Crystal Alien Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 Mrmm I got bored so I created this card. All OCG fixes are welcome I know there will be some. Also tell me what I could improve. Please keep feed back to some level of standard, that don't cross the line !New Image ![align=center][spoiler=Lore]This card can only be summoned by Tributing 3 Fiend monsters on the field. When this card is summoned you may choose 1 of the effects below in the first 3 turns this card is summoned.1) Send 2 cards from your hand, and destroy 1 Beast-Warrior-Type monster from the field to the graveyard.2) By paying 1000 Life-Points this monster gains 600 Attack Points.3) By sacrifing this monster you may Speical-Summon 2 Beast-Warrior-Type monsters from your deck whose star level is less than 5.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mintcookie Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 Name: 9/10Effect/Description: 10/10Picture: 5/10OCG: 10/10 Overall: 9.5/10 Comment: Unique affect. Picture could be much better though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wirespy Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 You are correct in the fact that there are OCG errors:This card cannot be Tribute Summon except by Tributing 3 Beast-Warrior-Type monsters on the field. During the turn this card is successfully Tribute Summoned you can activate 1 or more of the effects below:1) Send 2 cards from your hand to the graveyard to destroy 1 Beast-Warrior-Type monster.2) By paying 1000 life points this monster gains 600 ATK.3) By tributing this face-up card you can Speical Summon 2 Beast-Warrior-Type monsters from your deck whose level is equal to or less than 5. Overall good job. 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jolta Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 10/10Could only see the effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
GreenMetal Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 You are correct in the fact that there are OCG errors:This card cannot be Tribute Summon except by Tributing 3 Beast-Warrior-Type monsters on the field. During the turn this card is successfully Tribute Summoned you can activate 1 or more of the effects below:1) Send 2 cards from your hand to the graveyard to destroy 1 Beast-Warrior-Type monster.2) By paying 1000 life points this monster gains 600 ATK.3) By tributing this face-up card you can Speical Summon 2 Beast-Warrior-Type monsters from your deck whose level is equal to or less than 5. Overall good job. 8/10wat he said Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
nightmare drake Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 good card8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jolta Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 It needs a better Background, though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Alien Posted November 1, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 You are correct in the fact that there are OCG errors:This card cannot be Tribute Summon except by Tributing 3 Beast-Warrior-Type monsters on the field. During the turn this card is successfully Tribute Summoned you can activate 1 or more of the effects below:1) Send 2 cards from your hand to the graveyard to destroy 1 Beast-Warrior-Type monster.2) By paying 1000 life points this monster gains 600 ATK.3) By tributing this face-up card you can Speical Summon 2 Beast-Warrior-Type monsters from your deck whose level is equal to or less than 5. Overall good job. 8/10 Alright thanks, Did OCG Fix. I will not be fixing the picture at this time, if you think you've found a better one just post the link, and i'll look at it. ;) - Ryan Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ornithopter Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 Creativity - [A]Effect/Description - [A]Pic - [C]OCG - [A]Overall - [A]Good job, dude! Only the pic could be better =L Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Alien Posted November 1, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 Creativity - [A]Effect/Description - [A]Pic - [C]OCG - [A]Overall - [A]Good job' date=' dude! Only the pic could be better =L[/quote'] Alright, New picture on a short notice. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Mousy Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 The picture in itself is actually okay... but only problem is that it's sooooo overused. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
wirespy Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 Good job, much better now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Alien Posted November 1, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 The picture in itself is actually okay... but only problem is that it's sooooo overused. NEW ONE AGAIN, Seems like I can't win rofl. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ornithopter Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 The picture in itself is actually okay... but only problem is that it's sooooo overused. NEW ONE AGAIN' date=' Seems like I can't win rofl.[/quote'] Now it's very better! ^^ Pic - [b+] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 Stupid.Why use this it's a ----- im not gonna say what.3/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Mousy Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 New pic is worse than the old one. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Alien Posted November 1, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 Stupid.Why use this it's a ----- im not gonna say what.3/10 " Why use this it's a -----? " what do you mean by this. o-o.. <3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dark Mousy Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 Better. Work on your OCG (Original Card Grammar), as the wording is extremely confusing. I strongly suggest you check out the "Showcase" section of the forums and GFX (Graphics Edit) your pictures, it should help. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Alien Posted November 1, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 Better. Work on your OCG (Original Card Grammar)' date=' as the wording is extremely confusing. I strongly suggest you check out the "Showcase" section of the forums and GFX (Graphics Edit) your pictures, it should help.[/quote'] Not to sound mean, but I honestly think you need to find problems in everything.I say that with as much least disrepect I can do, but i've come to accept some people in this world cannot be pleased so... Thanks for the tips though. ;) ALso I can't be any clearer but going. Tribute 3 Fiend monstersChoose effect1 ) send 2 cards from hand to kill 1 beast-warrior-type monsters.2 ) Loose 1000 life points to gain 600 ATK.3 ) tribute monster for 2 new ones level 5 or under. ( No OCG was tryed in that, I was being sarcastic. ) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☨Genocide ☨ Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 After all of that, I feel bad to say this, but I think its somewhat UPD. The effects of it seems a little....could be better. becuase the hard way to summon it is already a drawback, then the effects have drawbacks as well. Maybe if you make it so you can keep using the first effect... 8.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Alien Posted November 1, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 After all of that' date=' I feel bad to say this, but I think its somewhat UPD. The effects of it seems a little....could be better. becuase the hard way to summon it is already a drawback, then the effects have drawbacks as well. Maybe if you make it so you can keep using the first effect... 8.5/10[/quote'] Well if I kept letting you use the first effect, You could destroy your opponent no problem.. You could probaly end the duel in 3 turns if they had like 2 monsters down. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☨Genocide ☨ Posted November 1, 2009 Report Share Posted November 1, 2009 After all of that' date=' I feel bad to say this, but I think its somewhat UPD. The effects of it seems a little....could be better. becuase the hard way to summon it is already a drawback, then the effects have drawbacks as well. Maybe if you make it so you can keep using the first effect... 8.5/10[/quote']Well if I kept letting you use the first effect, You could destroy your opponent no problem.. You could probaly end the duel in 3 turns if they had like 2 monsters down.That would only happen if your opponent only has beast-warriors in their deck. Which would be a very unwise thing for any person to. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Crystal Alien Posted November 2, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 2, 2009 After all of that' date=' I feel bad to say this, but I think its somewhat UPD. The effects of it seems a little....could be better. becuase the hard way to summon it is already a drawback, then the effects have drawbacks as well. Maybe if you make it so you can keep using the first effect... 8.5/10[/quote']Well if I kept letting you use the first effect, You could destroy your opponent no problem.. You could probaly end the duel in 3 turns if they had like 2 monsters down.That would only happen if your opponent only has beast-warriors in their deck. Which would be a very unwise thing for any person to. Well, I supose. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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