I believe you didn't think of Lava Golem when you were making this effect.

3. "If your opponent controls 3 or more monsters on his/her field, this card can attack twice during the same Battle Phase." What happens if the opponent has exactly 3 monsters, and Lady kill sone of them? The opponent has 2 monsters, and Lady doesn't get her second attack.

4. A few OCG mistakes, if you want me to point them out, say so.

 

As for the positive sides, the effects are quite original, aside their unclear state. The art is fantastic.

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I was prepared! he-heh

 

all you said it's almost true

 

see, that's the way I write my effects (check any of my threads)

 

and 'bout this card....

 

I'm just recovering after an unwanted break

 

and Thank you for your support and comment

 

I appreciate

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oh don't worry about it' date=' I doubt my judgment has evolved TOO much from when your last cards are, it's just you need to readjust

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well, I'll try my best like always :D

 

there are just too many effects and I don't know how to put them in order:(

 

I hope I'll figure that out too.....

 

Awesome card' date=' but a bit OP'd. Art is awesome. 9/10

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Thank you

 

I'm still workin' on it :D

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I like the pic. OCG is fine. I'd say a little too OP though.

8/10

 

Thank you

 

I dont see any major errors' date=' except you can change "his/her" to "their", its sort of new OCG but either way.

 

Pic goes with the name and the effect is fairly balanced IMO.

 

overall, 8.5/10

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Thank you ^_^

 

but I still need some work....

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what the hell is Piercing damage? all yu-gi-oh cards just inflict damage, and whats with the on your field (at least make your side of the field) i understand you've had a break but how long XD a few centuries? lol im being too mean so... i liked the picture ( i didnt really XD) and its got a nice Name? lol i fail at being positive XD

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what the hell is Piercing damage? all yu-gi-oh cards just inflict damage, and whats with the on your field (at least make your side of the field) i understand you've had a break but how long XD a few centuries? lol im being too mean so... i liked the picture ( i didnt really XD) and its got a nice Name? lol i fail at being positive XD

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what the hell is Piercing damage? all yu-gi-oh cards just inflict damage, and whats with the on your field (at least make your side of the field) i understand you've had a break but how long XD a few centuries? lol im being too mean so... i liked the picture ( i didnt really XD) and its got a nice Name? lol i fail at being positive XD

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what the hell is Piercing damage? all yu-gi-oh cards just inflict damage' date=' and whats with the on your field (at least make your side of the field) i understand you've had a break but how long XD a few centuries? lol im being too mean so... i liked the picture ( i didnt really XD) and its got a nice Name? lol i fail at being positive XD

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piercing damage it is when the card inflict damage to your opponent even if your opponent's monster is in DEF Position

 

"your side of the field" = old OCG

 

"your field" = well, you get it.....

 

thx anyways for comment ^_^

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