Zemener Azon Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Terrible picture and its effect is quite terrible as well and you have OCG errors with is quite sad since you barely have any room for such. OCG:"When this card is Special Summoned, you can discard 1 card from your hand to draw 1 card." 2/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alcander Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Bad picture, simple effect, minor OCG errors. Pretty bad :( 3/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KurashiDragon Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 The effect is far to plain and the pic is to rough. 2/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zemener Azon Posted November 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Here is the revised version of the card based on input. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Ok i don't now how to start :(Terrible PIC.Bad OCG.Bad effect and is way to simple.It's balanced, that's true. 2.5/10 Can't beleive you got REPS saying you have good cards :(LOL for the second card (srry didn't seen it):A bit OP since you can negate all effects, even taking the 2000 cost.PIC is ok this time.OCG needs work.Effect still needs more creativity :( 4.5/10 You're getting to 5/10 keep working ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 ....The only improvement is the Pic. You made it worse. The Effect is now UP. I've seen card that require nothing to negate and destroy a card using an effect. The only issue with the first version was the img and the extreme dullness and drollness of the effect. 1/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KurashiDragon Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 This cards effect now is UPED. I suggest making discarding a card to negate the effect. Effect is stil kinda plain though. The pic is a little better if not a little hard to make out. 5/10 (There's just no pleasing us is there lol) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zemener Azon Posted November 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 If this is not any good, I will try again tomorrow. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
KurashiDragon Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 The first effect is OPED and the second effect looks like it was stuck on there. 4/10 (Seriously there's just no pleasing us is there? lol) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Simple. OP now. Since you dont have to do anything to negate the effect and you inflict 1000 points of damage to your opponent, the duel will be over within 4 turns. Your OCG is off aswell. 3/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zemener Azon Posted November 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Okay, I'm going to get this one eventually. I've already worked with it a lot today, so I will post again later so I don't bore you guys, haha. Thanks for all the advice everyone. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 it's a little balanced out due to the modifications, but it's still too bland and boring of an effect right now 4/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zemener Azon Posted November 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 The tribute monsters used to Tribute Summon this card must be one monster you control and one monster your opponent controls. Once per turn, destroy one card on the field and inflict 1000 points of Direct Damage to your opponents Life Points. At the End Phase, if your opponent has an empty Monster Card zone, switch control of this card with your opponent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Again...Bad OCG. Please look and note which words are capped and other changes, and use them in future cards. "This card can only be Tribute Summoned by Tributing 1 monster you control and 1 monster your opponent controls. Once per turn, destroy 1 card on the field and inflict 1000 points of Direct damage to your opponents Life Points. During your End Phase, if your opponent controls an empty Monster Card Zone, this card's control is switched to your opponent." It is more balanced although still a bit OP. Lose the bur effect or reduce it to 500 and give it a requirement such as discarding a card. 1000 is to much for a free unencumbered burn effect. 6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zemener Azon Posted November 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Here we go, I made the OCG changes you suggested and changed the card destruction requirement. This card can only be Tribute Summoned by Tributing 1 monster you control and 1 monster your opponent controls. Once per turn, pay 1000 Life Points to destroy 1 card on the field. During your End Phase, if your opponent controls an empty Monster Card Zone, this cards control is switched to your opponent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Better but it seems like your determined to have some sort of LP involvement with this cards effect. Your making the payment to vast or the punishment to harsh. If you with to involve LP for this card it would be well balanced with a low amount of pain meaning just 5 or 600 will suffice. 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zemener Azon Posted November 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 All right, I think your right. I'm going to keep a cost out of the destruction effect. This card can only be Tribute Summoned by Tributing 1 monster you control and 1 monster your opponent controls. Once per turn, destroy 1 card on the field. During your End Phase, if your opponent controls an empty Monster Card Zone, this cards control is switched to your opponent. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Perfect! Balanced and good OCG and image. 8.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zemener Azon Posted November 22, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Sweet, haha. I'm good with an 8.5. Thanks alot for all the help. I'll probably come back to this thread to check the OCG advice you suggested. I'm done with this card for now, so hopefully the next one will start off with at least a 5/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
♥Łövëły-Ċħän♥ Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Lol yep Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Läufer Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 Need OCG fix.But pretty balanced. 7.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Baltoli Posted November 22, 2009 Report Share Posted November 22, 2009 What else can I say? Switching control if they have ANY empty zone is UPed. Oh wait, they'll have to give it back! Hey, that's original! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted November 23, 2009 Report Share Posted November 23, 2009 your new card LLD already pointed out the OCG errors, but it's still Oped the 1000 burn for it is too much, drop it down to 500 isntead 6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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