kliffi Posted December 5, 2009 Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 [spoiler=[color=red]Lore[/color]]2 monsters with the same name + "Exiled Force"For each monster in your Graveyard, this monster loses 100 DEF and gains 100 ATK. For each monster in your opponents Graveyard, this monster loses 100 ATK and gains 100 DEF. If this card destroys a monster by battle, Special Summon 1 "Black Soldier Token" (Warrior/DARK/Level 1/ATK 100/DEF 100) to your opponent's side of the field in Defense Position. "Black Soldier Tokens" cannot be used as a Tribute for a Tribute Summon (or Set) and cannot declare an attack. This card gains 100 ATK and DEF for every "Black Soldier Token on the field. Your opponent can discard 1 card to destroy 1 "Black Soldier Token" they control. When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, destroy all "Black Soldier Tokens" on the field. --- Fixed it. Big time. lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alaster72 Posted December 5, 2009 Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 Honestly I kind of find that effect just plain annoying for both sides. Plus the "Your opponent controls all "Black Soldier Tokens" on their side of the field." thing is just a waste of time. Obviously they would control the tokens on their field its not like you'll have his tokens attack himself! "The card is then sent to the shuffled into its owner's respective Deck" sent to the what? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tunerwizard Posted December 5, 2009 Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 Oh my!I dont have time to fix the OCGAlso its mightfully(dont know if that is a real word) OPed. Consider HALFING the amount of text used as pointed out already.6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Adogadog8 Posted December 5, 2009 Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 The card's effect about the Tokens doesn't have much OCG problems, but it's just the effect for the Tokens is extremely confusing, the card is also unrealistic with 1 star and it's OP'ed even with 12! You should make like a Spell with half that effect for Tokens and halve this ones effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sorrow. Posted December 5, 2009 Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 Woah OCG problems long Effect but OCG problemsPicture is spectacular6/10 (= Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted December 5, 2009 Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 that is one REALLY long effect, WAY too complicated for a mere lv1 monster The picture looks great though, so I'll rate it 7.9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kliffi Posted December 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 Alright. Thanks for critiques. I think I'ma just scrap the concept cuz its too elaborate and come up with a totally different one rofl :D This was purely experimental. I'll fix this card ASAP. Thanks again. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-DOOM Posted December 5, 2009 Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 effect is waaaaay too long Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kliffi Posted December 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 I completely re-did this card. Please re-comment, comment, rate, the works, etc. Thanks :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Home Slice Posted December 5, 2009 Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 it's ok 6.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-DOOM Posted December 5, 2009 Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 3 monsters with the same name + "Exiled Forces"For each monster in your Graveyard, this monster loses 100 DEF and gains 100 ATK. For each monster in your opponents Graveyard, this monster loses 100 ATK and gains 100 DEF. If this card destroys a monster by battle, Special Summon 1 "Black Soldier Token" (Warrior/DARK/Level 1/ATK 100/DEF 100) to your opponent's side of the field in Defense Position. "Black Soldier Tokens" cannot be used as a Tribute for a Tribute Summon (or Set) and cannot declare an attack. This card gains 100 ATK and DEF for every "Black Soldier Token on the field. Your opponent can discard 1 card to destroy 1 "Black Soldier Token" they control. When this card is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard, destroy all "Black Soldier Tokens" on the field. puh i hope this is right.The ATK/DEF gain/lose effect is interesting, but i don't know if its really useful. Card seems not OP, rather UP cause 4 monster are too much, so reduce it to 2 monster with the same name. and 1 more thing, it's "Exiled Force" not forces^^8,5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
kliffi Posted December 5, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 Fixed. Any other ideas? I love this pic, and I hope if fits the card effect and name :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-DOOM Posted December 5, 2009 Report Share Posted December 5, 2009 Pic is great and fits the name perfectly^^ 10/10 for the pic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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