Aldebaram Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Hey guys! This is the first time I try to make a card, so, i think it's not very good. Please, correct my grammar errors. Cyber Storm Knight Effect - This card is also treated as a Warrior-Type monster. When this card destroys a monster your opponent controls, place a Storm Counter on this card (max 3.). You can remove 3 Storm Counters from this card, you can select up to 2 monsters in your Graveyard and Special Summon them.Is it better? ^^ EDIT: Pic credit: Magic The Gathering.EDIT²: Effect fixed by Lovely Lady Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
destron Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 A bit OP'd, but otherwise, this is the best first card I've seen evar. Well done! Just make it so it says something like '2 level 4 ow lower monsters', because if it's just '2 monsters' that makes it severely OP'd. 8/10 Fix that and OCG and I'd say 9.9/10 (the name is meh) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 That picture belongs to a real card. A Magic the Gathering card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aldebaram Posted November 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 A bit OP'd' date=' but otherwise, this is the best first card I've seen evar. Well done! Just make it so it says something like '2 level 4 ow lower monsters', because if it's just '2 monsters' that makes it severely OP'd. [b']8/10[/b] Fix that and OCG and I'd say 9.9/10 (the name is meh) Could you suggest some better name? And thx for the suggest. And, Lovely Lady, i got the pic in Nightmarian's Showcase. I'm sorry if it's prohibited. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
El Make Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Great for a first card. Haven't seen a "first card" this good (in my eyes) in a while. OCG has small errors, can be OPed with just "2 monsters". Cool: 7.8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 A bit OP'd' date=' but otherwise, this is the best first card I've seen evar. Well done! Just make it so it says something like '2 level 4 ow lower monsters', because if it's just '2 monsters' that makes it severely OP'd. [b']8/10[/b] Fix that and OCG and I'd say 9.9/10 (the name is meh) Could you suggest some better name? And thx for the suggest. And, Lovely Lady, i got the pic in Nightmarian's Showcase. I'm sorry if it's prohibited. Oh no its nothing bad i was just saying. And Nightmarian shouldnt be having images that arent his and claming that they are T.T Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aldebaram Posted November 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 A bit OP'd' date=' but otherwise, this is the best first card I've seen evar. Well done! Just make it so it says something like '2 level 4 ow lower monsters', because if it's just '2 monsters' that makes it severely OP'd. [b']8/10[/b] Fix that and OCG and I'd say 9.9/10 (the name is meh) Could you suggest some better name? And thx for the suggest. And, Lovely Lady, i got the pic in Nightmarian's Showcase. I'm sorry if it's prohibited. Oh no its nothing bad i was just saying. And Nightmarian shouldnt be having images that arent his and claming that they are T.T Well, but he was banned, i think...You have any suggest or rate? :3 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SmallieBigs Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 OP'd maybe, a OCG confusion 8/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ornithopter Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Really, according to destron, this is the best first card i've ever seen before. The pic is great, the OCG seems fine. But it can really be a bit OP'd. Just put some limit on it.A Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aldebaram Posted November 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 OP'd maybe' date=' a OCG confusion 8/10.[/quote'] Why confusion? Please point the errors. @Gijinka Thnkz for rate and comment my card :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 The OCG isnt confusing but I can fix it. Aldebaram can you post the effect so i can correct it? ^^ Also it's OP. A monster that card special summon 2 monsters from your grave just by removing 1 counter? Make it a level 7 up the attack to 2400 or 2450 and place a limit on the counters to help balance it and also either put a level limit on the cards able to be special summoned from the grave like lvl 5 or lower or put an ATK limit perhaps 2000 or less. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aldebaram Posted November 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 The OCG isnt confusing but I can fix it. Aldebaram can you post the effect so i can correct it? ^^ Also it's OP. A monster that card special summon 2 monsters from your grave just by removing 1 counter? Make it a level 7 up the attack to 2400 or 2450 and place a limit on the counters to help balance it and also either put a level limit on the cards able to be special summoned from the grave like lvl 5 or lower or put an ATK limit perhaps 2000 or less. Thnkz for suggesting. I'll post the effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jamuz Terebellum Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 This can be a really OP'd.The pic is good.9.5/10very good for a first car.d Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 M'hmm This is the corrected version"This card is also treated as a Warrior-Type monster. When this card destroys a monster your opponent controls, place 1 Storm Counter on this card(max 1.). You can remove 1 Storm Counter from this card, you can select up to 2 monsters in your Graveyard and Special Summon them." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frozen Judgment Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Lovely Lady explained it all. Anyways, bit OP of an effect and a few OCG errors. 8/10 Cause you're new. Go with Lovely's correction and I will boost the rate up. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 OP.The rest is good.8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aldebaram Posted November 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 M'hmm This is the corrected version"This card is also treated as a Warrior-Type monster. When this card destroys a monster your opponent controls' date=' [b']place[/b] 1 Storm Counter on this card(max 1.). You can remove 1 Storm Counter from this card, you can select up to 2 monsters in your Graveyard and Special Summon them." Thankz, i'll correct the errors. ^^EDIT: Fixed. I also changed the level to 7. And changed the counters to 3, not 1. Better now? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ornithopter Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Now it's much better :=] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aldebaram Posted November 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Thankz you Gijinka ^^Any other comment? Now i've fixed this.Please some comment! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jamuz Terebellum Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Now you've fixed this, it's very better! :)10/10! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frozen Judgment Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 It's amazing now. 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aldebaram Posted November 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Thankz! ^^How good, my first card is not that bad :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Frozen Judgment Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 It's nice to know that not all new members start out newbish ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aldebaram Posted November 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Thankz you guys for rating and commenting my card...Anyother comment?: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TheVaron Posted November 5, 2009 Report Share Posted November 5, 2009 Very Very very good work. Only one problem with it. The pic is from a magic card. so you get an 8/10. AMAZING first card cant wait to see what you make next Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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