Echofon Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 Umm.... I just now learned how to make a card show up so just look down a lil bit to see the card. Here is the original card but scroll down for my advancements. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KurashiDragon Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 Plz don't use attachments. 1. Load the card you want2. Click on the card3. Copy the link of the card just below the card4. Pase it on any post you want. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Echofon Posted November 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 Alrighty then. You get 5echofon pts. for helping out a noob! YAY YOU! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☨Genocide ☨ Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 Ok, wen doin this, just edit the card into your first post to avoid confusion. The pic could be better. (Try to find one with a background.) And the effect is blandish. Good for a newbie tho. 6/10 with my new member bonus. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
cmc1234 Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 Yes can you please edit the thread and post the card there Pic needs color and a bg This is a verey bland and boring card 5.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
awesomeuser Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 OCG fix: When this card is successfully Summoned, you can Special Summon 1 Level 4 or lower WATER monster to your field. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Imma Mario Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 Hey Look another 1 Star Making Epic Failed Cards. ^ Lmao BTW Nice Try. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Echofon Posted November 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 I've seen you're advice and I have come up with a newer, better version of teh card. See? This one has a background and color and everything!Yes can you please edit the thread and post the card there Pic needs color and a bg This is a verey bland and boring card 5.5/10 In response to the blandness remarks, the pic was just sumtin I found off of deviantart. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
awesomeuser Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 OCG fix + advice:Level is way to high as is the ATK/DEF. LV 7; 2200 ATK / 2100 DEF "If this card is successfully Summoned, you can discard Monster Cards from your hand. Increase the ATK and DEF of this card by 300 x the number of discarded cards." 7.5/10 [btw, please just edit the first post and add the new version there.] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 ok, now that the card is put up and the OCG is corrected already, I'll just move to the effect part The effect is considered OPed and bland For a lv11 monster, you should have more than ONE effect for it In addition, 4500 atk is plenty for lv11 as it is, there is no need to make the atk even higher, especially since there's no drawback 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Echofon Posted November 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 Thanks for your advice. I'll try to make a new card everyday that corresponds with you guys' comments.And here it is. I incorporated some of your advice into this card. Please rate or post your comments! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Baltoli Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 Meh. Overpowered and bland. And it's a Fake-Type. Or is it? *Looks at type list* Yep, it is. Fake Types = Epic Fail. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Oleon~ Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 0/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Echofon Posted November 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 :x Okay, jerk, I just started doing this. You gonna pick on the new guy? That's a pretty bad thing to do for ur rep. Secondly, I stopped playing yugioh when it went out of style 4 years ago and there WERE spellcaster cards. So eat it. And Oleon if your just gonna post random zero's you might want to include some CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM maybe!?! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jazin Kay Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 There are still Spellcaster cards. As of late, we've got a ton of amazing ones released. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Baltoli Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 What? Oh no! Spellcaster is a real type *facepalm*. Ice Dragon isn't! Gahhhh... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Echofon Posted November 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 Thank you.Spellcaster is real. Ice dragon isnt real. Okay. But is my newest card better than the first ones? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Oleon~ Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 You want constructive criticism huh? Well, I don't post the reasons on new members because it makes them feel worse. Then, I'll give you constructive criticism.Firstly, you didn't have it up there at first, you had an attachment, which is a definete no for this site.Secondly, you had one without a background and terrible OCG.Thirdly, you made a fake, OPed Archtype.Quadro (thats fourth), you were double posting and made one WITHOUT a background. I am not judging you, I am saying I avoid doing this because I spare feelings. But you actually asked me to give you criticism, so there you go. More realistic rate, I was being a bit hard on you.7/10 for a new member. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Echofon Posted November 21, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 In reponse to your feedback. I dont know what OCG or OPed means, I just started. I learned how to post things into a post do I've fixed the attachment thing. For the first card I made, I was looking for merpeople on deviantart but all i could find that actually looked decent was that one, so that's what I used. I then made another card that looked in my mind better than the first and it had a background. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Jazin Kay Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 OCG = Original Card Grammar. OP'd = Overpowered. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~Oleon~ Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 Cool. Please don't think I am one to judge, I will help you if you need help. I was a trifle mean. OPed means Overpowered, which is too powerful. OCG means Official Card Grammar, which is the difference between real card grammar and the grammar on the cards made on here. I had a Toon Relinquished in my lately, and I want the pic! It's AMAZING! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted November 21, 2009 Report Share Posted November 21, 2009 Thanks for your advice. I'll try to make a new card everyday that corresponds with you guys' comments.And here it is. I incorporated some of your advice into this card. Please rate or post your comments! yeah but this one is a little boring It's like Mobius's effect, so you should give it another one to set it apart 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Echofon Posted November 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Okay. I am going to put these responses into a new card. Thanks for your feedback!Alright, here are the fruits of my work. It's a little weak. Tell me if the OCG's correct. I'm trying to understand the ethics of card grammar. Maybe one of you guys could post one of your cards here to show me what I was apparently doing wrong. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
☨Genocide ☨ Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Very good OCG this time. Only, now you put by battle instead of result of battle.(common error) It used to be result of battle, but they changed it now. Also, when updating, just edit the very first post and drop them in there, so we don't have to look for it. Pics a bit fuzzy, and effect's been done before. 9/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Echofon Posted November 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Oh. The thing is I stopped playing yugioh a long time ago and i just started back up like this week. The effect may have been used before, but it's a 2star monster. It's not gonna have like 6 tokens who explode on contact and send this to here and that to there. All I wanted was a simple monster. But thanks for your feedback. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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