TurtleHavoc Posted December 26, 2009 Report Share Posted December 26, 2009 These are my first couple of cards. Nyeeh. Not sure what it's based around, yet. Probably power, with the drawback of taking chances. Comment, CONSTRUCTIVELY criticize, rate, etc. [spoiler=Dirge the Faithless Knight]Dirge the Faithless Knight - Before this card attacks, your opponent selects 1 monster they control to switch places with this card at the end of the Battle Phase. The selected monster cannot be destroyed, but Damage Calculation is applied normally. While this card is in your opponent's control by this effect, any damage you would receive from this card is reduced to 0. At the end of your opponent's Battle Phase this card is returned to it's original Card Zone on your field. Any card in that Card Zone is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard.Original Image [spoiler=Means of Loyalty]Means of Loyalty - As long as this card is faced-up, all "Faithless" monsters must stay on their current side of the field. Pay a quarter of your Life Points during each of your Standby Phases. If you do not, destroy this card.Original Image -Faithless Swordsman- A treacherous and unreliable swordsman who lost his beloved in a tragedy. Loathing every living thing, all that fuels him now is his ambitious lust for power.Original Image-Skept the Faithless Devourer - 1 DARK Tuner + 1 or more DARK non-tuner monstersThis card's ATK is equal to the combined Levels of all "Faithless" monsters you control, except this card, x 500. Before you declare an attack, toss a coin and call heads or tails. If you call it right, you attack normally. If you call it wrong you can choose one of these effects :- Your opponent can either change this card into Defense Position and end the Battle Phase or select one of their monsters to switch places with this card until your next Standby Phase. This card returns to it's original Card Zone once back in your control. Any card in that Card Zone is destroyed and sent to the graveyard.- Tribute one Level 5 or higher "Faithless" monster and attack normally.Original Image Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Krokosaurus Posted December 26, 2009 Report Share Posted December 26, 2009 Bad OCG, a bit overpowered, but good pic and nameQuite good for your first card!8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted December 26, 2009 Report Share Posted December 26, 2009 OCG errors, you can use the OCG thread to help you on that it has too much atk for lv6, raise the lv up to 8 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TurtleHavoc Posted December 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 26, 2009 I made a few grammar changes, but that's pretty much it. It's suppose to fall in the lines of Goblin Attack Force and the like, those oldies. They have high attack, but a drawback effect. Sure, this guy's attack is high, but his drawback is just as drastic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Limited Edition KING Posted December 26, 2009 Report Share Posted December 26, 2009 OCG fix and I improved the effect to make it better its still the same effect but easier to understand. If this card attacks or is attacked select 1 monster your opponent controls and end the Battle Phase. At the end of the Battle Phase this card switches places with the selected monster. While this card is in your opponent's control, any damage you would recieve is reduced to 0. At the end of your opponent's Battle Phase this card is returned to it's original Monster Card Zone on your field. Any card in that Monster Card Zone is destroyed and sent to the Graveyard. I also think that effect would be better not bad for a first card 8/10 You may wish to introduce yourself in the introductions section on the forums ^_^ If you need any help with a new card or anything about the forum feel free to send me a PM ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TurtleHavoc Posted December 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 26, 2009 Thanks, I kinda nerfed Faithless Knight down again, changed his picture too. I added a new card, hehehehehehehehe. I aim to turn this into an archtype :1 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Zeonark Posted December 26, 2009 Report Share Posted December 26, 2009 Quite the original effect. I haven't seen it anyway, so it's original to me. Means Of Loyalty's picture doesn't even seem to fit it's name. o_o Can't fix the OCG, since I have no clue how to word that. Looks fine to me. Can't wait to see the archetype. 8D8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TurtleHavoc Posted December 26, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 26, 2009 Means of Loyalty = Means to keep someone loyal. And since my archtype is "Faithless", they don't stick to one master. Their loyalty is best gained through hard, cold gold coins ;D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TurtleHavoc Posted December 28, 2009 Author Report Share Posted December 28, 2009 Added Faithless Swordsman and Skept the blah blah... At first I was gonna make a vanillie for the lulz. Then it led me to work on Skept. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted December 28, 2009 Report Share Posted December 28, 2009 for Skept, you can just say "toss a coin and call it", no need to say the heads or tails part as long as you don't make another Skept monster, its atk determining effect is fine 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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