Guest Zeonark Posted December 20, 2009 Report Share Posted December 20, 2009 Oh lord. That n00b Zeonark is making cards. Great, just freaking great. [spoiler=Lore]This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be special summon unless you tribute 2 Machine or Warrior-Type monsters. Once per turn, you can destroy one monster on the field. This card cannot attack the turn this effect was activated. If there are 3 or more Machine-Type monsters on the field, your opponent gains 400 Life Points for each one during each of your opponent's standby phases. If your opponent has 2000 Life Points more than you, this card can attack twice during the same battle phase. I know what you're thinking. "This card is overpowered. Wtf." But really...Okay. It is overpowered. Fix it please. D: Also I didn't remember how to word the first sentence so could someone help me with the OCG? Thanks. Oh and one part of the effect on the card itself is missing, ignore it and read it from the lore posted. Nothing harsh please, kind of sensitive to harsh crits. Lol. Oh and the "Distortion" part has a different definition the way I use it. It's meaning like screwing with the Space-Time Continuum or something in different dimensions. Oh, expect to see this again soon. Because it's a little test before I change it into a new card to join the Archetype Hero war. *CoughOHGODIT'SAPOSERCough* Credit to Leo for the image. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Sp1at Posted December 20, 2009 Report Share Posted December 20, 2009 I think its good to mePic i have never seen its not blary 10/10OCG The first sentence and second sentence I think should be "This card cannot be normal summoned or set. This card may not be special summon unless you remove 2 machine or warrior types from play" but its good 8/10Good balance 9/1027/30 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Zeonark Posted December 20, 2009 Report Share Posted December 20, 2009 Actually, it's just tributing them. Not removing from play. xD Thanks though. Also thanks for the ratings! Huh. I thought it was OP'd. xD Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ghost Ryder Posted December 20, 2009 Report Share Posted December 20, 2009 Very good card for a new member. Awesome image, good OCG for a new member, 8.9/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Zeonark Posted December 20, 2009 Report Share Posted December 20, 2009 Thank you very much Daco. Looks like I was nervous for nothing since I got two good ratings. :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Susman Posted December 20, 2009 Report Share Posted December 20, 2009 Lol that is Saber from fate/stay nightthe pic is something i have seen before and the effect doesn't seem to fit saber6.8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Zeonark Posted December 20, 2009 Report Share Posted December 20, 2009 Lol that is Saber from fate/stay nightthe pic is something i have seen before and the effect doesn't seem to fit saber6.8/10 Never heard of it. Sorry.I was too focused on the gun really. Lol. If that is a gun.Thanks for the rating. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Susman Posted December 20, 2009 Report Share Posted December 20, 2009 that is her sword the excalibur Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Zeonark Posted December 20, 2009 Report Share Posted December 20, 2009 that is her sword the excalibur Now I see it. Thought it was part of a gun with that metal near it. o_oOh well. Lol. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Susman Posted December 20, 2009 Report Share Posted December 20, 2009 no harm done it is invisible through most of the game Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted December 20, 2009 Report Share Posted December 20, 2009 change is to are in the 5th sentence, that's about the only error I found OCG is very good for someone new and for the last effect, I'd change it so that it has to be your opponent's LP higher than yours by 2000 or more for this card to attack twice. If it can be the other way around it can get Oped 9/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Zeonark Posted December 20, 2009 Report Share Posted December 20, 2009 9/10 from Ragnarok? Yikes. I can't seriously be that good. Fixes made, I'll make the changes to the actual card later/tomorrow. Thanks guys. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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