new super set (dark mist)

[dee 1000]

my new set has the blood mist cards

also i got a new member card not made by me but by TENKAGE HE'S GREAT AND THE CARD LOOKS AMAZING.

THESES WERE MADE AS PIECES FOR ENJOYMENT AND TO SPARK SOMETHING IN THE IMAGINATION I'VE EVEN CREATED A STORY LINE DURING A TOURNAMENT BETWEEN THE WORLD'S GREATEST DUELISTS YUGI'S FIRST DUEL OPPONENT IS A MAN NAMED DEVONTE' DAVIS HE'S VERY RICH BUT WHEN THE PHARAOH WAS RELEASED SO WAS DEVONTE'S DECK AS WELL BUT IN THE END DEVONTE BEAT YUGI EASILY THEN HE DUELED KAIBA AND BEAT HIM AS WELL. BY THE END OF THE SEASON ALL WERE BEATEN BUT YUGI , KAIBA , AND JOEY TEAMED UP AND BY PULLING OUT ALL STOPS WON. BUT IT WASN'T SO EASY KAIBA , AND JOEY WERE BOTH OUT OF LIFE POINTS BY THE SECOND TURN OF THE DUAL THANKS TO THE EFFECT OF DEVONTE' THE RED SUN. YUGI WAS DOWN TO A CHOICE PLAY THE GOD CARDS OR BECOME A CARD IN DEVONTE'S DECK.

HE PLAYED THE CARDS BUT THERE WAS ONE THING DEVONTE' DIDN'T KNOW THE GODS CAN FUSE TOGETHER TO BECOME INVINCIBLE.

 

THIS SET HAS ANGEL CARDS I THINK THAT THERE MAYBE ANGEL CARDS SOME DAY SOON. IT ALSO HAS DEATHTRINTY CARDS CARDS THAT I WILL GIVE TO THOSE WHO JOIN DEATHTRINTY ONCE IT'S STARTED SO REMEMBER THIS POST AS THE START OF THE DEATHTRINTY CLUB ANYTHING AND EVERYTHING IS POSSIBLE FOR A DEATHTRINTY MEMBER.

BUT FOR REAL THOUGH I NEED TO KNOW WHAT DO YOU THINK OF MY CARDS?

 

 

SO HOW IS MY WORK?

 

 

 

 

[Home Slice]

some spelling mistakes and you put mist mist for the disciption for mist tears

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oh ya your rate is 3.5/10

[Leturn Master]

Alright, so you've got a slight problem with the English language... and your missing some things. I don't even understand your second card, so I can't rate it at all. But I'll do my best with your first one.

 

First of all, you need to use capitalization, and if I'm assuming right, you also need a dash (this thing: "-") or a comma between your titles and names. Your card is also a little on the Overpowered side.... So let's get to work:

 

Name:

Narc of Blood - Dark Mist

or

Narc of Blood, Dark Mist

(take your pick)

 

Level: 6 (not 5)

 

Type:

'Spellcaster / Warrior'

 

Stats: (you need to decrease the DEF of this guy. It's too high, even for a lvl 6 monster)

ATK/2550

DEF/1800

 

Card Lore (this is what you write in the card text):

'The Narc of Blood, Dark Mist, is the father of S-Super Tino of Blood Mist Tears. It's a wonder how he stays so young...'

or

'Dark Mist, the Narc of Blood, and father to S-Super Tino of Blood Mist Tears. It's a wonder how he stays so young...'

 

anything like that works.

 

That's all I can do! Your second card is lost on me. I recommend looking over some more realistic cards before making anymore of your own.

 

Nice job here!! :mrgreen:

[dee 1000]

oh in case your mean the narc of blood - miexent fog it's said like this mi-X-e-ant and it's the second form of narc of blood - mist tears.

[Starly_64]

no no no no no!

 

-Bad images (2 pics used 3 times, bad photoshop, etc.)

-Descriptions WITH effects (it's either one or the other)

-Lots of OCG and spelling errors

-Fake Types or two main Types instead of 1

-Extremely overpowered.

 

But don't worry. Not EVERYTHING is bad about this Set. 1/10.

[Home Slice]

I guess your cards are getting better

[Starly_64]

I guess your cards are getting better

.......

 

They have not improved. They still have problems, and even more of them, e.g. constant capitals, wrongly calling cards Tokens, etc. Heck, I don't even know what Deathtrinity cards are that separate them from just random cards. What is so unique about this set exactly? Again, if you need help with each of your cards, you can PM me.

[dee 1000]

deathtrinty cards are the cards made for deathtrinty members. the unique part is that the cards are based off of a story line me and my friends came up with when yu-gi-oh was up to the point of the god cards. so hopefully you'll enjoy it.

and I'll be posting the story line soon.

and also after bleach came out and deathnote came out this was all we'd talk about in school.

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oh man i forgot that deathtrinty is a club we came up with made up of the names of shows we loved called death note and trinity blood.

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oh and also didn't you read the effect of the falling to fire the shock of pain. it says that you get to summon four angel tokens i made the card so people would know what i was taking about.