ѕ¢єρтяυм Posted November 25, 2009 Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 This is my very first card, is it good? overpowered? underpowered? if my grammar is bad, please point the errors. This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by removing all non-WATER monsters you control from play. This card cannot attack if your opponent controls 3 or more monsters. Once per turn you can equip 1 WATER monster to this card. This card gains 400 ATK points for each monster equipped to this card. When this card is destroyed, your opponent must discard the top card of his/her Deck. If the discart card was a Spell Card, your opponent can pay 500 Life Points to activate that card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ăɍȼẗîȼ Posted November 25, 2009 Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 There is some logical error. What is the original attack of the monster? Is it 0? and you also spelled discard wrong. I like the picture though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ѕ¢єρтяυм Posted November 25, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 yez, it gains 400 atk for each monster you equip to it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ăɍȼẗîȼ Posted November 25, 2009 Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 What does it start out as? 0? You didn't specify. The original attack is ?. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ѕ¢єρтяυм Posted November 25, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 Oh I changed, thankz ^^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Metal Skull Posted November 25, 2009 Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 OCG seems ok.Effect is OK and PIC is fine.I like this:7.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ѕ¢єρтяυм Posted November 25, 2009 Author Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 What can I do to make it better?thankz Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.area51player. Posted November 25, 2009 Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 Seems great for a first card o-o9/10Not sure about the OCG but seems perfect Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Holygiant Posted November 25, 2009 Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 It is very good for a first card! Complicated (that's not necessarily a bad thing) effect, good picture and overall pretty good OCG! However, where it says 'discart', did you mean 'discarded'? 9/10 (dang, we have a lot of brilliant newbies nowadays!) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sorrow. Posted November 25, 2009 Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 OCG errors Ok for a first card5/10 @ Holygiant: No not really... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ăɍȼẗîȼ Posted November 25, 2009 Report Share Posted November 25, 2009 Effect still seems kinda choppy, in my opinion, but it's my opinion. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dreamer! Posted November 26, 2009 Report Share Posted November 26, 2009 awesome card 10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tortoise Kyle Posted November 26, 2009 Report Share Posted November 26, 2009 Well, it seems like you'd only be able to equip a total of 5 monsters to it so its attack would max at 2500. Definently underpowered.7.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted November 26, 2009 Report Share Posted November 26, 2009 given only 400 atk gain per equipped monster, the 500 base atk is too low for it I'd raise it up to 1200ish instead so it can better defend itself, it IS lv8 after all 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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