My 2nd Card

[Kane Reiger]

 

Well this is the second card I've made that I feel is finished. I know the OCG is off so please correct me where I got stuff wrong and otherwise rate and comment and all that good stuff.

Thanks

[Holygiant]

When you opponent declares an attack on another monster on your side of the field

Fix=Your field

 

The effect=what's the point? It has less DEF than ATK. They could gain millions of attack and be a completely unstoppable force of nature. The effect should be limited (counter mayhaps?)

 

6/10 (needs work)

[ragnarok1945]

next time can you write out the lore? It was a little hard to read

 

1500 atk gain are you crazy? The card has 2000 base atk already. If you're going to keep the 1500 atk gain, then this card's base atk should be no more than 1200 atk

 

And even then, this card needs drawbacks

 

5/10

[Kane Reiger]

 

When your opponent declares an attack on another monster on your field, you can change the attack target to this monster. When this effect is activated this monster gains 1500 ATK. Also if this monster is chosen as an attack target it can't be destroyed as a result of battle. For every one of your turns that this card is on the field it looses 1000 ATK, starting the the turn after it is summoned. If this monster has 0 ATK it is destroyed.

 

Ok made some adjustments, what you guys think.

[ragnarok1945]

makes it a little better, I guess I can raise the rate to 7.1/10 now