TheVaron Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Lately my OCG and card making in general has been getting worse. so much worse in fact I have been deleting cards in pure disgust with myself. These made me somewhat happy so I want to see if the rest of the YCM community thinks Im out of my slump. I made these cards. And yes I do know they really made Izanami and Izanagi Cards but they didnt really do these characters from japanese mythology justice [spoiler=[b]Farewell of the First Ones[/b]][spoiler=lore]You can only activate this card when you control either "izanagi Okami" or "izanami Okami". Destroy all cards on your Opponent's side of the field. Take damage equal to the combined ATK of all Normal Monsters destroyed by this effect. During the End Phase of the turn this card was activated destroy all "Izanami Okami" and "Izanagi Okami" on the field. (point here is that they are like "hey guys we are leaving now so DIE and here is my last attack KTHXBYE!!") [spoiler=[b]Izanagi[/b]][spoiler=lore]This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by tributing 3 LIGHT fairy-type monsters. When this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle place one Storm Counter on this card (max. 5) and when this card destroys an Opponent's monster by battle you can remove any number of Storm Counters from this card. Destroy Spell and Trap cards equal to the amount of Storm Counters removed from this card. [spoiler=[b]Izanami[/b]][spoiler=Lore]This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing from play 3 DARK Fiend-type monsters from your Graveyard. When a Defense position monster is destroyed place one Yomi Counter on this card (max. 8). Once per turn you can remove one Yomi Counter from this card to destroy one monster on the field. During the End Phase remove one Yomi Counter from this card. If you cannot destroy this card. [spoiler=[b]Priestess[/b]][spoiler=lore]This card's ATK and DEF are each equal to number of Spell and Trap cards in your Graveyard x300 [spoiler=[b]Call Of Yomi[/b]][spoiler=lore]When this card is Summoned increase this monster's ATK and DEF x200 for each Non-DARK monster in your opponent's Graveyard. [spoiler=[b]The DARK type Tuner[/b]][spoiler=lore]When this card is Normal Summoned you can Special Summon one Removed from Play Level 4 or lower Dark Fiend-type monster. [spoiler=[b]Dark TYPE Synchro[/b]] [spoiler=Lore]"Concubine of Yomi" + 1 or more non-tuner Fiend-type monstersThis card cannot be Special Summoned except by Synchro Summon. Once per turn during your Standby Phase place one Yomi Counter on this card. This card's effect changes depending on the amount of Yomi Counters on the field. ● 0: This card's ATK and DEF are 0. ● 1 to 2: During battle between this attacking card and a Defense Position monster whose DEF is lower than the ATK of this card, inflict the difference as Battle Damage to your opponent. ● 3 to 4: This card gains 500 ATK. ● 5 or More: This cards ATK and DEF become 1500 . Once per turn, you can select your 1 of your opponent's monster and equip it to this card. (You can only equip 1 monster at a time to this card.) This card gains ATK equal to half of the ATK of the equipped monster. [spoiler=[b]LIGHT tuner[/b]][spoiler=lore]When this card is Normal Summoned you can Special Summon one Level 4 or lower LIGHT Fairy-type monster from your Graveyard. [spoiler=[b]Light synchro[/b]][spoiler=lore]"Child of the Storm" + 1 or More non-tuner LIGHT Fairy-type monstersIf this card battles with your opponent's monster, you can remove both monsters from play at the start of Damage Step (without damage calculation). You can Special Summon this card during the End Phase of the turn this card was removed from play by paying 1000 life points. STILL PLANNING HOLOING Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Smeagle Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Uh...actually, I think Kazuki Takahashi did better. These cards are just big and somewhat OP'd beatsticks for LIGHT decks, and they don't really convey the idea of the legend. The pic (at least the one I can see, because Izanami isn't showing up) is epic, but needs a better effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheVaron Posted November 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Izanami is kinda chibi. I was just mad at Kazuki cuz it was like ohhh Heres a stupid normal rare monster for the MOTHER OF JAPAN oh you guys want the monster for the father of all japan and the gods ok lemme jus whip up a stupid little secret rare or ultra i do not remember. Yeah i guess they are a lil OPd got any tips Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Smeagle Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Yeah. Give them a creative summoning condition and a cool effect. I mean, they've sort of got a "Creation" motif going on, build off of that. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheVaron Posted November 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Yeah Im a bit sick as of right now. Thanks for the help I think im going to put this off for a bit. Im really not doing well I think Ive got the SWINE so Im gonna try and get better before i do more YCM Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hollowmaster999 Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 OCG: For the monsters: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing 3 LIGHT Fairy-type monsters from your side of the field or Graveyard from play. Minor, but still needed. For the spell: Tribute a "Izanagi Okami" or Izanami Okami" you control to destroy all cards on your opponent's side of the field. Then inflict damage to your life points equal to the ATK of all face up Normal monsters destroyed by this effect. This one got chopped down a lot. A bunch of lines and words were just unnecessary. Over all, these cards are just plain too OP. The monsters should have a drawback, something like "When this card is Summoned, if there are any non-LIGHT monsters on the field, destroy this card" or something like that, because they are too easy to summon and way too high stats as well. The spell card isn't too bad because you have to tribute a monster, specifically, but since it's a -2 for you and a -5 for your opponent, that throws the balance off way too much, huh. Work on them, huh. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
To-Chi Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 I dunno' about the OP'd-ness. It costs more to summon them than the average Level 8/7. The Spell Card, yeah, a little OP'd, but c'mon. Who uses LIGHT Fairy-types? :lol: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hollowmaster999 Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 I dunno' about the OP'd-ness. It costs more to summon them than the average Level 8/7. The Spell Card' date=' yeah, a little OP'd, but c'mon. Who uses LIGHT Fairy-types? :lol:[/quote'] People who run Lolsworns could run a few DNA Surgeries and splash these in there... Or even better, just run 3 Shining angels, let them get destroyed and once all three are in the grave, bring one of these out... It's not that hard, huh? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheVaron Posted November 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Bump. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheVaron Posted November 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 Made an Intense edit. New effects. new stats new summoning conditions. Planning on doing HOLOs soon. Just a bit lazy today Rate Pleaseee Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 6, 2009 Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 Nice 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hollowmaster999 Posted November 6, 2009 Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 OMGOCGFAILZ>_< Fixes: [You can only activate this card when you control either "Izanagi Okami" or Izanami Okami".] This is NOT needed. If you're going to be tributing a the monster, of course you're going to be controlling it!] Tribute a "Izanagi Okami" or Izanami Okami" you control. Destroy all cards on your opponent's side of the field. Then[Why then? You're activating the card, so it's implied that the effect happens right after, not a turn later, duh] inflict damage to your life points equal to the combined attack of all face up normal monsters destroyed by this card's effect.[so, you Nuke their field, and take damage to their monsters? Then say this: Take damage equal to the ATK of any Normal Monsters destroyed by this effect.] Then[/b][WHY?][/b] Special Summon as many Normal Monsters from your Graveyard as you can[no, it's: as possible.] Overall, looks better, just fix the OCG for a 8/10. This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by sacrificing[ARE YOU CITRUS DRINK?! Who...no what card says "Sacrificing"?!] 3 LIGHT Fairy-type monsters. When this card destroys an opponent's[why opponent's, why not just "a monster by battle"] monster by battle place one[No, just no. You never spell out numbers.] Storm Counter on this card (max. 5)[wheres the period :shock:] When this card destroys an Opponent's monster by battle you can remove any number of Storm Counters from this card.[Wait, so this happens at the same time you put counters, so why don't you just say, "Blah blah blah, Counters, blah AND blah blah, destroy..."] Destroy Spell and Traps[NO!!! "Spell and Trap cards] equal to the amount of Storm Counters removed from this card. Creative effect, but OCG! 7/10 This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing from play 3 DARK Fiend-type monsters from your Graveyard. When a Defense position monster is destroyed place one Yomi[do you mean "Yami=Dark in japanese?] Counter on this card (max. 8 )[where's the period? Where does the sentence END?] Once per turn you can remove one[ARGH, NOO it's 1!] Yomi Counter from this card to destroy one[see previous comment] monster on the field. During each[uh, THE, "during THE End Phase..."] End Phase remove one Yomi Counter from this card[OMG end the sentence!!] If you cannot destroy this card. Looks good, 8/10 Total average=7.7 :neutral: YOSHIZO! These cards are WAY more better than the old ones. Yes. Not just way better, way more betters. Keep up the good work, and please try to get your OCG down, m'kay? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheVaron Posted November 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 Holy crack mother thats a lot of revisions TO WORK WE GO!!!!!!!! Thank you very much EDIT: also to answer your question no I mean Yomi the permutation of the name of hell used in the Nihon Shoki (spelling failz) Which is the source that explains the lives of Izanami and Izanagi. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hollowmaster999 Posted November 6, 2009 Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 Holy crack mother thats a lot of revisions TO WORK WE GO!!!!!!!! Thank you very much EDIT: also to answer your question no I mean Yomi the permutation of the name of hell used in the Nihon Shoki (spelling failz) Which is the source that explains the lives of Izanami and Izanagi. Okay, that makes sense then. The edits, yeah, took my time with those =P Hopefully it'll help you help yourself, er something like that... Stick with it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheVaron Posted November 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 Ok Well first off I made an edit it will be up in a couple secs. ALSO the reason for the special summoning is that I was thinking. Hey When the gods leave there are just normal people left so then its like Oh bring them all back Kthxbye. OK GOTTA POST THE REVISION!!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord Smeagle Posted November 6, 2009 Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 MUCH better. 9/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheVaron Posted November 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 Thanks any advice on how to bring that up? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Number1 D-Hero Plasma Fan Posted November 6, 2009 Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 OP as f*ck learn to make better cards 0/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheVaron Posted November 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 Which cards? and way to go. If you really think 0/10 you should probably inform me what im doing wrong. Unless your just a flaming 13 year old in which case please dont comment on my Threads KTHXBYE Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lexadin Posted November 6, 2009 Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 These are great, You forgot some ,'s though.A 9/10, great pic's. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheVaron Posted November 6, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 See that is the kind of comment I would like. Its actually helpful tells me what im missing too. THANK YOU!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hollowmaster999 Posted November 6, 2009 Report Share Posted November 6, 2009 First new card is UP, but it's okay since anything else would probably kill it :? 8/10 Second card OCG: When this card is Summoned Normal Summoned, Flip Summoned Special Summoned, specify if needed it gains 200 ATK and DEF for each non-DARK monster in your opponent's Graveyard. If this card is destroyed by battle remove from play all non-DARK monsters in your opponent's Graveyard. Uh, terribly OP unless they're running strict BW, or something of the sort. Sorry, but fix it up a bit, less OP kudasai, ne? 5/10 (for now) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheVaron Posted November 7, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 7, 2009 Made changes. 2nd support is now much less over powered. Thinking of making tuners for each of these and final forms of the gods as Synchros. rate comment? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hollowmaster999 Posted November 7, 2009 Report Share Posted November 7, 2009 I don't see the edits made, but anyway, don't post your newer cards in a new post, just edit the original post and put them there, that way you wont have to keep searching the thread for cards... Synchros would be meh, maybe something like contact fusions would be cool... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Nisian Posted November 7, 2009 Report Share Posted November 7, 2009 wow those look like real playing cards, how long did it take you to reach to that point? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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