2 cards of mine

[Darkdrako]

Bronze Tyrant

 

 

Effect: When this card is normal summoned or flip summoned, select one monster on your opponent's side of the field (if it's in face down position, flip it face up). If that monster's original ATK is lower than the DEF of this card, remove it from play. Otherwise, destroy this card.

 

Azulong

 

 

Effect: This card cannot be special summoned. When this card is normal summoned, you may offer 1 WATER monster on your side of the field as a tribute to destroy 1 card on the field. Flip effects that would be triggered at this time are not activated. This card isn't destroyed as a result of battle as long as there is another WATER monster on your side of the field (damage calculation is applied normally).

 

Unknown dimension

 

 

Feel free to correct my OCG errors please.

 

Updated

[ragnarok1945]

Azulog's effect is good, but it's still bland, you should add another effect to it (and a drawback)

 

9/10

[Darkdrako]

Updated the first post with some modifications

[assanaut]

Some grammar errors, but here's my analysis:

*Bronze Tyrant: This card is good to play, but could be a duel-threatening gamble when facing a face-down monster. Although, this defense is abnormally high for something in face-down Defense position, here are my suggestions: #1: Change his DEF to 2000, #2: Make the draw-back of finding a face-down card with a higher DEF be 1000 Life Point damage.

*Azulong: A fairly balanced card; it requires a Tribute for its effect whilst it needs that kind of monster, which that's pretty good.

[Hollow Ichigo!]

Kick Ass Cards Dude 10/10

[Darkdrako]

Bronze Tyrant is level 6, so I guess the def is appropiate. And it's not a flip effect though, you need to normal summon it or flip summon it in your turn. Thanks you and Ulquiorra for the ratings ^^.

[Hollow Ichigo!]

No prob dude your cards pwn me ( a noob) so you should make some more

[Darkdrako]

Added Unknown Dimension

[The7thSorrow]

OCG is amazing for a noob, but could use a little improvement.

 

first card has awesome pic/name, flip summoned/ normal summoned = Flip Summoned/Normal Summoned

 

second card has worst OCG (but fixable)

Here:

This card cannot be Special Summoned. When this card is Normal Summoned, Tribute 1 WATER monster you control to destroy 1 card on the field. Cards cannot be Flipped face-up this turn. While there is another WATER monster on your field, this card cannot be destroyed by battle. (Damage calculation is applied normally).

 

 

spell card doesn't make any sense because it removes cards from play, so you will never destroy 4 cards with its effect.

 

overall: 7/10

[~Shin~]

for Bronze Tyrant 8/10

good pic good effect with some errors.

but I fix it for you.

[spoiler=Bronze Tyrant Effect]

When this card is Normal Summoned or Flip Summoned, select 1 monster your opponent controls, if this card's target is face-down, flip it face-up, if the original ATK of the selected monster is lower than the DEF of this monster, remove it from play. If the original ATK of the selected monster is not lower than the DEF of this monster, then it is returned to its original position, and this card is destroy.

 

 

for Azulong 6.5/10

I did not like this card and it the effect have some errors.

[spoiler=Azulong Effect After fixing]

This card cannot be Special Summoned. when this card is Normal Summoned, you can Tribute 1 WATER monster You control to destroy 1 card on the field. If the card has a Flip Effect, it is not activated. This card cannot be destroyed by battle, if there is another WATER monster on your side of the field. (Damage calculation is applied normally.)

 

 

hoping that I helped you.

[ragnarok1945]

Updated the first post with some modifications

 

The last sentence of the effect should be something like "As long as there is another WATER monster on your side of the field, this card cannot be destroyed by battle."

[Darkdrako]

Ok, I'll keep these in mind. Thanks a ton.

[~Oleon~]

Hey Darkdrako, you're a cool dude, but unfortunately I have to tell you Azulongs picture has been used before...by me.

Anyway, great cards...

Besides the used pic, 10/10.

[regalsword65]

I find these to be very balanced. The pics are very good. This is probally one of the most rare times that I find a dragon pic that isn't overused.

 

You my friend, have done a wonderful job. 9.5/10

[Darkdrako]

Wow thanks a ton. I put another card in one topic but still no one has answered.