5 new cards

[JDog100]

Look

[Wes16]

Way OP'ed

 

Unoriginal effects

 

Really bad OCG

 

Don't use fake types.

 

2/10

[Emerald Fan]

Your cards are not terrible, but they do need a lot of work. Most of them are a bit overpowered, like Demon Dragon and Flaming Phoenix since it is attacking directly. Try adding a cost so the cards are more balanced, like Mohawk Dragon which is pretty close but still needs work. Also work on using the Official Card Grammar as much as possible, 'cause these cards need it. Not bad cards, just a work in progress. 5/10

[Silver]

I'll analyse one of the cards, hopefully you'll follow suit.

 

MOHAWK DRAGON:

Right, firstly NO 4-star monster is going to have 2000 ATK and over 200 DEF without a cost, so you either promote it to a 5-star monster or add in a flaw, like "Once per turn, you must discard 1 card from your hand. If you do not, destroy this card."

Next comes the effect. Improve the OCG, as I can't even understand what you're saying. I'll try to improve it:

"When this card is successfully Normal Summoned, you may remove up to five Trap Cards on your side of the field from play. Increase the ATK of this card by 200 x the number of trap cards removed in this way".

If that's the effect, then either decrease the attack or increase the level.

[JDog100]

OK!!!!!!!!!!!

[Masey 4 AVFC]

THESE Cards r wrong in every way 0/10 no offense

[xzMasteRzx]

Ok. Bad OCG and ATK is too high. Please try to think things through when making cards. Look at Dragon of Darkness. He can attack TWICE in the SAME BATTLE PHASE! That's 7000 points of damage. WTF! Two turns and the duel is over! Please try harder next time, and try to think how it would be in a real duel.

 

Score: EPIC FAIL/10. (Please don't be discouraged. I'm just saying that you need to try harder. Try to think. Research and look how people write the effects, OK? :))

[waterwhip]

Try writing the effects like it would be written if it was a real card.

 

For Dragon of Darkness weaken him or take out the effect.

[Guest Zeonark]

Score: EPIC FAIL/10. (Please don't be discouraged.)

 

When you try to make yourself sound like you're not trying to discourage someone, using EPIC FAIL/10 is not the way to do it.

 

OCG Fixes and Rates:

Demon Dragon

Fix: Once per turn, this card can destroy one face-up Spell Card.

Rate: 3/10

This card is UP'd I think. Plus the effect is boring and too simple.

 

Dragon Of Darkness

Fix: This card can attack twice during the same battle phase.

Rate: 1/10

This card is WAY too OP'd. 3500 ATK plus a second shot with no drawbacks or costs is too strong. Either add summoning costs or a drawback.

 

Flaming Phoenix

Fix: This card can attack your opponent directly.

Rate: 3/10

Overpowered...again. 2300 points of direct damage from a LV 5 monster? No. Add a drawback or increase the level please.

 

Magma Dragon:

Fix: Once per turn, this card can destroy one Spell or Trap card.

Rate: 5/10

Probably you're best card out of these. I'd add more of an effect.

 

Mohawk Dragon

Fix: Once per turn, you can remove from play 5 trap cards from your graveyard and increase this monster's ATK by 500 points for each.

Rate: 4/10

It was better the first time you posted this. Level is too low. Needs a drawback or ATK decrease.

 

 

These can be better. Just fix 'em up.

[migueleiro]

they are goods they are like foriven.

[ragnarok1945]

fake types, boring effects

 

and they have bad OCG to them

 

2/10