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Yay Spirits!

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[spoiler=Lore]This card is also treated as a DARK monster. This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except from your Graveyard by sending 1 Spirit Monster from your hand to the Graveyard. This card returns to the Graveyard during the End Phase it is Special Summoned or flipped face-up. Increase the ATK of this card by 100 for every card in your hand. If you have more cards in your hand than your opponent, you can send a Spirit Monster from your hand to the Graveyard to Special Summon a Spirit Monster from your Graveyard, ignoring summoning conditions. Once per turn, you can remove from play 1 Spirit Monster from your hand and 2 Spirit Monsters from your Graveyard to draw 2 cards.

 

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.I have balanced the drawing ability. What are your thoughts? I have reduced his ATK to 1800 from 1900. Also, the summoned spirits now return to your hand during the End Phase. Is this balanced? Also, this card can only be summoned from the graveyard, which makes it a dead draw. (no pun intended) Should I add an effect that allows you to discard it?

 

.This card focuses on your hand, which is obvious. Should I add some way to effect your opponent's hand? Also, is the cost of summoning a spirit balanced? It allows you to summon multiple spirits per turn. This and the drawing power, (which spirits lack) could result in many spirits being summoned. Is it balanced? If not, what should I do to limit the summoning ability?

 

.Should the summoning cost be 2 spirits rather than 1?

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This card seems too reliant on having infinite amount of Spirit monsters in your hand. Yes, they can build up because they return to the hand, but this card seems like it would make tons of spirit monsters end up in the graveyard where they are useless (I made a Graveyard Spirit where they can only be summoned from the Graveyard, and return to the Graveyard... My card and your card would be a good match lol) ...Most people dont have that many Spirit monsters in a Spirit deck, so consider making this a less exclusive card. But make it exclusive enough so its not OP. Cool idea. I like it, but I'm kinda bored by the pic lol

 

7/10

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This card seems too reliant on having infinite amount of Spirit monsters in your hand. Yes' date=' they can build up because they return to the hand, but this card seems like it would make tons of spirit monsters end up in the graveyard where they are useless [b']should I make the spirits return to the hand after they're summoned?[/b](I made a Graveyard Spirit where they can only be summoned from the Graveyard, and return to the Graveyard... My card and your card would be a good match lol) ...Most people dont have that many Spirit monsters in a Spirit deck, so consider making this a less exclusive card. But make it exclusive enough so its not OP. Cool idea. I like it, but I'm kinda bored by the pic lolAny suggestions for the pic?

 

7/10

I think the Draw effect is a little OPed' date=' as this helps increase the chance your hand is bigger than your opponent. It also may give you more fuel to re-summon him.

[b']Any suggestions to balance it? How's this:[/b]

Once per turn, you can remove from play a Spirit Monster from your hand and 2 Spirit Monsters from your Graveyard to draw 2 cards.

That will reduce fuel, while still retaining the draw ability.

The OCG is Good, The Picture is good The card is good.

 

8/10

Thanks for the critique. Anything else? :D

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Yeah make them come back to your hand :) It might get OP, so you should think of a good balancing setback.

 

You could use something that's less monochrome (one/two colored) ...Thats all I got, dont really know what a cool pic could be. A grim reaper type'd be nice

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Yeah make them come back to your hand :) It might get OP' date=' so you should think of a good balancing setback.

[b']Kay, I'll make changes. :D Anything else?[/b]

 

You could use something that's less monochrome (one/two colored) ...Thats all I got, dont really know what a cool pic could be. A grim reaper type'd be nice

Thanks for the picture advice.

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ummmm...... I know your kinda overlooking the "No Special Summon" policy, but you should mention how you overlook this policy in the beginning because this card can ONLY be special summoned, and spirit monsters cant be special summoned. To make it more balanced, you could use my idea of Graveyard Spirit, so it can only be Special Summoned from the Graveyard, and it returns to the Graveyard in the End Phase. Because this is such a good card, it would be better to make it kinda tricky to summon. :)

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ummmm...... I know your kinda overlooking the "No Special Summon" policy' date=' but you should mention how you overlook this policy in the beginning because this card can ONLY be special summoned, and spirit monsters cant be special summoned. [b']Spirits are crying out for summoning power. What do you want me to do? :?[/b]To make it more balanced, you could use my idea of Graveyard Spirit, so it can only be Special Summoned from the Graveyard, and it returns to the Graveyard in the End Phase. Because this is such a good card, it would be better to make it kinda tricky to summon. :)

I LIKE that! I'll make the change asap.

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You forgot to say at the beginning of the text "This card is...."

added

 

once you add that the OCG should be just fine

 

the effect itself is relatively balanced' date=' so I rate this 9/10

[b']thank you. :)[/b]

 

The OCG is horrible..

What!? Please elaborate.

The effect is just..meh' date=' overpowered to me

[b']Please go into detail.[/b]

At the very least you got some originality to it =/

Thank you.

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The fact that the card says it's returned to the Graveyard at the End Phase of the turn it's Summoned, and later on it says "Once Per turn..." I'm not sure how the card's supposed to be used. It confuses me. Love the pic though =)

8/10

fix one of the two sentences I mentioned and I'll bump up the ratings.

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The fact that the card says it's returned to the Graveyard at the End Phase of the turn it's Summoned' date=' and later on it says "Once Per turn..." [b']changed to once per turn while this card is on the field.[/b]I'm not sure how the card's supposed to be used. It confuses me. How so?Love the pic though =)Thanks. :)

8/10

fix one of the two sentences I mentioned and I'll bump up the ratings.

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You still need to add "ignoring summoning conditions" in the beginning when talking about his summoning conditions, because he's a spirit, and OCG needs fixin. Here:

 

This card is also treated as a DARK monster. This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except from your Graveyard by sending 1 Spirit Monster from your hand to the Graveyard. This card returns to the Graveyard during the End Phase it is Special Summoned or flipped face-up. Increase the ATK of this card by 100 for every card in your hand. If you have more cards in your hand than your opponent, you can send a Spirit Monster from your hand to the Graveyard to Special Summon a Spirit Monster from your Graveyard, ignoring summoning conditions. Once per turn, you can remove from play 1 Spirit Monster from your hand and 2 Spirit Monsters from your Graveyard to draw 2 cards.

 

That should about fix all the OCG problems. This is a creative card, but, like I said, it definitely needs a better picture. Good luck man, you've got potential.

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You still need to add "ignoring summoning conditions" in the beginning when talking about his summoning conditions' date=' because he's a spirit, and OCG needs fixin. Here:

 

This card is also treated as a DARK monster. This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except from your Graveyard by sending 1 Spirit Monster from your hand to the Graveyard. This card returns to the Graveyard during the End Phase it is Special Summoned or flipped face-up. Increase the ATK of this card by 100 for every card in your hand. If you have more cards in your hand than your opponent, you can send a Spirit Monster from your hand to the Graveyard to Special Summon a Spirit Monster from your Graveyard, ignoring summoning conditions. Once per turn, you can remove from play 1 Spirit Monster from your hand and 2 Spirit Monsters from your Graveyard to draw 2 cards.[b']Thank you for the corrections. :)[/b]

 

That should about fix all the OCG problems. This is a creative card, but, like I said, it definitely needs a better picture. searching for reaper images...Good luck man, you've got potential. Thanks! You've got more potential, lol. :D

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Any suggestions to balance it? How's this:

Once per turn' date=' you can remove from play a Spirit Monster from your hand and 2 Spirit Monsters from your Graveyard to draw 2 cards.[/i']

That will reduce fuel, while still retaining the draw ability.

 

Ya, that works out better, since it makes it a -1 or a +0.

 

Anyways, I dunno why, but I like the current picture better.

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