Metal Skull Posted November 24, 2009 Report Share Posted November 24, 2009 LOL it's my try at a DBZ set, hope you like it and please rate^^ As soon as i have updated while change the title^^ Please tell me how to improve and say if i should make more^^ [spoiler=Click to view Booster] [spoiler=EN001][spoiler=Lore]Once per turn you can inflict 500 damage to your opponent. Once per turn you can discard 1 card to inflict half this card's ATK to your opponent. You cannot declare an attack in the turn you activated this effect. [spoiler=EN002][spoiler=Lore]As long as this card remains face-up on the field, your opponent cannot select any other "DBZ" monster you control as a target of an attack. Once per turn, you can send 1 "DBZ" monster from your Deck to the Graveyard to gain 400 Life Points. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Animeftw Posted November 24, 2009 Report Share Posted November 24, 2009 Ive spotted two errors.It says "1st Editiob" and discard is spelt wrong. 10.0 (total)-1.5 (for errors)-0.25 (overall)9.25 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 24, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 24, 2009 Thx for fixes and thx for rate^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Animeftw Posted November 24, 2009 Report Share Posted November 24, 2009 your welcome. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 24, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 24, 2009 more comments please^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.area51player. Posted November 24, 2009 Report Share Posted November 24, 2009 Once per turn you can inflict 500 damage to your opponent's Life Points. By discarding 1 card you can inflict half of this card's original ATK to your opponent's Life Points. You cannot declare an attack in the turn this effect is activated.I think it's right ^^The pic is great, I'll love if you keep makin' DBZ cards] EDIT: Lol forgot the rate, 8.9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 24, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 24, 2009 DHPlasma:Once per turn you can inflict 500 damage to your opponent. You can discard 1 card to inflict half this card's ATK to your opponent (if you use this effect you cannot declare an attack). raphael'x:Once per turn you can inflict 500 damage to your opponent's Life Points. By discarding 1 card you can inflict half of this card's original ATK to your opponent's Life Points. You cannot declare an attack in the turn this effect is activated. LOL THX but Life Points is not needed, it's just 500 damage to opponent...And by discarting and can discart can both be used i think :DLast part you corrected right^^THX!!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.area51player. Posted November 24, 2009 Report Share Posted November 24, 2009 DHPlasma:Once per turn you can inflict 500 damage to your opponent. You can discard 1 card to inflict half this card's ATK to your opponent (if you use this effect you cannot declare an attack). raphael'x:Once per turn you can inflict 500 damage to your opponent's Life Points. By discarding 1 card you can inflict half of this card's original ATK to your opponent's Life Points. You cannot declare an attack in the turn this effect is activated. LOL THX but Life Points is not needed' date=' it's just 500 damage to opponent...And by discarting and can discart can both be used i think :DLast part you corrected right^^THX!!![/quote'] sry, I thought that Life Points were needed :'p Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alcander Posted November 25, 2009 Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 I like the picture, OCG is good, I'm going to start a DBZ set soon, too xD.about the effect: You can discard 1 card to inflict half this card's ATK to your opponent. How many times you can do that? o.O I think is a bit OP'ed. you should make more :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 25, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 THX alcander^^Yep, i should put a Once Per turn on it...Hope to see your DBZ set soon^^ ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Neo Fusion Posted November 25, 2009 Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 only 3 errors1. put "points of" after 500, i wud use may instead of can for the discard effect, but thas just me2. put "of" after half3. instead of "in the turn", say "during the turn" Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alcander Posted November 25, 2009 Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 only 3 errors1. put "points of" after 500' date=' i wud use may instead of can for the discard effect, but thas just me2. put "of" after half3. instead of "in the turn", say "during the turn"[/quote']you're wrong with the 3 "corrections", the first 2 "corrections" are not necessary. For the 3rd should be "during this turn".1. first effect: Once per turn, you can inflict 500 of direct damage to your opponent(I would put Life Points here)2. Once per turn, you can discard 1 card to inflict half this card's ATK to your opponent(I would put Life Points here too). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 27, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 27, 2009 Booster added Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.area51player. Posted November 27, 2009 Report Share Posted November 27, 2009 The link is broken now!Nice booster tho ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 30, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 UPDATED-VEGETA ADDED Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.area51player. Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Sweet new card ^^9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 30, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 THX raphael :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Night Posted November 30, 2009 Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 Nice cards, where did you find the Vegeta pic, looks great ;) Yea i dont rlly see that many problems with ocg and such, and the little amount i see, were already stated by the children above me (lol) but yeah continue with the set, its one of the "better" dbz sets ive seen. 9/10, btw check out "our" (me and ice') dbz Project. thank you, and keep it up ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 30, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 30, 2009 THX, i finded PIC on DeviantART ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JudmentSoul Posted December 1, 2009 Report Share Posted December 1, 2009 Those are awsome buddy90/100 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alcander Posted December 1, 2009 Report Share Posted December 1, 2009 Well vegeta is kinda "out of play" 'cause it only have 1300 ATK so your opponent will be able to destroy this card too easy. In that case the first effect makes no sense, I think Vegeta should have a better ATK like Goku, the picture is okay, minor OCG errors. Keep working! 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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